Behind These Doors
Free verse for Picture This Club15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Yvonne,
You sent me to my dictionary right away, but I didn't find "brogans" there. I had to google it to see what they are... a type of shoe invented in Ireland and Scotland. So would those children...
"where children live in big, brown brogans" (nice alliteration, by the way)
be the same ones Mother Goose wrote about?
"There was an old woman who lived in a shoe.
She had so many children, she didn't know what to do.
She gave them some broth without any bread;
And whipped them all soundly and put them to bed."
And would you be hinting at this nursery rhyme as well?
"Little Jack Horner
Sat in the corner,
Eating his Christmas pie;
He put in his thumb,
And pulled out a plum,
And said, "What a good boy am I!" "
And finally, I'm guessing
"Rub-a-dub-dub,
Three men in a tub,
And who do you think they be?
The butcher, the baker, the candlestick maker,
And all of them out to sea."
You continue to relate nonsense nursery rhymes for the young and "young-at-heart", "a magic land only the young at heart can visit..."
You can't beat a good nonsense poem.
Of course, I believe fairies are real. They're like aliens... just because you can't see them, doesn't mean they aren't there. We called them "pixies" when I was a youngster. I wrote about them way back in my portfolio (2010) in a poem called "Pixie Dust".
This is a great entry for the "Door event" in your writing club. You never know where you'll find this magical land.
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Hi Yvonne,
You sent me to my dictionary right away, but I didn't find "brogans" there. I had to google it to see what they are... a type of shoe invented in Ireland and Scotland. So would those children...
"where children live in big, brown brogans" (nice alliteration, by the way)
be the same ones Mother Goose wrote about?
"There was an old woman who lived in a shoe.
She had so many children, she didn't know what to do.
She gave them some broth without any bread;
And whipped them all soundly and put them to bed."
And would you be hinting at this nursery rhyme as well?
"Little Jack Horner
Sat in the corner,
Eating his Christmas pie;
He put in his thumb,
And pulled out a plum,
And said, "What a good boy am I!" "
And finally, I'm guessing
"Rub-a-dub-dub,
Three men in a tub,
And who do you think they be?
The butcher, the baker, the candlestick maker,
And all of them out to sea."
You continue to relate nonsense nursery rhymes for the young and "young-at-heart", "a magic land only the young at heart can visit..."
You can't beat a good nonsense poem.
Of course, I believe fairies are real. They're like aliens... just because you can't see them, doesn't mean they aren't there. We called them "pixies" when I was a youngster. I wrote about them way back in my portfolio (2010) in a poem called "Pixie Dust".
This is a great entry for the "Door event" in your writing club. You never know where you'll find this magical land.
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I believe in fairies, too, but I don't tell just anyone that. It's been said that I live in my own little world, but it's okay. I'm happy and they know me there. lol. Yes, you picked on all the references in that poem. I'm so happy you liked my poem.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely fantasy free verse Yvonne, filled with nursery characters we all know and loved. I love your finish about the magical land where only the young at heart can visit. It's only in my mind that I'm still young, I guess that lets me in LOL. Enjoyed it,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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This is a lovely fantasy free verse Yvonne, filled with nursery characters we all know and loved. I love your finish about the magical land where only the young at heart can visit. It's only in my mind that I'm still young, I guess that lets me in LOL. Enjoyed it,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Of course, it lets you in. Thanks, Valda.
Comment from Ben Colder
For sure. My second son, when seeing fireflies the Dizney percents and Tinker Bell managed to get the attention one night. A firefly landed on the screen and he thought it to be Tinker Bell. Hard time explaining the difference. Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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For sure. My second son, when seeing fireflies the Dizney percents and Tinker Bell managed to get the attention one night. A firefly landed on the screen and he thought it to be Tinker Bell. Hard time explaining the difference. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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I bet it was. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Yvonne,
I'd love to visit that magic place that you've described, that lies just beyond those doors. Who would have thought that those ancient, broken doors would be concealing such treasures. Well done my friend, a delightful read. Good luck in the contest.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Hello Yvonne,
I'd love to visit that magic place that you've described, that lies just beyond those doors. Who would have thought that those ancient, broken doors would be concealing such treasures. Well done my friend, a delightful read. Good luck in the contest.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Thank you. You, too.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne.
The construction of your free verse poem is well done, and the graphic verbal images take the reader to the place where children live. Since I'm in my second childhood, I might join them.
Robert
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Hello Yvonne.
The construction of your free verse poem is well done, and the graphic verbal images take the reader to the place where children live. Since I'm in my second childhood, I might join them.
Robert
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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It's open to all who are young at heart. Come on in. Thanks, Robert.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your poem for the club, Yvonne. The color scheme pairs well with your well thought out words. I like the repeated phrase ' a land'. You used rhyme and alliteration well, too. Your many examples prove that behind those doors lies a wealth of special 'things' for the young at heart. Those could be anyone who has a desire to explore new things and not just sit and let life pass them by. Your words are inviting to all to open the doors and begin their adventures.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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You did a great job with your poem for the club, Yvonne. The color scheme pairs well with your well thought out words. I like the repeated phrase ' a land'. You used rhyme and alliteration well, too. Your many examples prove that behind those doors lies a wealth of special 'things' for the young at heart. Those could be anyone who has a desire to explore new things and not just sit and let life pass them by. Your words are inviting to all to open the doors and begin their adventures.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank you. I knew you'd understand it. We are young at heart, both of us, and that keeps us happy.
Comment from royowen
There have been quite a few interpretations of that battered, yet character filled entrance to heaven knows what, but mainly doors are an exit or an entrance, and yours is the most fascinating of all Yvonne, well done, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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There have been quite a few interpretations of that battered, yet character filled entrance to heaven knows what, but mainly doors are an exit or an entrance, and yours is the most fascinating of all Yvonne, well done, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for saying that. Mine was fantasy, not very serious. 8-)
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Well done
Comment from aryr
I truly loved the picture of the ancient doors, damommy. It did indeed open to a wonderful world that was beyond doubt a fantastic land where children only could enter. Very well done, extremely creative and greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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I truly loved the picture of the ancient doors, damommy. It did indeed open to a wonderful world that was beyond doubt a fantastic land where children only could enter. Very well done, extremely creative and greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Only the young at heart can enter. I'm sure that includes you. Thanks for reviewing.
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(smile) I really enjoyed reading this one, you are so welcome, Yvonne.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this club entry. I can imagine all those wonderful fairy tales coming from behind that huge door. This magic works for me and I can see it happening. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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I enjoyed reading this club entry. I can imagine all those wonderful fairy tales coming from behind that huge door. This magic works for me and I can see it happening. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank YOU for reviewing. Very much appreciated.
Comment from Pantygynt
Every closed door that confronts you conceals some kind of mystery and this free verse speculates on what that might be. Could it open onto the land of nursery rhymes? The poem tells us only the young at heart can pass through.
I am feeling younger by the minute.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Every closed door that confronts you conceals some kind of mystery and this free verse speculates on what that might be. Could it open onto the land of nursery rhymes? The poem tells us only the young at heart can pass through.
I am feeling younger by the minute.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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I'm glad. I know you are young at heart, so come, let's go play.
