Beneath Grandma's House
The Hidden Room contest entry7 total reviews
Comment from writer723
I really enjoyed reading your story. You have such a wonderful way with words and are quite adept at expressing yourself. I found this writing to be very interesting. It held my attention throughout. Your vivid descriptions made it easy for me to visualize the scenario you were writing about. Your story really kept me in suspense. Excellent job!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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I really enjoyed reading your story. You have such a wonderful way with words and are quite adept at expressing yourself. I found this writing to be very interesting. It held my attention throughout. Your vivid descriptions made it easy for me to visualize the scenario you were writing about. Your story really kept me in suspense. Excellent job!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Hey, writer723. Thank you so much for checking out my portfolio. Not many people do that anymore. I really appreciate the stars and kind comments. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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Ron
Comment from SimianSavant
LOL, wtf. This is some funny shit. I had a hunch it was headed in that direction. The level of detail is very good and draws us in, thinking there will be some sophisticated hobby revealed. Which, it is. Porno, the pinnacle of videography. I always thought I would have a dungeon with a hidden grand piano. This one has videos of a grand pianist at work.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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LOL, wtf. This is some funny shit. I had a hunch it was headed in that direction. The level of detail is very good and draws us in, thinking there will be some sophisticated hobby revealed. Which, it is. Porno, the pinnacle of videography. I always thought I would have a dungeon with a hidden grand piano. This one has videos of a grand pianist at work.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Lol. Thank you for the great review and giant sixer, friend. Awesome, you play piano? I'm into guitar mostly but dabble in a couple other things, band wise. My drummer friend moved an hour away and our schedules clash for time to jam so that doesn't happen very often anymore. I appreciate the stars, D. Thanks again.
Ron
Comment from LyndaS
What a wicked tale you weave! So you were expecting to find a couple of potter's wheels and a kiln? HAHA! Good for your grandparents and holy cow for you. Nobody even wants to watch their parents display affection but there's no way in hell I would want to watch my GRANDPARENTS getting it on. This is just too damn funny with a great ending. Great story telling and your art to go with this is just too damn precious! WELL DONE!!! Lynda
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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What a wicked tale you weave! So you were expecting to find a couple of potter's wheels and a kiln? HAHA! Good for your grandparents and holy cow for you. Nobody even wants to watch their parents display affection but there's no way in hell I would want to watch my GRANDPARENTS getting it on. This is just too damn funny with a great ending. Great story telling and your art to go with this is just too damn precious! WELL DONE!!! Lynda
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Wow, I sure didn't plan on seeing a sixer on this ridiculous piece. Lol. Thank you so much, Lynda. You made my day. I manipulated the picture myself from 3 different pictures. The couple was really outside under a tree in pretty sunlight. Haha. Couldn't have that though. I can't believe there's actually pictures of sex dungeons on Google. Then add an old time camera in the mix and there it is, the perfect picture. LOL. Yeah, who wants to see grandparent porn? Sure as heck not me. I'm glad you had a laugh at this asinine story. That's all I was going for. I was just in one of those moods. Lol. Thank you again.
Comment from Gunner Lil
Great story.
Fast paced. An easy read. Had this reader wanting to
know what was in the tin can reel holders.
Smooth flow.
Why did granny keep the room??
Did they want the room discovered? Maybe to make some
off the film?
Just a great story.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Great story.
Fast paced. An easy read. Had this reader wanting to
know what was in the tin can reel holders.
Smooth flow.
Why did granny keep the room??
Did they want the room discovered? Maybe to make some
off the film?
Just a great story.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Lil. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silliness. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Artasylum
Wow...good for them... no cheating on each other... no sneaking around by grandpa... this trapped me at bolt cutters cool write. Looking forward... di
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Wow...good for them... no cheating on each other... no sneaking around by grandpa... this trapped me at bolt cutters cool write. Looking forward... di
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the excellent review, Di. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have yourself a great weekend.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
And.... g r o s s!!! hahahahaha I don't know what I expected, but it was not THAT. Of course, we have to know that there are those folks among us -- but OUR GRANDPARENTS? hahaha No stinking way. BLECH!
A couple of notes:
1.) My dad owned my grandparent(s') house for seventeen years.
2.) but the upkeep was just to(o) costly and time(-)consuming.
Thanks for a surprise ending!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Dear Mystery Writer,
And.... g r o s s!!! hahahahaha I don't know what I expected, but it was not THAT. Of course, we have to know that there are those folks among us -- but OUR GRANDPARENTS? hahaha No stinking way. BLECH!
A couple of notes:
1.) My dad owned my grandparent(s') house for seventeen years.
2.) but the upkeep was just to(o) costly and time(-)consuming.
Thanks for a surprise ending!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Yes, gross. LOL. Thank you so much for the fantastic review and for pointing out the goofs, Robyn. I've been up all night for work and I'm a drink or three into today and fading fast. Haha. I fixed them. I really appreciate the gracious stars and for the help. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this ridiculous piece. Have yourself a wonderful rest of your weekend.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Wow! this poem is a shocker! I also would be horrified! Well-written leading up to the sudden twist at the end. Good poem for the contest. Best of luck!!!!!!!!!!!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Wow! this poem is a shocker! I also would be horrified! Well-written leading up to the sudden twist at the end. Good poem for the contest. Best of luck!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the great review and stars, Theodore. I'm glad you liked this demented piece.
