Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Lot of truth in the statement small town gossip will die down when they find someone new to gossip about.
Pat seemed to try to make himself something special setting with Alexandra in the diner uninvited. Cord appears none too pleased by Pat's actions.
Cord did not seem happy to be auctioned off at the fund raiser for the church.
Seemed Pat has more than a passing interest in Alexandra, and some nerve coming to the ranch to ask her for a date. Seemed full of himself.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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Lot of truth in the statement small town gossip will die down when they find someone new to gossip about.
Pat seemed to try to make himself something special setting with Alexandra in the diner uninvited. Cord appears none too pleased by Pat's actions.
Cord did not seem happy to be auctioned off at the fund raiser for the church.
Seemed Pat has more than a passing interest in Alexandra, and some nerve coming to the ranch to ask her for a date. Seemed full of himself.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2022
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I am so sorry that you had read this with no money attached, but I honored you did. Yes, everything you mentioned will be important in the further.
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Hopefully it will make your chapter All-Time Best. That was my intention for reviewing it. The MC not that big a deal.
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You're sweet.
Comment from Sankey
Glad to be catching up with these. Another good chapter and glad I have plenty of phoney money. You need to notify me of these posts as Sally Law does as I was not getting notified from her sometimes. Will get to next one tomorrow.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Glad to be catching up with these. Another good chapter and glad I have plenty of phoney money. You need to notify me of these posts as Sally Law does as I was not getting notified from her sometimes. Will get to next one tomorrow.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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I may not be able to post later today. It's my mom's birthday party. I'm sneaking on right now, waiting to use the bathroom. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Dinner and dancing on the agenda for Alexandra and Cordero. Why is there always a competitor involved when young adults are romancing. These two people will perhaps end up together. But it sounds like Pat is ready to compete.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Dinner and dancing on the agenda for Alexandra and Cordero. Why is there always a competitor involved when young adults are romancing. These two people will perhaps end up together. But it sounds like Pat is ready to compete.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Pat will be a problem in more ways than one. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Hope you've had a nice visit and glad you were able to post. Now, I just wish I'd been in town and had time to have read and reviewed before so late in the week. But I've been at Super Bowl and I'm so far behind. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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Hope you've had a nice visit and glad you were able to post. Now, I just wish I'd been in town and had time to have read and reviewed before so late in the week. But I've been at Super Bowl and I'm so far behind. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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I'm glas you were able to see the Super Bowl in person. WOW!! Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
I see you're using lots of dialogue to move your story forward. This method allows reader to get a good view into each character's personality. Also, I was surprised to see your posting. Hope you're enjoying your visit.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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I see you're using lots of dialogue to move your story forward. This method allows reader to get a good view into each character's personality. Also, I was surprised to see your posting. Hope you're enjoying your visit.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
I almost missed this one. For some reason it didn't show up on my "fans" list, or I simply overlooked it. At any rate, I'm glad I found it here. With the addition of Pat, you really ramped up the intrigue!
"Rosa went inside.
"Cordero went into the barn, and Alexandra went to the corral." [Nothing major but you might want to look into another verb besides "went", which you have in each of three successive sentences.]
"Now you understand how deep the rival goes." ["... how deep the RIVALRY (?) goes."]
Be safe on your vacation, Barbara.
Jay
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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I almost missed this one. For some reason it didn't show up on my "fans" list, or I simply overlooked it. At any rate, I'm glad I found it here. With the addition of Pat, you really ramped up the intrigue!
"Rosa went inside.
"Cordero went into the barn, and Alexandra went to the corral." [Nothing major but you might want to look into another verb besides "went", which you have in each of three successive sentences.]
"Now you understand how deep the rival goes." ["... how deep the RIVALRY (?) goes."]
Be safe on your vacation, Barbara.
Jay
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sanku
Pat seems to have some unhealthy character traits. He assumed that Alexandra would take to him since she was from New York.
I am enjoying this .I like Cord..He seems steady and strong.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Pat seems to have some unhealthy character traits. He assumed that Alexandra would take to him since she was from New York.
I am enjoying this .I like Cord..He seems steady and strong.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Pat, we will see later, is not a good guy. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
I realized this morning I wasn't getting notifications when you posted so I am a little behind. I will definitely be going back through these chapters to catch up.
As always your work is well written! Good vocab, style, and no errors that I saw.
I like the plot line that you are building with the long standing rivalry between Pat and Cord, and I am very curious where that will be going!
I also immediately fell in love with Alexandra and her character. I like that she is a city girl on a ranch, I like how polite she is and how she acted towards Pat and his advances.
Very well done I am looking forward to reading the other chapters!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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I realized this morning I wasn't getting notifications when you posted so I am a little behind. I will definitely be going back through these chapters to catch up.
As always your work is well written! Good vocab, style, and no errors that I saw.
I like the plot line that you are building with the long standing rivalry between Pat and Cord, and I am very curious where that will be going!
I also immediately fell in love with Alexandra and her character. I like that she is a city girl on a ranch, I like how polite she is and how she acted towards Pat and his advances.
Very well done I am looking forward to reading the other chapters!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I am enjoying your story and look forward to the next chapter. it's sad that Cord and Pat have known each other since childhood but Pat is still prejudiced. Ali seems to have enough character to find him unacceptable even as a friend. You might want to add a Y to stealth and I don't understand a phrase you used (I'm in Midwest IL) "You're a trip but made your point."
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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I am enjoying your story and look forward to the next chapter. it's sad that Cord and Pat have known each other since childhood but Pat is still prejudiced. Ali seems to have enough character to find him unacceptable even as a friend. You might want to add a Y to stealth and I don't understand a phrase you used (I'm in Midwest IL) "You're a trip but made your point."
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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I grew up in Midwest IL. LOL It basically translates to a character. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
You have the relationship and story moving. Good work.
"I need to talk to him. Can I go to the pond?" She glanced toward the door. Where is it?" - quotation marks
Pat and I have history; probably since elementary school." - comma?
"I wonder who that could be. - closing quotes
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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You have the relationship and story moving. Good work.
"I need to talk to him. Can I go to the pond?" She glanced toward the door. Where is it?" - quotation marks
Pat and I have history; probably since elementary school." - comma?
"I wonder who that could be. - closing quotes
Best wishes.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thank you for those catches. I have no clue what happened to those quotations marks. I swear gremblins took them out. LOL I appreciate the help.
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I absolutely understand!""
(git back where you belong, you little stinker.)
