On Bluish Pond
White Clouds Reflect On Its Glistening Veneer47 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful Nonet for the contest. You have captured many lovely elements of nature busily doing what each one does. It's a wonderful ecosystem. Good wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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A beautiful Nonet for the contest. You have captured many lovely elements of nature busily doing what each one does. It's a wonderful ecosystem. Good wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Hey Wendy... thanks so much. Di
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A well described moment in nature here and I enjoyed the activity, the colours and the sun. You packed quite a vivid scene into this nonet, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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A well described moment in nature here and I enjoyed the activity, the colours and the sun. You packed quite a vivid scene into this nonet, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Thanks Dolly.xo di
Comment from Saria/Shreyamsi
The show that nature stages in undeniably the most scenic. Your poem encapsulates the serenity of nature in brevity. The words in your poem are also well chosen. I wanted to ask you the meaning of the word 'Muscovy'?
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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The show that nature stages in undeniably the most scenic. Your poem encapsulates the serenity of nature in brevity. The words in your poem are also well chosen. I wanted to ask you the meaning of the word 'Muscovy'?
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Hey, Muscovy is a duck... they are wonderful, colorful and are the biggest ducks in America. Thanks for your stellar review.
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Thankyou for the information.
Comment from writer723
This is such lovely writing. You have expressed the sentiments of a lovely Utopian scene very well. The picture your words painted in my mind helped me to visualize the setting and the picture complimented the poem. I enjoyed the read and your inclusion of vivid, detailed descriptions. Fantastic job!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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This is such lovely writing. You have expressed the sentiments of a lovely Utopian scene very well. The picture your words painted in my mind helped me to visualize the setting and the picture complimented the poem. I enjoyed the read and your inclusion of vivid, detailed descriptions. Fantastic job!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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thanks writer for your stellar review...
Comment from palmart
Perfect poem and perfect picture! You used verbs and adjectives that make readers fly with imagination. It was for me, a nice travel! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Perfect poem and perfect picture! You used verbs and adjectives that make readers fly with imagination. It was for me, a nice travel! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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I am honored and humbled by your wonderful review. Thank you very much.
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You are really welcome, Artasylum! Thanks for your words!
Have a wonderful week!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Artasylum ,
"AH," I say to the image of ecosystem just outside your window and how----
White Clouds Reflect On Its Glistening Veneer
On Bluish Pond
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Artasylum ,
"AH," I say to the image of ecosystem just outside your window and how----
White Clouds Reflect On Its Glistening Veneer
On Bluish Pond
Gert
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank for your wonderful review Gertrude...i?m honored.yours, di
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Artasylum
You are most welcome
Gert
Comment from RGstar
My advice...concentrate on your words. The nonets shape automatically falls into shape with the correct word count. Usually falls into two shapes...a triangle, or half wing.
Can never be in the way of any specific metric triangle, because any identically aligned triangle of 2 exact equal sides, could never be asked of a nonet, neither is it. Because... your wording could never be exact, as each word then would have to be the same length, so to split into exact halves with exact measurements of each word, so renders it impossible, as well, no direction that a nonet should resemble any specific metric triangle...it simply fits into shape by way of elimination of a word. Perfect sides will never win you points for a poem...your words do...and that is what should be concentrated on. I say this because, apart from the noticeable shape, not usual for my six stars to go any place with short poems, unless the wording, not the shape, finds favour in some sort of excellence. This does.
Muscovy duck...a mother leading its ducklings. Vivid imagery. Opening=impactful.
Herons diving...
Squirrels scuttling...
Body=Movement
...and amongst all that, the Ibis (a large wading bird with a long downcurved bill) stands majestic.
Ending = colours...toasty sun....
and nature steals the show.
It surely does.
Very rarely I find a nonet that incorporates so many elements of nature in such a display of movement and beauty..and you should be rewarded.
Sadly I have only six stars to give you, but if a committee reads this, or any other person who loves poetry, this should be battling for the win.
This is an excellent piece of work. Your words are independent of the image you used, yet, backed up, not dominate your poem.
Bravo.
My best wishes...and a very well done.
Have a great week.
Keep writing.
Best wishes.
RGstar.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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My advice...concentrate on your words. The nonets shape automatically falls into shape with the correct word count. Usually falls into two shapes...a triangle, or half wing.
Can never be in the way of any specific metric triangle, because any identically aligned triangle of 2 exact equal sides, could never be asked of a nonet, neither is it. Because... your wording could never be exact, as each word then would have to be the same length, so to split into exact halves with exact measurements of each word, so renders it impossible, as well, no direction that a nonet should resemble any specific metric triangle...it simply fits into shape by way of elimination of a word. Perfect sides will never win you points for a poem...your words do...and that is what should be concentrated on. I say this because, apart from the noticeable shape, not usual for my six stars to go any place with short poems, unless the wording, not the shape, finds favour in some sort of excellence. This does.
Muscovy duck...a mother leading its ducklings. Vivid imagery. Opening=impactful.
Herons diving...
Squirrels scuttling...
Body=Movement
...and amongst all that, the Ibis (a large wading bird with a long downcurved bill) stands majestic.
Ending = colours...toasty sun....
and nature steals the show.
It surely does.
Very rarely I find a nonet that incorporates so many elements of nature in such a display of movement and beauty..and you should be rewarded.
Sadly I have only six stars to give you, but if a committee reads this, or any other person who loves poetry, this should be battling for the win.
This is an excellent piece of work. Your words are independent of the image you used, yet, backed up, not dominate your poem.
Bravo.
My best wishes...and a very well done.
Have a great week.
Keep writing.
Best wishes.
RGstar.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Your review blew me away... you gave me so much helpful instruction... it was perfect. I could never ask for more guidance ever. Your analysis so clear and... it helped me tremendously. Thank you, di
Comment from dragonpoet
Those lawn chairs look like a good place to relax and enjoy all the things you describe in you nonet. Nature is certainly varied and awe inspiring
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
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Those lawn chairs look like a good place to relax and enjoy all the things you describe in you nonet. Nature is certainly varied and awe inspiring
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are nature based, lovely, descriptive and creative.
Thank you for the author's notes - I like hearing the background. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!
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The author's words are nature based, lovely, descriptive and creative.
Thank you for the author's notes - I like hearing the background. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The words in your nonet, and the lovely picture make me envious. The imagery in your words give us such a dramatic view, that you are seeing as you work at your laptop on your porch. How wonderful. This is a lovely contest entry, Art Asylum, and I very much enjoyed reading it. Well done and good luck! :) Sandra
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The words in your nonet, and the lovely picture make me envious. The imagery in your words give us such a dramatic view, that you are seeing as you work at your laptop on your porch. How wonderful. This is a lovely contest entry, Art Asylum, and I very much enjoyed reading it. Well done and good luck! :) Sandra
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
