Purple Sage Afire
Painted Desert Arizona10 total reviews
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written 15 word poem and a beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Very picturesque scene. God breathes a final breathe to keep afire the purple sage. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a nicely written 15 word poem and a beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Very picturesque scene. God breathes a final breathe to keep afire the purple sage. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from Sugarray77
I commend you on writing an excellent verse for this prompt. The philosophical theme resonates with all of us... as does the lovely thought that God's breath is causing the sage to glow. Well done and good luck.
Melissa
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I commend you on writing an excellent verse for this prompt. The philosophical theme resonates with all of us... as does the lovely thought that God's breath is causing the sage to glow. Well done and good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from jaded831
Your poem reminds us of all the natural beauty that surrounds us. Sage also has a wonderful scent. Your poem reflects the picture beautifully, which is the point of the contest. Good luck.
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Your poem reminds us of all the natural beauty that surrounds us. Sage also has a wonderful scent. Your poem reflects the picture beautifully, which is the point of the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful photo and a thoughtful reflective fifteen word poem to accompany it. The life of the fire is fading to embers but new life comes to the sage with its beauty. best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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A beautiful photo and a thoughtful reflective fifteen word poem to accompany it. The life of the fire is fading to embers but new life comes to the sage with its beauty. best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from Gee
Oh very nice picture and poem. I hope you do well in the competition. Your poem discribes the photo well.
Thanks for sharing your poem.
And good luck in the contest.
Gee
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Oh very nice picture and poem. I hope you do well in the competition. Your poem discribes the photo well.
Thanks for sharing your poem.
And good luck in the contest.
Gee
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Very kind words. Thank you.
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
Very good poem! I like how you interpreted the prompt picture and think you have made the most of the 15 word allotment. Well done I wish you good luck in the contest!!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Very good poem! I like how you interpreted the prompt picture and think you have made the most of the 15 word allotment. Well done I wish you good luck in the contest!!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Very kind words. Thank you.
Comment from Anne Johnston
"As desert embers fade
God breathes a final breath
to keep afire the purple sage."
Beautiful picture, and well-written words to describe it. We were privileged to visit that part of the country several years ago, would love to do so again.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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"As desert embers fade
God breathes a final breath
to keep afire the purple sage."
Beautiful picture, and well-written words to describe it. We were privileged to visit that part of the country several years ago, would love to do so again.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Very kind words. Thank you.
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You are welcome
Comment from RodG
I really love desert scenes and your picture poem puts us there on the painted desert at sunset as the purple sage seems to be most beautiful. Your fire motif works beautifully. Very nicely done in but 15 words. Rod
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I really love desert scenes and your picture poem puts us there on the painted desert at sunset as the purple sage seems to be most beautiful. Your fire motif works beautifully. Very nicely done in but 15 words. Rod
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Very kind words. Thank you.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem speaks about a painted picture of desert Arizona portrayal and describes how in fire God breathes to teach us the patience in hazardous state of living at God's grace; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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This poem speaks about a painted picture of desert Arizona portrayal and describes how in fire God breathes to teach us the patience in hazardous state of living at God's grace; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Very kind words. Thank you.
Comment from LisaMay
I've seen the Painted Desert and thought it was so beautiful. I enjoyed reliving it through your poem, but I was concerned and a bit confused by the middle line: "God breathes a final breath" which makes it sound like God died to keep the sage going. Was that the intention, to reference Jesus dying for us? I also felt hesitant about 'breathes' and 'breath' being in the same line, so I had a bit of a fiddle myself and came up with:
As desert embers fade
God's lingering breath of life
will keep afire the purple sage.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I've seen the Painted Desert and thought it was so beautiful. I enjoyed reliving it through your poem, but I was concerned and a bit confused by the middle line: "God breathes a final breath" which makes it sound like God died to keep the sage going. Was that the intention, to reference Jesus dying for us? I also felt hesitant about 'breathes' and 'breath' being in the same line, so I had a bit of a fiddle myself and came up with:
As desert embers fade
God's lingering breath of life
will keep afire the purple sage.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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No. Tough to do justice in fifteen words. You did it well.
And Jesus's sacrifice was insightful but not what I intended.
Could have, should have been.
My words were to have God exhale one final time before the sunset with rays of light before darkness fell thus peaking the purple of the sage. Thanks for your reading and thoughts.
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Thanks for clarifying... I was over-thinking.
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That's okay. You did well.
