Tanka Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Sweet Scents"Romantic Tanka Poems
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Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Beautifully written poem with an equally beautiful sentiment. I enjoyed the artwork and color story. They contributed to the mood of your poem. I hope you keep writing and submitting your work.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
Beautifully written poem with an equally beautiful sentiment. I enjoyed the artwork and color story. They contributed to the mood of your poem. I hope you keep writing and submitting your work.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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I love your picture with your hair fixed in freda khalo style. Thank you very much, KL. You are very kind. I appreciate your time and review. Blessed be.
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Comment from Ulla
Hola Marival, this is a beautiful tanka. It's such a lovely.portrait you paint with your words in this tanka . Then pivot line is perfect, I hardly noticed as it effortlessly brought us on to the last lines. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
Hola Marival, this is a beautiful tanka. It's such a lovely.portrait you paint with your words in this tanka . Then pivot line is perfect, I hardly noticed as it effortlessly brought us on to the last lines. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Ulla. Have a wonderful weekend.
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Comment from Mary Vigasin
Your words are as gentle and sensual as the picture you choose.
One can almost smell the vanilla, sandalwood, and gardenias in the air.
Thank you for the sweet words.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
Your words are as gentle and sensual as the picture you choose.
One can almost smell the vanilla, sandalwood, and gardenias in the air.
Thank you for the sweet words.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Mary. Have a wonderful weekend.
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Comment from Tom Horonzy
Of these three listed today this is my least favorite. Dreams and Sweet Scents are my favorites and are deserving of five stars. So what I am going to do is cut and paste this comment to be sure to give you credit on those as well as this one. Where did your interest in Japanese life begin?
Do you have a piece written describing it/ if so please share.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
Of these three listed today this is my least favorite. Dreams and Sweet Scents are my favorites and are deserving of five stars. So what I am going to do is cut and paste this comment to be sure to give you credit on those as well as this one. Where did your interest in Japanese life begin?
Do you have a piece written describing it/ if so please share.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Tom.
Comment from AP Apgar
I like this poem - Long after she's gone...the old Emperor must be in a physical location with stimuli that are triggering memories in his subconscious, (that retains 100% of all memories unlike the conscious mind) reminding his senses with the smells of vanilla and sandalwood; and the views of objects in his bedchamber, perhaps with gardenias in full bloom outside the window...all reminding him of the virility of his faded youth, love and sensuality. As visually portrayed in the artwork. Woven together nicely in your poem. Nice dream.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
I like this poem - Long after she's gone...the old Emperor must be in a physical location with stimuli that are triggering memories in his subconscious, (that retains 100% of all memories unlike the conscious mind) reminding his senses with the smells of vanilla and sandalwood; and the views of objects in his bedchamber, perhaps with gardenias in full bloom outside the window...all reminding him of the virility of his faded youth, love and sensuality. As visually portrayed in the artwork. Woven together nicely in your poem. Nice dream.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your exceptional detailed review, AP, you are very kind.
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Comment from royowen
Oh yes indeed, that sense of smell is a very strong prompt for the memory, it's the first thing that assails the memory to provoke the imagery to stir the soul, well done, a great post, well done blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
Oh yes indeed, that sense of smell is a very strong prompt for the memory, it's the first thing that assails the memory to provoke the imagery to stir the soul, well done, a great post, well done blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Roy. Blessings.
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Welcome Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
What a great poem about fragrances! Gardenias are so pungent that it's surprising that her fragrances of vanilla and sandalwood "lingers lazily" with the emperor "long after she is gone." She must be some lady!
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
What a great poem about fragrances! Gardenias are so pungent that it's surprising that her fragrances of vanilla and sandalwood "lingers lazily" with the emperor "long after she is gone." She must be some lady!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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LoL. Yes she was quite a lady.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Helen. Blessings.
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Comment from Giftedone.Eric Wallace .
OK thank you for sharing this phone keep up the good work you left me with but once again it was creative I came from you keep up the good work but the good work and have a blessed day
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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
OK thank you for sharing this phone keep up the good work you left me with but once again it was creative I came from you keep up the good work but the good work and have a blessed day
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Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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I'm sorry I don't understand what you mean.
Thank you for the review.
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Overall it was a good job
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Overall it was a good job
Comment from aryr
This was a fantastic Tanka, Gypsy. I was a little surprised that Vanilla was a world wide scent and that Gardenias scent was a favorite of Japan. But it all made sense with your words. I found the picture of the maiden with the art work on her back beautiful but the dragon was magnificent. Very well done, immensely enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
This was a fantastic Tanka, Gypsy. I was a little surprised that Vanilla was a world wide scent and that Gardenias scent was a favorite of Japan. But it all made sense with your words. I found the picture of the maiden with the art work on her back beautiful but the dragon was magnificent. Very well done, immensely enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, Aryr. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome, Gypsy. Blessed be & hugs.
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I wrote something for you :)
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Comment from dellsworthpoet
You always make your poems not only stay to Japanese forms, but to Oriental ideas. A very evocative poem. The picture again adds to the essence of the words.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
You always make your poems not only stay to Japanese forms, but to Oriental ideas. A very evocative poem. The picture again adds to the essence of the words.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
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You are welcome.