Rick's Bar and Saloon
The daily crowd at the local watering hole.15 total reviews
Comment from Aiona
What a touching story! I love the bit with Jimmy. I think it's strange though that Bob doesn't even turn to look at what's happening until after all of that.
I would have thought, after Jimmy said that, Bob would have been raring to tackle Jimmy himself, except Emily beat him to it.
I think after Emily says, "Does anybody else want some?"
He'd be the one to lift his head from the bar and say, "My daughter's a seventh-degree blackbelt in Taekwondo." Real deadpan like. That would totally explain why he didn't lift a finger in her defense. Daddy knows.
I appreciate the happy ending, too. I like happy endings. I know people write all sorts of stories with morbid endings/tragedies. Think it's real deep, or something. There's enough tragedy in real life, that when I'm reading for entertainment, I don't need to endure more! :)
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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What a touching story! I love the bit with Jimmy. I think it's strange though that Bob doesn't even turn to look at what's happening until after all of that.
I would have thought, after Jimmy said that, Bob would have been raring to tackle Jimmy himself, except Emily beat him to it.
I think after Emily says, "Does anybody else want some?"
He'd be the one to lift his head from the bar and say, "My daughter's a seventh-degree blackbelt in Taekwondo." Real deadpan like. That would totally explain why he didn't lift a finger in her defense. Daddy knows.
I appreciate the happy ending, too. I like happy endings. I know people write all sorts of stories with morbid endings/tragedies. Think it's real deep, or something. There's enough tragedy in real life, that when I'm reading for entertainment, I don't need to endure more! :)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022
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Wow! Thank you for your kind words, and terrific review. Those six stars are deeply appreciated!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is an interesting story. I kept skipping over it thinking that I'd already reviewed it but I decided to check anyway. I'm glad I did. It's a good story and I like the way Emily is able to take care of herself. I wish more women could do that. I liked the ending, too. I'm a sucker for stories that end well.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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This is an interesting story. I kept skipping over it thinking that I'd already reviewed it but I decided to check anyway. I'm glad I did. It's a good story and I like the way Emily is able to take care of herself. I wish more women could do that. I liked the ending, too. I'm a sucker for stories that end well.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Hi, Mary. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Lisa Tepp
Beautiful rendering of a not-so-beautiful scenario. Great dialogue as well. I had a very clear picture of the bar and the people that populated it. The ending, although grim, was satisfying. Great job!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Beautiful rendering of a not-so-beautiful scenario. Great dialogue as well. I had a very clear picture of the bar and the people that populated it. The ending, although grim, was satisfying. Great job!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Hi, Lisa. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Lisa. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Lisa. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Lisa. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a wonderful heart-lifting story, Mike. You put a few twists in it to keep our interest. It's very well written and flows nicely.
Just one thing: there's something missing in this sentence, but I'm not sure what it is. I'm sure you'll know when you read it.
"If let Mama die without seeing her - he hasn't got enough whiskey for you to drown that sorrow!"
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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This is a wonderful heart-lifting story, Mike. You put a few twists in it to keep our interest. It's very well written and flows nicely.
Just one thing: there's something missing in this sentence, but I'm not sure what it is. I'm sure you'll know when you read it.
"If let Mama die without seeing her - he hasn't got enough whiskey for you to drown that sorrow!"
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Hi, Judy. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Judy. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Judy. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Judy. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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You are very welcome, Mike.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Thank you for writing.
to serve you, sweetie. - Capitalize names, or words used as names.
that I can't, sweetie, - same
for you, darling. - same
If let Mama die without seeing her - if 'you'?
my Daddy - no capital when not used as a name
my sorry Father - same
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for writing.
to serve you, sweetie. - Capitalize names, or words used as names.
that I can't, sweetie, - same
for you, darling. - same
If let Mama die without seeing her - if 'you'?
my Daddy - no capital when not used as a name
my sorry Father - same
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Hi, Wayne. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Wayne. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Wayne. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Wayne. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from royowen
What a beautiful story, I don't know whether it was pride that caused him to leave, just the same old garden grown shame, forgiving others seems to be easier than forgiving oneself, but I always like a happy ending. Beautifully written Mike, blessings Roy
Typo : If (you) letmama die...
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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What a beautiful story, I don't know whether it was pride that caused him to leave, just the same old garden grown shame, forgiving others seems to be easier than forgiving oneself, but I always like a happy ending. Beautifully written Mike, blessings Roy
Typo : If (you) letmama die...
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Hi, Roy. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Roy. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Roy. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Roy. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Most welcome
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Bless you Mike
Comment from damommy
I cherish old places, too. Sadly, a lot of our have been eaten up in "urban renewal." This is a sad story about a man who can't forgive himself. I'm glad he made it to his wife in time.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I cherish old places, too. Sadly, a lot of our have been eaten up in "urban renewal." This is a sad story about a man who can't forgive himself. I'm glad he made it to his wife in time.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well done, Mike. Forgiveness is there for all. A person only has to ask. One thing for sure, you can't find what you need in a Bar. It is there for all in both the love of God and Man. This was an interesting story. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Well done, Mike. Forgiveness is there for all. A person only has to ask. One thing for sure, you can't find what you need in a Bar. It is there for all in both the love of God and Man. This was an interesting story. Nancy:)
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Ni, Nancy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Ni, Nancy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Ni, Nancy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Ni, Nancy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from BethShelby
This is a good story Mike. To many men let pride keep them from coming home and asking forgiveness. The guilt for what they have done keeps them continuing to do things that turn them that makes them hate what they have become but feel there is no way out.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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This is a good story Mike. To many men let pride keep them from coming home and asking forgiveness. The guilt for what they have done keeps them continuing to do things that turn them that makes them hate what they have become but feel there is no way out.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, your description of the girl sounds like a bar character in a story I plan to post tomorrow. So, much so, I'm debating on dumping mine. LOL. But my story isn't so realistic, touching, or heart wrenching. Outstanding writing. Thanks for sharing. I wish it wasn't so late in the week and I could reward it properly.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Wow, your description of the girl sounds like a bar character in a story I plan to post tomorrow. So, much so, I'm debating on dumping mine. LOL. But my story isn't so realistic, touching, or heart wrenching. Outstanding writing. Thanks for sharing. I wish it wasn't so late in the week and I could reward it properly.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Hi, Ric. Thank you for your kind words and thought of a six!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Ric. Thank you for your kind words and thought of a six!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Ric. Thank you for your kind words and thought of a six!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Hi, Ric. Thank you for your kind words and thought of a six!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
