Painful Truth
A glimpse into my painful struggles and situations.30 total reviews
Comment from Whitewave
Charity,
Truth is often painful, very painful, but facing it gets easier little by little. You have shown great courage and grown stronger through all the hurt and difficulties you have faced and endured. I think your poetry is a good way of accepting and releasing some of that. Be kind to yourself and trust that you are loved and uplifted more than you know.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Charity,
Truth is often painful, very painful, but facing it gets easier little by little. You have shown great courage and grown stronger through all the hurt and difficulties you have faced and endured. I think your poetry is a good way of accepting and releasing some of that. Be kind to yourself and trust that you are loved and uplifted more than you know.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your feedback.
Comment from Raul1
This is a well written poem. Well written. Well done. You have executed well your poem. Excellent work! Nice job! No grammatical errors. I like how you structured this poem. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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This is a well written poem. Well written. Well done. You have executed well your poem. Excellent work! Nice job! No grammatical errors. I like how you structured this poem. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
How awful to be living with the fear of death and wondering if you will be next. I have never felt this in my life so I think I must have found some peace. I expect in some parts of the world there are people who live with such fears, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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How awful to be living with the fear of death and wondering if you will be next. I have never felt this in my life so I think I must have found some peace. I expect in some parts of the world there are people who live with such fears, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I'm glad I'm about to share my story with many. Hoping to reach out to others with similar feelings and struggles.
Comment from MissMerri
Charity, I am so impressed with the creativity of this poem. You have used various metaphors and similes that create strong images in the reader's mind and you also have such original rhymes. I love how you've expressed the pains you are feeling and the illustration you chose is so appropriate too. I think the most astonishing and unforgettable simile is this one: " My heart chopped in pieces like broken bushes from a machete." That is so original, and quite memorable too. I hope you are doing well. ~ MM
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Charity, I am so impressed with the creativity of this poem. You have used various metaphors and similes that create strong images in the reader's mind and you also have such original rhymes. I love how you've expressed the pains you are feeling and the illustration you chose is so appropriate too. I think the most astonishing and unforgettable simile is this one: " My heart chopped in pieces like broken bushes from a machete." That is so original, and quite memorable too. I hope you are doing well. ~ MM
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much. I hope all is well with you.
Comment from Teri7
Charity, This is a very well written poem full of a lot of sadness to me. You used very good descriptive words, great imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing! love and prayers, Teri
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Charity, This is a very well written poem full of a lot of sadness to me. You used very good descriptive words, great imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing! love and prayers, Teri
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from BethShelby
Charity this is very disturbing poem. You are a poet and you've expressed yourself well. I believe it is never too late to start over. I believe God forgives everyone who asks. I believe miracles happen every day. I see you say you want to reach out to others who are fighting depression, anxiety, addition and pain. This is good sign, when you concentrate on the pain of others it takes away some of your own. I believe no one is above any other person. I believe it wrong to judge other. I believe if you make up your mind to turn things around, with God's help you will.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Charity this is very disturbing poem. You are a poet and you've expressed yourself well. I believe it is never too late to start over. I believe God forgives everyone who asks. I believe miracles happen every day. I see you say you want to reach out to others who are fighting depression, anxiety, addition and pain. This is good sign, when you concentrate on the pain of others it takes away some of your own. I believe no one is above any other person. I believe it wrong to judge other. I believe if you make up your mind to turn things around, with God's help you will.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thanks for your advice and feedback.
Comment from mermaids
Your words are full of emotion that many can relate to. Your last line "I'm just trying to survive in the trenches like Daniel in the lion's den" is a vivid line that sums up the feel of your words. Survival is often a daily struggle like your poem describes.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Your words are full of emotion that many can relate to. Your last line "I'm just trying to survive in the trenches like Daniel in the lion's den" is a vivid line that sums up the feel of your words. Survival is often a daily struggle like your poem describes.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I appreciate your review.
Comment from Fleedleflump
A quick note first to say I enjoyed your poetry slam on Youtube - Karenina shared it with me this morning. You chime brilliantly with the music, and for my money, your lyrics are way better than a lot of the narrative rap I hear.
This piece is another strong addition. I love that you poetry is not about making excuses or placing blame - it's about acceptance, searching for strength, and and showing how one's place in the world is as much a state of mind as birth. You open strong with the confluence of chest pain, bullets and vests, and near-closing with the striking line about the chopped heart, bush and machete (bushes having significant religious connotations).
An excellent write.
Mike
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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A quick note first to say I enjoyed your poetry slam on Youtube - Karenina shared it with me this morning. You chime brilliantly with the music, and for my money, your lyrics are way better than a lot of the narrative rap I hear.
This piece is another strong addition. I love that you poetry is not about making excuses or placing blame - it's about acceptance, searching for strength, and and showing how one's place in the world is as much a state of mind as birth. You open strong with the confluence of chest pain, bullets and vests, and near-closing with the striking line about the chopped heart, bush and machete (bushes having significant religious connotations).
An excellent write.
Mike
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Wow that means a lot thst you think my lines and flow is better than most rappers. I appreciate your support and review. Thank you 😊.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Charity,
once again you have hit the lines running with your style of gritty truth.
Your trademark lyrical sway delivers a hard-hitting reality of life in 'not the so easy box'.
I knew of such a box growing up, and I am paying the piper big-time for it now physically... mentally, it made me stronger once I accepted the lessons that life gave me.
I always enjoy reading your raw and unfiltered art Charity... the more you write, the more fluid it becomes.
Didn't know if you threw in the 'slang' in this line, or it was just a slight typo, but...
I know how it 'feels' to lose everything.
Nice presentation nice lyrical mind-bender... continue doing what you do Charity, wisdom is bred where knowledge is gained.
With our thoughts we create...
visionary expansion.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Hi Charity,
once again you have hit the lines running with your style of gritty truth.
Your trademark lyrical sway delivers a hard-hitting reality of life in 'not the so easy box'.
I knew of such a box growing up, and I am paying the piper big-time for it now physically... mentally, it made me stronger once I accepted the lessons that life gave me.
I always enjoy reading your raw and unfiltered art Charity... the more you write, the more fluid it becomes.
Didn't know if you threw in the 'slang' in this line, or it was just a slight typo, but...
I know how it 'feels' to lose everything.
Nice presentation nice lyrical mind-bender... continue doing what you do Charity, wisdom is bred where knowledge is gained.
With our thoughts we create...
visionary expansion.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Graphic and passionately emotional. You have a way of tapping into your own psyche and extracting what truly scares you. I find that remarkably honest and courageous. Find your strength and keep writing.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Graphic and passionately emotional. You have a way of tapping into your own psyche and extracting what truly scares you. I find that remarkably honest and courageous. Find your strength and keep writing.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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If you want to watch one of my poetry slams I posted on YouTube check out the link under my thoughts section.
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I would love to. Thanks for letting me know.
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You were amazing!!
Watching you bring not only your words to life but your soul as well. Bravo!!
