Yo'll Always Be My Baby
70 word flash fiction15 total reviews
Comment from victor 66
This is a terribly sad story that you have entered into the 70 word flash fiction contest. Unfortunately, whether this is fiction or not, the story could be true. And that makes it all the more sad. Well written.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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This is a terribly sad story that you have entered into the 70 word flash fiction contest. Unfortunately, whether this is fiction or not, the story could be true. And that makes it all the more sad. Well written.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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I agree that it is very sad. I hate addiction. Thank you so much for your review and comments. Hugs.
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You are most welcome, Leann.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry. Though sad, I enjoyed reading it. You told a good little story following the rules of the contest. You are right about what mother's believe about their children.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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You did a good job with your contest entry. Though sad, I enjoyed reading it. You told a good little story following the rules of the contest. You are right about what mother's believe about their children.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thank goodness, someone understood my story. I was starting to think I was unable to get the idea across. Thank you for your kind words and review. Hugs.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 70 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest. Good word count. Interesting theme. Engaging plot. Well developed characters.
Heroin is hard to quit. It's a very sad story.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Excellent entry for the 70 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest. Good word count. Interesting theme. Engaging plot. Well developed characters.
Heroin is hard to quit. It's a very sad story.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your kind words. This flash fiction is actually based loosely on something that happened to me. Hugs. And thanks again for your review and comments.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a well thought out seventy word flash fiction piece for the contest. To tell a story in so few words is a challenge that you've executed well. What a sad twist at the end. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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This is a well thought out seventy word flash fiction piece for the contest. To tell a story in so few words is a challenge that you've executed well. What a sad twist at the end. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for your complementary review and comments. I appreciate it.
Comment from Bill Schott
This seventy-word story, Yo'll Always Be My Baby, has the proper word count and creates a scene of sadness as a mother says farewell to her son. Poignant.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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This seventy-word story, Yo'll Always Be My Baby, has the proper word count and creates a scene of sadness as a mother says farewell to her son. Poignant.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for your generous review and kind words. Hugs.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Ouch, a heroin needle hanging from the arm of a little boy is devastating. You never want them to do drugs in the first place and then this happens unexpectedly. What a sad start for a youngster in life.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Ouch, a heroin needle hanging from the arm of a little boy is devastating. You never want them to do drugs in the first place and then this happens unexpectedly. What a sad start for a youngster in life.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your time and kind words.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Strange how as I read it I thought you had given birth and was being rushed to the hospital for sutures and such for "my baby" had a needle in his arm before discovering an older son using tar was the victim.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Strange how as I read it I thought you had given birth and was being rushed to the hospital for sutures and such for "my baby" had a needle in his arm before discovering an older son using tar was the victim.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your review and for taking the time to comment on my story. I appreciate it.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
I like the surprise and tragic ending. Hard drugs destroy not only the lives of the user, but their families too. I especially liked the tragic, somber poem of your work. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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I like the surprise and tragic ending. Hard drugs destroy not only the lives of the user, but their families too. I especially liked the tragic, somber poem of your work. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 10-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Cindy, thank you so much for reading and reviewing my story. Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
The poem was jarring and egregious. I'm sure that was your intention. I've never read a poem like this before so thank you for expanding my mind. You write as if you've lived it, I mean no disrespect.
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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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The poem was jarring and egregious. I'm sure that was your intention. I've never read a poem like this before so thank you for expanding my mind. You write as if you've lived it, I mean no disrespect.
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Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your comments and your review. However, this is not a poem. It is a flash fiction story. I apologize for the confusion. Thanks again.
Comment from Wendy G
This surely has to be part of a bigger story - or it needs to be as there is a back story here which would be fascinating, as well as an insight into what comes next! Well written, and best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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This surely has to be part of a bigger story - or it needs to be as there is a back story here which would be fascinating, as well as an insight into what comes next! Well written, and best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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now you've got my mind thinking? UGG. Too early. Lol thank you so much for your nice review and comments. Hugs.