The Amazing Heist
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "A Reason To Celebrate"A team of six plan their final heist.
10 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Paul is a hard worker. Somehow he really wants to please Abby. She is the leader but I guess only his ego is stroked. I hope he hasn't become over confident. We are learning a lot about his character. You are showing instead of telling. I've been told. that is the better approach. Are you going to continue this? It's like when a tv series ends and it must have been unplanned. The show just wasn't renewed.
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Paul is a hard worker. Somehow he really wants to please Abby. She is the leader but I guess only his ego is stroked. I hope he hasn't become over confident. We are learning a lot about his character. You are showing instead of telling. I've been told. that is the better approach. Are you going to continue this? It's like when a tv series ends and it must have been unplanned. The show just wasn't renewed.
Comment Written 07-May-2022
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Thank you, Liz for reviewing and your great comments. Yep, once I get back from Atlanta, Georgia I will be able to finish at least a couple of chapters.
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***yay*** Be safe.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A Reason To Celebrate
by aryr
Wonderful chapter, it's the first one I read and it sounds very exciting. I enjoyed the plan for the heist. Your characters--Abby, Henry, Sally, Paul, Billy and Freddie are getting the plan together. I feel a little lost... I may have to go back to previous chapters so I know what is going on.
Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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A Reason To Celebrate
by aryr
Wonderful chapter, it's the first one I read and it sounds very exciting. I enjoyed the plan for the heist. Your characters--Abby, Henry, Sally, Paul, Billy and Freddie are getting the plan together. I feel a little lost... I may have to go back to previous chapters so I know what is going on.
Well done!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Gypsy for reading, reviewing and your great comments. Blessed be n hugs.
Comment from poetwatch
Alie, I have been reading your stories for a long time, and this is the first time I have hears about "The Amazing Heist." Is it on your profile? I need to look into it. Anyway, this is a very good story. Whatever they are planning it seems they are prepared. Thank you for bringing this to light.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Alie, I have been reading your stories for a long time, and this is the first time I have hears about "The Amazing Heist." Is it on your profile? I need to look into it. Anyway, this is a very good story. Whatever they are planning it seems they are prepared. Thank you for bringing this to light.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you Jose for reviewing and your great comments. Yes it is on my profile but I just started it up again.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
including the googles and gloves - goggles?
Now it was definitely a party time - 'a' party time, or just 'party time'?
and greatly accepted. - greatly 'appreciated', or 'happily' accepted???
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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including the googles and gloves - goggles?
Now it was definitely a party time - 'a' party time, or just 'party time'?
and greatly accepted. - greatly 'appreciated', or 'happily' accepted???
Best wishes.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Wayne for reviewing and your comments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
All dressed up and ready to go and no skin showing! They probably look like a bunch of aliens and would not be recognised! You made me smile here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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All dressed up and ready to go and no skin showing! They probably look like a bunch of aliens and would not be recognised! You made me smile here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much my friend, for reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from robyn corum
Alie,
Uh huh. *smile* Everything is progressing nicely. I don't remember what they are after but looks like they are working together well to reach their goals.
Some notes, if I may:
1.) Paul was truly excited because he had finally figured out what he was meant too.
--> huh? meant to do? the ending confuses me... you might check on that?
2.) totally rubber, including the (goggles) and gloves.
3.) arranged so that each of them (would have) a copy of the item involved.
Keep up the good work! Thanks!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Alie,
Uh huh. *smile* Everything is progressing nicely. I don't remember what they are after but looks like they are working together well to reach their goals.
Some notes, if I may:
1.) Paul was truly excited because he had finally figured out what he was meant too.
--> huh? meant to do? the ending confuses me... you might check on that?
2.) totally rubber, including the (goggles) and gloves.
3.) arranged so that each of them (would have) a copy of the item involved.
Keep up the good work! Thanks!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you Robyn for reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I haven't seen any of the previous chapters to this, Alie, so I don't know the background, or what the heist is all about, but this chapter is well-written and it's peaked my interest. The only thing I can suggest is, do more showing rather than just telling. This can often be accomplished through dialogue.
A couple of spags: "he had finally figured out what he was meant too(to)."
"arranged so that each of them (had) a copy of the item involved."
"needed for the heist(space)-at least all the ideas." - without a space heist and at look like a strange hyphenated word. :)
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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I haven't seen any of the previous chapters to this, Alie, so I don't know the background, or what the heist is all about, but this chapter is well-written and it's peaked my interest. The only thing I can suggest is, do more showing rather than just telling. This can often be accomplished through dialogue.
A couple of spags: "he had finally figured out what he was meant too(to)."
"arranged so that each of them (had) a copy of the item involved."
"needed for the heist(space)-at least all the ideas." - without a space heist and at look like a strange hyphenated word. :)
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much, Judy for reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from royowen
It would take very exaction plans to make a successful, and would take a great collective mind to do so. Every contingency covered, negative and positive, every person cooperating, I remember the the great train robbery in England, it almost made it. Beautifully written Alie, blessings Roy
Typo : what he was meant to(o)
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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It would take very exaction plans to make a successful, and would take a great collective mind to do so. Every contingency covered, negative and positive, every person cooperating, I remember the the great train robbery in England, it almost made it. Beautifully written Alie, blessings Roy
Typo : what he was meant to(o)
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Roy for reviewing and your amazing comments.
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Most welcome Alie
Comment from lyenochka
I hear a drum roll... This prepares us for the next scene when things will really take off. I appreciate the details of the suit and the security care for the laptops. So glad you are continuing the book again!!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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I hear a drum roll... This prepares us for the next scene when things will really take off. I appreciate the details of the suit and the security care for the laptops. So glad you are continuing the book again!!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Helene, I am so glad you are glad, lol. You were great on your reviewing and your comments. Hugs n smiles!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Perhaps I would understand the plot better if I had read the previous chapters but what is here kept my attention, but the light never got bright enough to enjoy it more. Good Luck in finishing what you started.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Perhaps I would understand the plot better if I had read the previous chapters but what is here kept my attention, but the light never got bright enough to enjoy it more. Good Luck in finishing what you started.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Tom for reviewing and your great comments.
