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Boxcars Passing By

Life after my accident

23 total reviews 
Comment from John Ciarmello
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This took my breath away! I gather by your writing you have made considerable strides in your recovery. I can't say now that I have no idea what this all felt like; especially after reading this piece. I can only pray for you, as I am selfishly entertained.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
    Thanks, John. I just fanned you!
reply by John Ciarmello on 24-Jan-2022
    Thank you, sir.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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You really put us in there with you Ted as you relive the accident and the terrible aftermath, especially in these emotional, alliterative sentences.
screamed, scraped, scratched blindly
at primitive shadows lurking in my mind.
Well done with this one, and thanks for sharing.
valda

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
    Thanks so much, Valda for the insightful review and the great rating.
Comment from Pamplemousse1
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What a harrowing description of trauma! This is a very painful write, and the descriptive and detailed images in the poem transport the reader right into the scene of the accident that altered the course of the narrator's life forever. You've captured a lot of different emotions in this poem--ranging from helplessness to denial to even guilt and despair. You are brave to post such a poem, which from your profile bio sketch is based in reality. I think writing helps us all make sense out of these types of tragedies and understand ourselves better. Excellent poem.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
    Hey P! Another great review that is insightful and thorough and adds to my own understanding of the poem.
Comment from Gee
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Nicely done Mr. Theodore.
I've had similar experience and felt it difficult to continue at times also.
I see you chose writing as a method to find your peace. I hope it's working well for you.

Thanks for sharing
Gee

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
    Thanks for the great review, Gee. Hope all is well!
Comment from Sally Law
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This is magnificent and a testament of all you have been through, dear Teddy. Rich in metaphors and emotionally impacting. I am glad to see you've come out on the other side. Many do not.

Sending you my best today as always, and blessings for your day,
Sal XOs...

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
    Thanks, Sal. Glad we could share a day in church together, lol.
Comment from Wendy G
Exceptional
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Once more I had to hold back my review to wait for the six stars to return. The first stanza is a powerful and compelling summary of the terrible accident, ("stopped the plot of my life dead in its tracks"!!!) and the stanzas that follow are equally extraordinary in detailing the consequences as you experienced and perceived them. My goodness, it is SO EXCELLENT!
Wendy

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
    Thanks for holding back until the six stars were replenished. Great review and insightful comments!
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Oh, those lonesome whistles sure pierce our hearts. I used to jump a train that traveled to a city 45 miles South. I could hang out at the pool and rec center with all the small town girls. Then, I could catch an evening train back North and be home before it got too late. But that lonesome whistle meant a long walk home, or cold night in the bushes when I missed the train. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
    Thanks, Ric, for the insightful review and for sharing your personal history related to the poem.
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
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I wish I had 6 stars to give you. I cannot imagine the suffering you have gone through. I will keep you and yours in my prayers. your writing is insightful, powerful, creative, and very informative. I find the artwork goes very well with your poem.
Blessings,
Darlene

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2022

Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Your description here of the aftermath of your accident and how you failed to connect with the world and felt like a drifter as time passed you by. A terrible tragedy that you have come to terms with and come through with a poetic analysis of what happened, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2022

Comment from Aussie
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Mr T you are a gifted poet. I can feel your pain and loss because I have travelled that road. Hit by a car, three months in hospital, amputation of leg.
Writing is great therapy, we can talk about anything and never mind about your brain; writing comes from the heart's inspiration. Blessings, K xx

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
    Aussie, thanks for the great review and for sharing your personal story.