Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 73 "Football Chapter 44"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from ShirleyT1
I enjoy reading your well-written chapters and continuing to know and understand your well-formed characters. I especially enjoy the dialogue you have crafted in your stories.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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I enjoy reading your well-written chapters and continuing to know and understand your well-formed characters. I especially enjoy the dialogue you have crafted in your stories.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
This was a very intense chapter. Unlike you and Katherine, I had no family to support my bout with ovarian cancer; Maybe that's way God allowed them to take it all out. There was no spread, on need for Chemo or radiation. Been cancer free going on 8 yrs. Hope Katherine has a happy ending and glad you did too.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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This was a very intense chapter. Unlike you and Katherine, I had no family to support my bout with ovarian cancer; Maybe that's way God allowed them to take it all out. There was no spread, on need for Chemo or radiation. Been cancer free going on 8 yrs. Hope Katherine has a happy ending and glad you did too.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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My prayers are with you. Thank you for sharing.
Comment from Sanku
cancer is a terrible decease ,whatever be its location. You have bravely faced and withstood its onslaught and I am sure the lady here is as tenacious as you.
Well written and smooth flowing.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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cancer is a terrible decease ,whatever be its location. You have bravely faced and withstood its onslaught and I am sure the lady here is as tenacious as you.
Well written and smooth flowing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi Barbara. I read your story on Sunday and thought I'd reviewed it. But going through my 'comments' I was surprised at not seeing your name. I'm sorry. This part should have had a sixth star, your own experiences come out in this part so well. I think it was because my brother came over that I forgot to go back. I've got a daughter-in-law who went through this when she in her late 20s, and she was exactly how you are describing this. Unfortunately for Sarah, she had to have a hysterectomy, and a double mastectomy, so couldn't have children. It's a terrible illness. I'm hoping Katherine will survive in your story. Well done, this is a brilliant chapter. In future. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Hi Barbara. I read your story on Sunday and thought I'd reviewed it. But going through my 'comments' I was surprised at not seeing your name. I'm sorry. This part should have had a sixth star, your own experiences come out in this part so well. I think it was because my brother came over that I forgot to go back. I've got a daughter-in-law who went through this when she in her late 20s, and she was exactly how you are describing this. Unfortunately for Sarah, she had to have a hysterectomy, and a double mastectomy, so couldn't have children. It's a terrible illness. I'm hoping Katherine will survive in your story. Well done, this is a brilliant chapter. In future. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Cancer is horrible. Thank you for understanding.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Cancer is always a scare no matter where it's started and the diagnoses. It is not a pleasant thought to have breast cancer; I had a relative also who went through this type of diagnoses. Your story sounds nonfiction being some of the parts are related to your life.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Cancer is always a scare no matter where it's started and the diagnoses. It is not a pleasant thought to have breast cancer; I had a relative also who went through this type of diagnoses. Your story sounds nonfiction being some of the parts are related to your life.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I hope you were able to read it with money still attached.
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money attached?
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are you referring to the credits we get for ratings?
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yes
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To keep up with the stories, I sometimes read it if there's only two credits.... never a problem if I want to know what is happening with the characters.
Comment from Lisa V
I wish I had read the character list first because I was confused who all the people were. I think this passage was well written and caught my interest making me want to read more.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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I wish I had read the character list first because I was confused who all the people were. I think this passage was well written and caught my interest making me want to read more.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Maybe I need to move the character list to the top.
Comment from Ben Colder
This lady Kat is a trooper. Must agree, the coach is one lucky guy to have her. She will whip the big C. I have a neighbor who at one time rented one of my rent houses. She had breast cancer but knew the Lord. Not only did we pray together but she was healed. Though she lost one breast and did the Kemo thing, God healed her, She is cancer-free and her hair is growing back. Man has no answer, but God does. All things are possible to those who will believe. You have done well with this story.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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This lady Kat is a trooper. Must agree, the coach is one lucky guy to have her. She will whip the big C. I have a neighbor who at one time rented one of my rent houses. She had breast cancer but knew the Lord. Not only did we pray together but she was healed. Though she lost one breast and did the Kemo thing, God healed her, She is cancer-free and her hair is growing back. Man has no answer, but God does. All things are possible to those who will believe. You have done well with this story.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you. I enjoyed reading your comment about Katherine. I have a reviewer is says no man would want her because she has kids and won't have sex with him. I actually ask this guy if having sex is all women are good for.
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must be hump-WINKLE? Sometimes when playing the field if a man or woman comes to a place of honesty toward themselves they will recognize what love is all about. Do we make mistakes? In order to learn, you bet-cha.
Comment from tfawcus
Another interesting chapter with good plot progression and dialogue.
Just a couple of things. I'm not sure whether you need the Upper Case letter for Zoom. Maybe not, when used as a verb.
Gabriel's going to zoom (Zoom?) the pep rally.
girls(') cross country
After a pause(,) he yelled,
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Another interesting chapter with good plot progression and dialogue.
Just a couple of things. I'm not sure whether you need the Upper Case letter for Zoom. Maybe not, when used as a verb.
Gabriel's going to zoom (Zoom?) the pep rally.
girls(') cross country
After a pause(,) he yelled,
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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I keep putting the apostrophe after girls' but I keep being told it's wrong. I'm going to leave it there.
Comment from MissMerri
This story has captured my attention from the start and I cannot wait to see how it develops. I am so impressed with your skill in writing dialogue. I like how you do it, inserting little action bits the speaker is doing, giving the reader a clear visual as well as auditory clue. This helps create the scene and involve the reader. I also appreciate your excellent editing skills. No typos anywhere. This story is fun to read.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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This story has captured my attention from the start and I cannot wait to see how it develops. I am so impressed with your skill in writing dialogue. I like how you do it, inserting little action bits the speaker is doing, giving the reader a clear visual as well as auditory clue. This helps create the scene and involve the reader. I also appreciate your excellent editing skills. No typos anywhere. This story is fun to read.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-It is almost time for lunch at our house, and the picture made me hungry.
-Thanks for sharing the notes.
-This was a good chapter that showed the beginnings of routines that family were organizing to help Katherine and the boys.
-She is very lucky to have that, and it sounds like you were, too. I imagine that is where a lot of this part of the story is coming from.
-Jeremy is such a sweet boy, and seems to be growing up at the same time.
-The UT angle is interesting, and I wonder if it has anything to do with Gabe. I am sure you will be letting us know:)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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-It is almost time for lunch at our house, and the picture made me hungry.
-Thanks for sharing the notes.
-This was a good chapter that showed the beginnings of routines that family were organizing to help Katherine and the boys.
-She is very lucky to have that, and it sounds like you were, too. I imagine that is where a lot of this part of the story is coming from.
-Jeremy is such a sweet boy, and seems to be growing up at the same time.
-The UT angle is interesting, and I wonder if it has anything to do with Gabe. I am sure you will be letting us know:)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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News about the UT coach will be in next Sunday's post. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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I figured it would be. Is that far from where the story is taking place? You are very welcome for the review.
