The Mallard
He floats down the river10 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
Not too bad. You have been busy lately with your writing. We have a bunch of mallards that summer in the pond where our family camp is. It's fun to watch them when they hatch out their young.
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Not too bad. You have been busy lately with your writing. We have a bunch of mallards that summer in the pond where our family camp is. It's fun to watch them when they hatch out their young.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from Anne Johnston
Beautiful picture of the Mallard duck, and you have used good words to describe him. Such majestic birds they are, the males are so brightly coloured and the females are less so. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Beautiful picture of the Mallard duck, and you have used good words to describe him. Such majestic birds they are, the males are so brightly coloured and the females are less so. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you. Have you read my palindrome poem?
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You are welcome
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:)
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
Picture and poem complement each other. I like the descriptive words you used for the mallard and verb for the way he shows his head while he is floating. It makes you wonder why he's thinking!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Picture and poem complement each other. I like the descriptive words you used for the mallard and verb for the way he shows his head while he is floating. It makes you wonder why he's thinking!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thanks. Have you read my palindrome poem?
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I don't know which is you palindrome poem.
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Nature
Comment from Reese Turner
Nice picture! Nice tribute to a handsome duck. He looks like he thinks he's God's gift to lady ducks, doesn't he? I am not a hunter and your entry reminds me why. Enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Nice picture! Nice tribute to a handsome duck. He looks like he thinks he's God's gift to lady ducks, doesn't he? I am not a hunter and your entry reminds me why. Enjoyed it.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thanks.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are nature based, descriptive and creative. I thought
about when I see one of the male mallard ducks their green head stand out. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is great and compliments the words of this poem. Have a great day!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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The author's words are nature based, descriptive and creative. I thought
about when I see one of the male mallard ducks their green head stand out. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is great and compliments the words of this poem. Have a great day!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thanks, you too!
Comment from LisaMay
I have a local duck pond where I love to go and feed the ducks and watch them floating. Their green heads are beautifully iridescent. Thanks for reminding me of the beauty of simple things.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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I have a local duck pond where I love to go and feed the ducks and watch them floating. Their green heads are beautifully iridescent. Thanks for reminding me of the beauty of simple things.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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You are welcome.
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Have you read my palindrome entry?
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As I don't know who you are (it's a blind contest) I wouldn't know which is your entry. I read what appeals to me - I don't like palindromes. I also think I read in the rules somewhere that we aren't allowed to request reviews.
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Comment from Sugarray77
I commend you on writing an excellent verse for this prompt. The natural theme resonates with all of us who love the outdoors and all of God's creatures. Well done and good luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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I commend you on writing an excellent verse for this prompt. The natural theme resonates with all of us who love the outdoors and all of God's creatures. Well done and good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thanks.
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Have you read my palindrome entry?
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well, you've certainly hit the word count for this piece with no issues. there's not too many poetic devices incorporated into the piece though, which is a shame and the layout, reads more like a sentence than a poem. i get poetic choice but it could be more, in my opinion.
GMG
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Hi there,
Well, you've certainly hit the word count for this piece with no issues. there's not too many poetic devices incorporated into the piece though, which is a shame and the layout, reads more like a sentence than a poem. i get poetic choice but it could be more, in my opinion.
GMG
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Someone told me some words to say for this poem, what would you suggest???
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Try playing around with the formatting a bit, use different lines... things such as
The male mallard...
deep in thought...
floats all day
casually flaunting
his shimmering green head.
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That is exactly what I put in the poem!
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Yes, I said try looking at the formatting. I'm not going to re-write it.
You can make it feel more poetic by using verses and structure. the words... that's up to you.
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ok
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Have you read my palindrome entry?
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
Congratulations for sharing a 15 Words Picture Poem that reminisces a male mallard's outing atop water; with picture to match.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of alliteration, as well as its contents' synchronization with the picture illuminated loc.cit.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Congratulations for sharing a 15 Words Picture Poem that reminisces a male mallard's outing atop water; with picture to match.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of alliteration, as well as its contents' synchronization with the picture illuminated loc.cit.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thanks very much.
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Remain Blessed.
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you too
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Have you read my palindrome entry?
Comment from Frank Malley
This photo-poem accurately describes what the photo portrays, and adds the descriptor, "...deep in thought..." So: the poem's merit is its functionality plus a speculation about the consciousness of the mallard. I think it would have been striking to add that he floats all day, often in water barely above freezing, an exemplar of evolutionary toughness. I might have added that he casually flaunts his shimmering green head, so whimsically wasted on a duck-brain. I confess I'm not a fan of literal minimalism, but for competent depiction, I give this brief effort a 4.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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This photo-poem accurately describes what the photo portrays, and adds the descriptor, "...deep in thought..." So: the poem's merit is its functionality plus a speculation about the consciousness of the mallard. I think it would have been striking to add that he floats all day, often in water barely above freezing, an exemplar of evolutionary toughness. I might have added that he casually flaunts his shimmering green head, so whimsically wasted on a duck-brain. I confess I'm not a fan of literal minimalism, but for competent depiction, I give this brief effort a 4.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Are you saying I should change my 15 words? Because I will.
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What I suggest reflects my sense of what makes a poem stand out and accrue emotional force. I think "deep in thought" is a stimulating idea, but I might have said, somehow, deep in...what thoughts?
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I changed my poem, thanks.
