Thirty Days of Magic
Everyday Magic contest entry5 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I have to say I read this as a contest entry and found it to be so delightful and clever. I have been guilty in the past of getting that shiny card and going on a spending spree. It is such a fun and well-written read.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Mary
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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I have to say I read this as a contest entry and found it to be so delightful and clever. I have been guilty in the past of getting that shiny card and going on a spending spree. It is such a fun and well-written read.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the great review, Mary. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked this sillypiece.
Comment from SimianSavant
Another winner with flawless meter and a well developed, coherent, foreshadowed, hilariously rendered storyline with great visual presentation. Then there are the Easter eggs suggesting that the subject has so material wealth, things spent on are disproportioned and unusable. This gem has all the right ingredients. Well done.
The only edit I suggest is:
It only took a couple days
then it was crystal clear <= change *then* to *til* to avoid the feel of a run-on sentence.
Thanks for the great read!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Another winner with flawless meter and a well developed, coherent, foreshadowed, hilariously rendered storyline with great visual presentation. Then there are the Easter eggs suggesting that the subject has so material wealth, things spent on are disproportioned and unusable. This gem has all the right ingredients. Well done.
The only edit I suggest is:
It only took a couple days
then it was crystal clear <= change *then* to *til* to avoid the feel of a run-on sentence.
Thanks for the great read!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Hey, D. Thank you for the awesome review and huge sixer, friend. Yeah, I wanted to come up with something that would truly be magical for the contest, lol. Did you happen to catch the name on the card in the pic? I put that on there. Ha. I really appreciate it, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Me
Comment from LyndaS
Another sucker. HAHAHAHA!! Too damn funny. LOVED THIS! When my oldest son went out on his own, he asked me to come over and help him with his checkbook. While we were going through it, I will never forget the extremely bright lightbulb that exploded over his head. He just realized you can't spend money that you don't have even if you can write a check for something. This entry reminds me of that. Your meter and rhymes are spot on and you have told a great little story about stupid people with credit cards. Loved the 80-inch TV and Xbox. Totally a boy thing. The lobster treats for the cat were funny too. This is a great write that I enjoyed very much. Well done!!! Lynda
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Another sucker. HAHAHAHA!! Too damn funny. LOVED THIS! When my oldest son went out on his own, he asked me to come over and help him with his checkbook. While we were going through it, I will never forget the extremely bright lightbulb that exploded over his head. He just realized you can't spend money that you don't have even if you can write a check for something. This entry reminds me of that. Your meter and rhymes are spot on and you have told a great little story about stupid people with credit cards. Loved the 80-inch TV and Xbox. Totally a boy thing. The lobster treats for the cat were funny too. This is a great write that I enjoyed very much. Well done!!! Lynda
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Yeah, my cat loved those lobster treats. LOL. Thank you so much for the awesome review and big six, Lynda. Out of the few reviews I received, you're the only one that caught the name on the card. I put that in there myself. Well, I'm glad this brought back some good memories. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Thank you again.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your poem is so well done and tells a story that often happens when a person gets a credit card and does not use it wisely. I love your closing line: I'll not forget such loss and pain...the day the magic died."
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Your poem is so well done and tells a story that often happens when a person gets a credit card and does not use it wisely. I love your closing line: I'll not forget such loss and pain...the day the magic died."
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Anne. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
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You are welcome
Comment from babykoala
this is one of the most cleverly written and funny poems I've read in a long long time. The rhyming is impeccable and the delivery of each verse just gets better and better and I love the play on words "to Amazon im Prime" haha, it's simply amazing written and delivered. I laughed my way through and was in awe of its perfection! absolutely brilliant.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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this is one of the most cleverly written and funny poems I've read in a long long time. The rhyming is impeccable and the delivery of each verse just gets better and better and I love the play on words "to Amazon im Prime" haha, it's simply amazing written and delivered. I laughed my way through and was in awe of its perfection! absolutely brilliant.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Wow, thank you so much for the awesome review, BK. I really appreciate the generous stars and kind comments. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. I hope you have yourself a great week. Thank you again.
