Light Show
contest entry11 total reviews
Comment from jaded831
You create a mood with your poem. I live in a high rise, and when the street lights go on and daylight fades into night, the city looks beautiful. It is hard to think anything bad can happen.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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You create a mood with your poem. I live in a high rise, and when the street lights go on and daylight fades into night, the city looks beautiful. It is hard to think anything bad can happen.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind feedback :) Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Right on, whoever you are. How to critique a one-line poem is uniquely, impossible so I would end here but Fan Story denies that until one hundred- and fifty-characters pass.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Right on, whoever you are. How to critique a one-line poem is uniquely, impossible so I would end here but Fan Story denies that until one hundred- and fifty-characters pass.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks Tom :)
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ur welkum
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The image looks like this poem might be five o'clock somewhere. The moon descends and the lamps dim as the sun ascends from the rising sunrise. Another fine day in store.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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The image looks like this poem might be five o'clock somewhere. The moon descends and the lamps dim as the sun ascends from the rising sunrise. Another fine day in store.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your feedback, Rosemary :)
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely image to accompany your one line poem, which has excellent rhyme. It's a peaceful gentle scene, and the lights speak of comfort and direction. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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A lovely image to accompany your one line poem, which has excellent rhyme. It's a peaceful gentle scene, and the lights speak of comfort and direction. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much, Wendy :)
Kind regards, Debra
Comment from MJK
Love the rhyme and the relaxed mood you create. Use of alliteration (lamps light) and personification (daylight retreats) was also well done. Based on their own experience, readers can enjoy picturing the scene you create.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Love the rhyme and the relaxed mood you create. Use of alliteration (lamps light) and personification (daylight retreats) was also well done. Based on their own experience, readers can enjoy picturing the scene you create.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good entry for the 1 Line Only writing prompt contest. You followed the rules of the contest well. Nice imagery.
Beautiful dusk scenery.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Good entry for the 1 Line Only writing prompt contest. You followed the rules of the contest well. Nice imagery.
Beautiful dusk scenery.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much, Gypsy :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your one-line poem is well-written and appealing. Alliteration and rhyming serve as enhancements in the description of the need for artificial lights as the night comes.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Your one-line poem is well-written and appealing. Alliteration and rhyming serve as enhancements in the description of the need for artificial lights as the night comes.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Hello Janice, Thank you so much for your lovely feedback :) Best wishes...
Comment from Anne Johnston
"lamps light the streets as daylight retreats" I like your entry for this contest very much, good rhyming and well illustrating the picture. Twilight is such a special time of day, as the sun disappears and the lights begin to appear.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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"lamps light the streets as daylight retreats" I like your entry for this contest very much, good rhyming and well illustrating the picture. Twilight is such a special time of day, as the sun disappears and the lights begin to appear.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind feedback :)
Best wishes...
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You are welcome
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork.
-You did a good job with the one line.
-A good topic and imagery,
as well as internal rhyme.
-You created a good word picture
describing the scene.
-A very good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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-Nice artwork.
-You did a good job with the one line.
-A good topic and imagery,
as well as internal rhyme.
-You created a good word picture
describing the scene.
-A very good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both :)
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-line poem, Light Show, speaks to the turning on of the street lights, which are our way of replacing the sun's warming rays with our own humble offering.
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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This one-line poem, Light Show, speaks to the turning on of the street lights, which are our way of replacing the sun's warming rays with our own humble offering.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your feedback :)
