Quiet Lawyer
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21 total reviews
Comment from Shirley McLain
I like the chapter. I could feel the emotion and tension in your words. As usual, I didn't see a single mistake. You did an excellent job. Have a great evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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I like the chapter. I could feel the emotion and tension in your words. As usual, I didn't see a single mistake. You did an excellent job. Have a great evening. Shirley
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is an interesting chapter giving us some insight into horseback riding, Barbara. I used to go riding sometimes when I was a teenager, but I certainly wouldn't have gone off on my own, like Alexandra. She seems a little sensitive.
A few suggestions: "Chuckling Cordero continued, "They could care less." - this is another of my pet peeves. We hear this all the time "could care less" when in reality it is couldn't care less. If they could care less it would mean they do care. lol
"All of us tend (to) overlook his many faults. Are you sure you're up for it."
"He places(d) hers on her head, before he..." - a switch in tense here
"Does another one of you(r) animals need a lawyer?" -I assume you're talking about the actual animals and not the men? lol
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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This is an interesting chapter giving us some insight into horseback riding, Barbara. I used to go riding sometimes when I was a teenager, but I certainly wouldn't have gone off on my own, like Alexandra. She seems a little sensitive.
A few suggestions: "Chuckling Cordero continued, "They could care less." - this is another of my pet peeves. We hear this all the time "could care less" when in reality it is couldn't care less. If they could care less it would mean they do care. lol
"All of us tend (to) overlook his many faults. Are you sure you're up for it."
"He places(d) hers on her head, before he..." - a switch in tense here
"Does another one of you(r) animals need a lawyer?" -I assume you're talking about the actual animals and not the men? lol
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I made the changes. I worked on the "He places(d) hers on her head, before he. already once after I posted and still got wrong. Oh my!! Thank you.
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You?re welcome, Barbara:)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Quiet Lawyer Chapter 3a
Barb.
I looks like you know how to ride and give commands with the use of of reins. I like how you are describing the beauty of the ranch. And I see you like have trained show dogs part of your story.
Yes, I like the dialog
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Quiet Lawyer Chapter 3a
Barb.
I looks like you know how to ride and give commands with the use of of reins. I like how you are describing the beauty of the ranch. And I see you like have trained show dogs part of your story.
Yes, I like the dialog
Gert
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I appreciate your encouragement.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written.
"Good we can eat at our favorite star glazing spot." - oops
Now to get seventy-six more characters.............
Good luck and best wishes!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Well written.
"Good we can eat at our favorite star glazing spot." - oops
Now to get seventy-six more characters.............
Good luck and best wishes!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Ulla
I've been riding most of my life and owned several horses. So I obviously read this with interest. Now, I rode dressage, in an English saddle and I will have to say that all the commands, are done with seat and legs, rather than the bridle. Then again I don't know much about Western riding which is less subtle. An interesting chapter and well written. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I've been riding most of my life and owned several horses. So I obviously read this with interest. Now, I rode dressage, in an English saddle and I will have to say that all the commands, are done with seat and legs, rather than the bridle. Then again I don't know much about Western riding which is less subtle. An interesting chapter and well written. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. This is how I rode, but...It's been years. My aunt and uncle owned a ranch in Oklahoma. My uncle rode bulls in rodeos and is the Rodeo Hall of Fame. I hope he taught me correctly.
Comment from royowen
Alexandra is learning to ride, and, at one stage, takes off when Cordero is called on his phone, and becomes distracted, he is a little angry with Alex, and fears for for her safety with a big horse like Dolly. Someone is stealing the ranches' prize bulls, but he doesn't know how. Beautifully written Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Dad rode to the (sight) site? 2: One of the ranch (foreman's) foremen?
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Alexandra is learning to ride, and, at one stage, takes off when Cordero is called on his phone, and becomes distracted, he is a little angry with Alex, and fears for for her safety with a big horse like Dolly. Someone is stealing the ranches' prize bulls, but he doesn't know how. Beautifully written Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Dad rode to the (sight) site? 2: One of the ranch (foreman's) foremen?
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I have corrected both of those. I can't believe I did that. When I read your review I said to myself, "I didn't do that." I sure did. DUH!!! Thank you.
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That?s ok. Predictive text can do that Barbara
Comment from Dawn Munro
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I have no clue what all the X's mean. I hope it's positive. LOL
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I'm sorry, Barb; I'm just not up to 'talking' -- I can read, but socializing (reviewing) is beyond me right now.
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It's okay
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I tried to learn to ride a horse a long time ago, and failed miserably. It seems to me that Alexandra might have some history with an abusive partner, I hope he comes to the ranch and gets sorted out. :))
So now we know that they have problems with cattle rustlers, I wouldn't like to be the person who is doing it if he/ they get caught. This is going well, Barbara, I enjoyed it very much. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I tried to learn to ride a horse a long time ago, and failed miserably. It seems to me that Alexandra might have some history with an abusive partner, I hope he comes to the ranch and gets sorted out. :))
So now we know that they have problems with cattle rustlers, I wouldn't like to be the person who is doing it if he/ they get caught. This is going well, Barbara, I enjoyed it very much. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This was an in depth riding lesson. I didn't know it was so complicated. Maybe that is why the last horse I got on ran away with me. I didn't get any instructions before I tried riding. I guess our first mystery has to do with cattle rustlers. I'm enjoying the story.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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This was an in depth riding lesson. I didn't know it was so complicated. Maybe that is why the last horse I got on ran away with me. I didn't get any instructions before I tried riding. I guess our first mystery has to do with cattle rustlers. I'm enjoying the story.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
The title is becoming clearer as I continue to read. There is one sentence that doesn't flow as smoothly as the rest. It is in the section that starts with, "
see you later mom."
"Cordero grabbed his hat and placed Alexandra's on her head
place (ed) his hand in ( on) the small of her back.
Otherwise, the flow was smooth and I want to keep reading.
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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The title is becoming clearer as I continue to read. There is one sentence that doesn't flow as smoothly as the rest. It is in the section that starts with, "
see you later mom."
"Cordero grabbed his hat and placed Alexandra's on her head
place (ed) his hand in ( on) the small of her back.
Otherwise, the flow was smooth and I want to keep reading.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I fixed that area. Thank you. I took some words out as I posted and still got it wrong. I appreciate the help.
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I am looking forward to finishing football.
