Vanished
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Vanished - Chap 8"Mystery and Crime
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Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, so many warnings about Garth being in danger! I guess he better take them seriously. I'm wondering how Annie and Sebastian are going to be involved, and if they'll be able to not tell anyone about "angel." Interesting story taking shape. One question: Garth stopped for a lemonade...and people watched. Is he watching, or are people watching him? Good chapter! Blessings.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Wow, so many warnings about Garth being in danger! I guess he better take them seriously. I'm wondering how Annie and Sebastian are going to be involved, and if they'll be able to not tell anyone about "angel." Interesting story taking shape. One question: Garth stopped for a lemonade...and people watched. Is he watching, or are people watching him? Good chapter! Blessings.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my post. I appreciate that you continue to follow the story and enjoy it. As usual, I am behind in responding.
Hugs, Carol
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No worries about responding. I'm glad you're able to continue on the writing journey. Blessings and prayers. Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Oh dear! Poor Garth! He's usually super alert but now he has three warnings about his life and the third one he doesn't even know about yet. If the "angel" is sharing the warning with Annie but also telling her not to tell anyone about their communication, it sounds like a hard promise to keep.
Good use of suspense and details to alert the reader of some impending event.
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waited for his change, and people watched (This was a little ambiguous. It could be "he was watching people" or people were watching him getting his change.)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Oh dear! Poor Garth! He's usually super alert but now he has three warnings about his life and the third one he doesn't even know about yet. If the "angel" is sharing the warning with Annie but also telling her not to tell anyone about their communication, it sounds like a hard promise to keep.
Good use of suspense and details to alert the reader of some impending event.
Comments:
waited for his change, and people watched (This was a little ambiguous. It could be "he was watching people" or people were watching him getting his change.)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my post. I appreciate that you continue to follow the story and enjoy it. As usual, I am behind in responding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from royowen
Wow things are certainly hotting up in the old town tonight. First Sofia is warning Garth that his life is in danger, that some bad people are after him, there was the woman's groceries he upset, and now Annie is being consoled by the ghostly woman that Sebastian likes and Annie seems to, beautifully written Carol, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Wow things are certainly hotting up in the old town tonight. First Sofia is warning Garth that his life is in danger, that some bad people are after him, there was the woman's groceries he upset, and now Annie is being consoled by the ghostly woman that Sebastian likes and Annie seems to, beautifully written Carol, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my post. I appreciate that you continue to follow the story and enjoy it. As usual, I am behind in responding.
Hugs, Carol
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Most welcome
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This young woman really likes a spirit to me because she disappears in the tall weed or she just ran away. But it looks St. Bernard and Annie will team up to solve crimes. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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This young woman really likes a spirit to me because she disappears in the tall weed or she just ran away. But it looks St. Bernard and Annie will team up to solve crimes. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Well done.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my post. I appreciate that you continue to follow the story and enjoy it. As usual, I am behind in responding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
You are in the process of adding more mysteries to this story. I 'm little confused about Garth being curious about two cowboys that seem out of place in the crowd but after a while he sees the Spanish guy and the six cowboys join him. Garth get two messages that his life is in danger and the Anne meat the lady in white who has another message about Garth's life being in danger. It is getting very interesting.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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You are in the process of adding more mysteries to this story. I 'm little confused about Garth being curious about two cowboys that seem out of place in the crowd but after a while he sees the Spanish guy and the six cowboys join him. Garth get two messages that his life is in danger and the Anne meat the lady in white who has another message about Garth's life being in danger. It is getting very interesting.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my post. I appreciate that you continue to follow the story and enjoy it. As usual, I am behind in responding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So Garth's life is in some serious danger. He's getting many warnings. Apparently are all of his friends. This is getting really good. This may be your best story, yet. I really like it.
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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So Garth's life is in some serious danger. He's getting many warnings. Apparently are all of his friends. This is getting really good. This may be your best story, yet. I really like it.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my post. I appreciate that you continue to follow the story and enjoy it. As usual, I am behind in responding.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Artasylum
I seriously need an angle in my life when Annie is through telling your story I would love to have her in my life... You had me at Napa... I used to do art shows there and loved everything about it. yours. diana xo
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I seriously need an angle in my life when Annie is through telling your story I would love to have her in my life... You had me at Napa... I used to do art shows there and loved everything about it. yours. diana xo
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my post. I appreciate that you continue to follow the story and enjoy it. As usual, I am behind in responding.
Hugs, Carol
