Unspoken words.
A supernatural fiction story.7 total reviews
Comment from Marienkiefer
Very interesting supernatural, with a twist at the end,
-Sparkling moment in your piece: He spoke the unspoken to someone who knew him better than anyone. A sort of mental telepathy...Knowing someone so well as to finish their sentence, complete a thought. Or not say anything at all. Non verbal is a powerful and emotive form of communication.
Your writing is a wonderful eye into human psyche.
Wonderful writing and well structured.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Very interesting supernatural, with a twist at the end,
-Sparkling moment in your piece: He spoke the unspoken to someone who knew him better than anyone. A sort of mental telepathy...Knowing someone so well as to finish their sentence, complete a thought. Or not say anything at all. Non verbal is a powerful and emotive form of communication.
Your writing is a wonderful eye into human psyche.
Wonderful writing and well structured.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much Marienkiefer, for your kind review. ~Mel~
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You told a complete story using only a few words. I'm impressed. As you know it takes me a lot of words to say anything. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You told a complete story using only a few words. I'm impressed. As you know it takes me a lot of words to say anything. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thank you Barbara, for your kind review and good wishes. ~Mel~
Comment from robyn corum
Mel,
Well. Certainly. Obviously, she has every right to sad, first of all, AND mad. How DARE you leave her like that. How RUDE. I guess you were tired of hanging around and just decided to go gallivanting off to another dimension, huh? Just like a man. Only thinking of themselves.
hehe
This was a cute little story with an unexpected ending. In truth, this husband was awfully nice to stay a bit and try to comfort his wife - even though she doesn't even seem to know he's there. That's true love, isn't it?
It's SO good to see you! I hope you are well. AND alive!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Mel,
Well. Certainly. Obviously, she has every right to sad, first of all, AND mad. How DARE you leave her like that. How RUDE. I guess you were tired of hanging around and just decided to go gallivanting off to another dimension, huh? Just like a man. Only thinking of themselves.
hehe
This was a cute little story with an unexpected ending. In truth, this husband was awfully nice to stay a bit and try to comfort his wife - even though she doesn't even seem to know he's there. That's true love, isn't it?
It's SO good to see you! I hope you are well. AND alive!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Hi Robyn, yup after 60 years of marriage habits die hard. He didn't want to leave his dear wife behind on her own.
It's nice to hear from you again, I trust you are well, as I am. Take care. ~Mel~
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces a dead protagonist's unreachable ghost world exchange with Susan, his grieving wife, whom he left behind alive.
The work highlights her sorry state opposite him at the breakfast table; his desperate bid to assuage her woes and how the barrier between them renders them incommunicado.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes reminiscent of the gulf of severance between the living and the dead.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces a dead protagonist's unreachable ghost world exchange with Susan, his grieving wife, whom he left behind alive.
The work highlights her sorry state opposite him at the breakfast table; his desperate bid to assuage her woes and how the barrier between them renders them incommunicado.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes reminiscent of the gulf of severance between the living and the dead.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you Lloyd, for your kind and detailed review. I'm pleased you liked it. ~Mel~
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Remain Blessed.
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Thank you Lloyd, for your thoughtful review. ~Mel~
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from BethShelby
This is excellent flash fiction. It is written beautifully and until the last word, we do not know what is going on. This is the way flash fiction should be and it is also supernatural fiction.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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This is excellent flash fiction. It is written beautifully and until the last word, we do not know what is going on. This is the way flash fiction should be and it is also supernatural fiction.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you Beth, for your kind review. I'm pleased you liked it. ~Mel~
Comment from Giftedone.Eric Wallace .
I'm gonna give you 5 cause that story came alive thank you for sharing Very good topic you have chosen the words unspoken keep up the good work very well done
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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I'm gonna give you 5 cause that story came alive thank you for sharing Very good topic you have chosen the words unspoken keep up the good work very well done
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much. ~Mel~
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your supernatural flash fiction story.
It is cleverly written, leading the reader in a certain direction and then diverting them down an unexpected turning at the end.
Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your supernatural flash fiction story.
It is cleverly written, leading the reader in a certain direction and then diverting them down an unexpected turning at the end.
Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you Debra, for your kind review. ~Mel~
