Painful Truth
A glimpse into my painful struggles and situations.30 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
I hope to find someday soon that you are well. That is not a pity statement or a yarn of sympathy because I know, having read you right along, that that is not what you're looking for. I believe in my heart there is more to you than this, especially with your writing, and I'm hoping a book of your life is in your future. God Bless, Charity! Best JohnC
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I hope to find someday soon that you are well. That is not a pity statement or a yarn of sympathy because I know, having read you right along, that that is not what you're looking for. I believe in my heart there is more to you than this, especially with your writing, and I'm hoping a book of your life is in your future. God Bless, Charity! Best JohnC
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thanks for reading my poem.
Comment from JanPerry
Excellent work. It sounds like you have been experiencing many of life's diversities. I hope you enjoy your running and hiking which means that life holds some enjoyment for you.
Many young and old people experience debt. The world makes you strive hard for every little thing and enjoyment in life. You are not alone. Good work.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Excellent work. It sounds like you have been experiencing many of life's diversities. I hope you enjoy your running and hiking which means that life holds some enjoyment for you.
Many young and old people experience debt. The world makes you strive hard for every little thing and enjoyment in life. You are not alone. Good work.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces a down and out protagonist on the verge of giving up.
The work highlights his or her hopelessness in virtually every situation in life and his or her floating on a stream of ambivalence, which could either leave him or her shriveled or forgiven by the Lord.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of ambivalent anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces a down and out protagonist on the verge of giving up.
The work highlights his or her hopelessness in virtually every situation in life and his or her floating on a stream of ambivalence, which could either leave him or her shriveled or forgiven by the Lord.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of ambivalent anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your positive feedback. It means alot.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Wow, a very powerful poem. I wished you had entered it in the tell your story poetry contest. After reading your words I can feel empathy for your situation. You are a talented writer. I hope it can take you to someplace you want to be. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Wow, a very powerful poem. I wished you had entered it in the tell your story poetry contest. After reading your words I can feel empathy for your situation. You are a talented writer. I hope it can take you to someplace you want to be. Excellent work.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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I appreciate your detail response. I'm glad you think I'm a talented writer. I'm just telling my story.
Comment from Caiti Croke
This gripped me. I can feel your struggle. To the point of wanting to take the pain away for you. Keep writing like this and hopefully your struggle will feel less painful and more inspirational. Because you are.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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This gripped me. I can feel your struggle. To the point of wanting to take the pain away for you. Keep writing like this and hopefully your struggle will feel less painful and more inspirational. Because you are.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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I'm trying to come out with my poetry book called life in the trenches. Just telling my story about my life. I'm in my darkest place at the point. Thanks for your feedback.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Another painful and tortured poem about your struggles. A lot of great lines in the poem. It is well-crafted with great imagery. Keep writing. For me, writing is like trauma therapy, and I'm sure it is for you also.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Another painful and tortured poem about your struggles. A lot of great lines in the poem. It is well-crafted with great imagery. Keep writing. For me, writing is like trauma therapy, and I'm sure it is for you also.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you yes it's definitely therapy for me.
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Thank you yes it's definitely therapy for me.
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Thank you yes it's definitely therapy for me.
Comment from Thatguypk
This poem, and the one I read previously on drug addiction, suggests to me that you are a fighter, who has suffered much but are not giving up on life, despite the frequent references to reaching the end. Anyone who thinks they are above you is a fool, who maybe has never had to fight a battle in their own lives. Ignore them. Hold on to the positives in your life, such as your ability to express yourself as fluently as you have done here. Great writing, and thank you for sharing.
PK
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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This poem, and the one I read previously on drug addiction, suggests to me that you are a fighter, who has suffered much but are not giving up on life, despite the frequent references to reaching the end. Anyone who thinks they are above you is a fool, who maybe has never had to fight a battle in their own lives. Ignore them. Hold on to the positives in your life, such as your ability to express yourself as fluently as you have done here. Great writing, and thank you for sharing.
PK
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Yes I'm trying to hold on to the positivity in my life. Even though it's not much of it. Thanks for the honest feedback.
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Yes I'm trying to hold on to the positivity in my life. Even though it's not much of it. Thanks for the honest feedback.
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Yes I'm trying to hold on to the positivity in my life. Even though it's not much of it. Thanks for the honest feedback.
Comment from pookietoo
A nice poem. Keep up the great work writing poems. Good luck in all you do. Best wishes and keep smiling. Have a wonderful day today. Take care of yourself.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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A nice poem. Keep up the great work writing poems. Good luck in all you do. Best wishes and keep smiling. Have a wonderful day today. Take care of yourself.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Writing poems is definitely therapeutic for me.
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Writing poems is definitely therapeutic for me.
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Good
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Writing poems is definitely therapeutic for me.
Comment from Eternal Muse
You have to calm down. You're stressed out. Take a deep breath. Things can't be that bad. God gave you life, and He is the only one who can take it back.
It's important to keep a positive lookout. And you really have to pray. God is generous.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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You have to calm down. You're stressed out. Take a deep breath. Things can't be that bad. God gave you life, and He is the only one who can take it back.
It's important to keep a positive lookout. And you really have to pray. God is generous.
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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I'm telling my story and things are not bad. I'm writing from the heart and from my experience. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Painful Truth"
I like the way you made this rhyme so beautifully it was also rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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"Painful Truth"
I like the way you made this rhyme so beautifully it was also rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for the honest feedback.
