Angelic Intervention
The Disrupted Plan4 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
In reflection, was he alive or a spirit, the boy who placed hands upon you?
If you had delivered a boy I would ask if his pre-mortal being broke out from the veil between earth and heaven, to plead his case to allow its birth. I loved the story.
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In reflection, was he alive or a spirit, the boy who placed hands upon you?
If you had delivered a boy I would ask if his pre-mortal being broke out from the veil between earth and heaven, to plead his case to allow its birth. I loved the story.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a great entry for the Supernatural Story-not horror contest, and I think you have nailed it! I like the way your story progresses on beyond the supernatural event, as this gives invaluable context.
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This is a great entry for the Supernatural Story-not horror contest, and I think you have nailed it! I like the way your story progresses on beyond the supernatural event, as this gives invaluable context.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Vwilks a wonderful Wednesday to you, I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for sharing your Supernatural writing prompt entry. Your story was deeply personal and engaging. And I found your outlook to be inspiring an uplifting. good luck in the contest and have a great day!
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Hello Vwilks a wonderful Wednesday to you, I hope this review finds you well. Thank you for sharing your Supernatural writing prompt entry. Your story was deeply personal and engaging. And I found your outlook to be inspiring an uplifting. good luck in the contest and have a great day!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
Comment from Ramona Scarborough
Thank you for sharing your personal story. I could relate to your retelling because I too experienced the heartbreak of having my loved husband cheat on me, forgiving him, and then having it happen again.
Leaving him was difficult, but it was the right thing to do. My children from him are a blessing.
Suggestions of tiny things: 1. he tossed it aside and said, "Save your money."
2-my hurt grew into hatred.
3-"Oh, I know," not single quotes but double or put in italics and leave off the quotes.
4. This sentence is awkward-My daughter is who I go to for spiritual upliftment. perhaps-I go to this daughter when I need a spiritual lift.
Otherwise, you had told your story well and I will vote for you.
Ramona
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Thank you for sharing your personal story. I could relate to your retelling because I too experienced the heartbreak of having my loved husband cheat on me, forgiving him, and then having it happen again.
Leaving him was difficult, but it was the right thing to do. My children from him are a blessing.
Suggestions of tiny things: 1. he tossed it aside and said, "Save your money."
2-my hurt grew into hatred.
3-"Oh, I know," not single quotes but double or put in italics and leave off the quotes.
4. This sentence is awkward-My daughter is who I go to for spiritual upliftment. perhaps-I go to this daughter when I need a spiritual lift.
Otherwise, you had told your story well and I will vote for you.
Ramona
Comment Written 25-Jan-2022