Kaleidoscope Goals
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Comment from Melodie Michelle
I love the rhyming scheme Jesse! Exceptional poem that flows perfectly throughout the entire piece, as well as not being forced! The imagery is amazing and it's perfect for the poems presentation;-)
Thank you for sharing this piece with us and many many blessings to you my friend!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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I love the rhyming scheme Jesse! Exceptional poem that flows perfectly throughout the entire piece, as well as not being forced! The imagery is amazing and it's perfect for the poems presentation;-)
Thank you for sharing this piece with us and many many blessings to you my friend!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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What a surprise! Thanks so much, Melodie, for this exceptional rating and complimentary review! I appreciate you choosing the parts that you love best!
I am happy to hear that you thought it wasn't forced and that the flow and rhyme scheme work so well!
Have a wonderful evening!
Jesse
Comment from shelley kaye
wow. LOVE this part:
To find a home among trees that breathe
To find a faith where I can believe
To find a caregiver who never wants to leave
sounds like great goals to have!! i liked this poem - thank you for sharing it :)
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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wow. LOVE this part:
To find a home among trees that breathe
To find a faith where I can believe
To find a caregiver who never wants to leave
sounds like great goals to have!! i liked this poem - thank you for sharing it :)
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Shelley, for choosing the lines you love best! I agree that these are the goals that are best to achieve! I appreciate your kind words and the excellent rating and review!
Have a lovely evening!
Jesse
Comment from GregoryCody
This is a Strong piece. Really well done. It makes the reader think.
Wow
kaleidoscope goals
That is a great pairing of words.
You also use some cool poetic tools, assonance, alliteration, etc.
GREAT JOB!!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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This is a Strong piece. Really well done. It makes the reader think.
Wow
kaleidoscope goals
That is a great pairing of words.
You also use some cool poetic tools, assonance, alliteration, etc.
GREAT JOB!!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thanks ever so much, Gregory, for your exceptional rating and review! I am glad you like the title and my use of poetic tools such as assonance and alliteration!
Thank you for your kind comments and I am glad it made you think!
Have a wonderful Wednesday!
Jesse
Comment from June Sargent
It can be frustrating and discouraging to have goals that sometimes are not attainable for one reason or another. But - a kaleidoscope is a thing of beauty made up of bits and pieces of glass. It's the bits snd pieces of our story that makes us who we are. We accept both the wins and the losses - snd then adjust that kaleidoscope to get a different viewpoint. A new and clearer one.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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It can be frustrating and discouraging to have goals that sometimes are not attainable for one reason or another. But - a kaleidoscope is a thing of beauty made up of bits and pieces of glass. It's the bits snd pieces of our story that makes us who we are. We accept both the wins and the losses - snd then adjust that kaleidoscope to get a different viewpoint. A new and clearer one.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Yes, June, you have explained the reason for choosing the title of Kaleidoscope Goals. I have never had a review before that chose to describe what the title really means. Your viewpoint is an unusual yet precise interpretation of the meaning of this poem. All of my goals are attainable, so, please, don't worry about me.
Have a colorful evening,
Jesse
Comment from dragonpoet
Jesse,
You seem to have goals for all parts of your life. Which it is as it should be.
Now you have to prioritize them.
I like the monophyme stanzas.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Jesse,
You seem to have goals for all parts of your life. Which it is as it should be.
Now you have to prioritize them.
I like the monophyme stanzas.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thanks, Joan, for this insightful and introspective review! I am happy you liked the monorhyme stanzas. I shall keep writing and I am doing my best to stay healthy!
Jesse
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Any time, Jesse. That I did.
Good to hear on both accounts.
Joan
Comment from LJbutterfly
You've opened up and shared your honest thoughts and sincere goals, which can be healing when written down. You've allowed your FanStory family to come into your space by way of the internet. We can all empathize because we have all experienced some of your feelings. People leave that we want to stay, we want to improve, and our goals change from year to year, or month to month. Thank you for sharing this thought-provoking piece.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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You've opened up and shared your honest thoughts and sincere goals, which can be healing when written down. You've allowed your FanStory family to come into your space by way of the internet. We can all empathize because we have all experienced some of your feelings. People leave that we want to stay, we want to improve, and our goals change from year to year, or month to month. Thank you for sharing this thought-provoking piece.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your analysis of why I wrote this poem. I am glad that this piece resonates with you. Yes, our goals are constantly changing as we grow through the years. I am happy that I encouraged you to think and ponder.
Have a wonderful rest of your week,
Jesse
Comment from royowen
I sympathise, empathise and hope with you Jesse. I can see that you still have great goals in your life, you certainly do have something a little different, a good, loving caregiver would be a great goal nope you do Jesse, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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I sympathise, empathise and hope with you Jesse. I can see that you still have great goals in your life, you certainly do have something a little different, a good, loving caregiver would be a great goal nope you do Jesse, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from Ritasher
I love the sentiment behind your poem. I empathize with your words very much as well.
Sometimes, things don't go according to our plans and sometimes we know there are places we won't be able to visit. There are people who won't stay by our side even when we want that with our whole heart. And it hurts.
But I believe that Universe has always got our backs. Some things we dream about show up as beautiful creations like this poem, sometimes a stranger gives the needed encouragement, sometimes we see the most beautiful view in our own glittering eyes...
Life is not always fair, but it is always interesting, offering the unexpected. As long as we are alive, we can live!
These are the thoughts your poem calls out of me.
Thank you for creating beauty!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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I love the sentiment behind your poem. I empathize with your words very much as well.
Sometimes, things don't go according to our plans and sometimes we know there are places we won't be able to visit. There are people who won't stay by our side even when we want that with our whole heart. And it hurts.
But I believe that Universe has always got our backs. Some things we dream about show up as beautiful creations like this poem, sometimes a stranger gives the needed encouragement, sometimes we see the most beautiful view in our own glittering eyes...
Life is not always fair, but it is always interesting, offering the unexpected. As long as we are alive, we can live!
These are the thoughts your poem calls out of me.
Thank you for creating beauty!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Wow, thanks so much for this exceptional and introspective review! I love your statement that the Universe has always got our backs! I believe that as well! I also agree that life is not always fair, but it is always interesting. I really appreciate your honesty and kind words as to my creating beauty!
Have a lovely rest of your week!
Jesse
Comment from Kayte Ray
This is very well written I like the imagery that you produced the reader here. We have a clear picture of what you want and what your aim is. Well done. It has nice flow
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This is very well written I like the imagery that you produced the reader here. We have a clear picture of what you want and what your aim is. Well done. It has nice flow
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
Comment from Artasylum
This is one of the best poems I have ever read on this site... no subterfuge, no hiding behind extraneous words... just beautiful, heart-rending and beautiful truth... love this so much... blessings di
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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This is one of the best poems I have ever read on this site... no subterfuge, no hiding behind extraneous words... just beautiful, heart-rending and beautiful truth... love this so much... blessings di
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thanks ever so much, Di, for your exceptional rating and your complimentary review! Your kind words sing out to me! I am what I am, as Popeye used to say! It makes me happy to know you value my truth!
Have a wonderful rest of your week!
Jesse
