Reviews from

The Dawning

contest entry

7 total reviews 
Comment from Sally Law
Exceptional
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Powerful message in short verse free form poetry. All your poems are six worthy, dear Debra. An overdue six for you today, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal xoxo's

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
    Hello Sal :) Thank you so very much, for your kind feedback and generous star rating. I appreciate you xx
    Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Shirley McLain
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I like your free from poem. It is so very true. As humans, I think it's built into us to fix things. Some just carry it further than others. You did a terrific job. Have a great evening. Shirley

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
    Thank you so much, Shirley, for your lovely feedback :) Best wishes, Debra
Comment from justafan
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"some broken things aren't mine to mend", sadly true. Some of us continue to try however.
This is a lovely entry into the Free Form Poetry Contest.
Best wishes :)
Beautiful picture as well.
Always
Justafan of yours
Missy

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
    Thank you so much, Missy, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from lyenochka
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Beautifully said! I loved how the "troubled thoughts pecked at dreams" giving a physical nature to them. I liked the assonance and consonance of "as the sun rose over east street" and the double dawns of "it dawned on me" from the physical and the mental dawning. And I love the final peaceful summary of that final line. We moms want to fix things that trouble our loved ones, but we can leave them up to God and release those "trouble thoughts" to Him.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
    Thank you so much, Helen, for your detailed feedback of my poem. I appreciate it :) I'm happy that you enjoyed the read! Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
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I really like this little nighttime adventure. It's easy to identify with troubling thoughts keeping one awake, but the final sentence shows a remarkable wisdom.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
    Thank you so much, Verna, for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it :) Best wishes, Debra
reply by Verna Cole Mitchell on 12-Feb-2022
Comment from Susan Newell
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Debra,

I would give this a six if I had one. Sometimes it takes us a lifetime to realize that we can not fix everything, and that neither are we responsible for everything. Your poem has expressed that with simplicity and with true poetry. Very, very nice.

Sue

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
    Hello Susan :) Thank you so much for your kind and generous feedback. I truly appreciate it. Best wishes as always, Debra
reply by Susan Newell on 12-Feb-2022
    You are most welcome.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
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Great poem for the contest. I love the idea of troubled thoughts PECKED at your dreams. The ending is also a stunning insight that relieves the tension of the troubled thoughts. Well done.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2022

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
    Thank you so much, Theodore, for your kind feedback. I appreciate it :)
    Best wishes, Debra