Reach Out
A helping hand is nearby. (5-3-5)13 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Great way to describe the need to fill that void that only God's love can fill. I like your use of Michelangelo's Sistine Chapel to illustrate your well thought out lune! Best wishes in the contest!
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Great way to describe the need to fill that void that only God's love can fill. I like your use of Michelangelo's Sistine Chapel to illustrate your well thought out lune! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from jaded831
We have forgotten today's world. Trump 's talk of hate has brainwashed the American people to think with hate instead of love. We must remember Democrat or Republican we should unite for the common good. We need to get back to love. Your poem reminds us love should prevail.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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We have forgotten today's world. Trump 's talk of hate has brainwashed the American people to think with hate instead of love. We must remember Democrat or Republican we should unite for the common good. We need to get back to love. Your poem reminds us love should prevail.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thanks for this super rating!
From what I observe of America, I totally agree with your comments. I am pleased I don't live in America; my little country is a happier place to be, with more kindness and cooperation.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This excellent lune poem is significantly enhanced by the full set of line end rhymes. Very clever. You are just missing a reference to where the illustration came from.
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This excellent lune poem is significantly enhanced by the full set of line end rhymes. Very clever. You are just missing a reference to where the illustration came from.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written lune poem. Beautiful photo choice to compliment your words as well. Great overall presentation. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a nicely written lune poem. Beautiful photo choice to compliment your words as well. Great overall presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Wendy G
A good choice of image to accompany your thoughtful and positive Lune. A message also for these troubled times. Good wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
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A good choice of image to accompany your thoughtful and positive Lune. A message also for these troubled times. Good wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good entry for the Write a Lune writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Lunes don't rhyme. I like the presentation and imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022
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Good entry for the Write a Lune writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Lunes don't rhyme. I like the presentation and imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022
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Thanks for your positive comments regarding my poem.
I checked this poetry website (https://www.writersdigest.com/write-better-poetry/poetic-form-lune) to get more details about writing a lune and this is what part of it said:
"The lune is also known as the American Haiku. It was first created by the poet Robert Kelly (truly a great poet) and was a result of Kelly's frustration with English haiku. After much experimentation, he settled on a 13-syllable, self-contained poem that has 5 syllables in the first line, 3 syllables in the second line and 5 syllable in the final line.
Unlike haiku, there are no other rules. No need for a cutting word. Rhymes are fine; subject matter is open. While there are less syllables to use, this form has a little more freedom."
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Yes, I did the same and in fact, we are writing lunes this week in my Japanese Poetry Club. I like the choice to use syllables or words count. Thank you :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This lune poem, Reach Out, has the right set up and reminds the reader that we are not alone in the world but surrounded by potential friends.
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This lune poem, Reach Out, has the right set up and reminds the reader that we are not alone in the world but surrounded by potential friends.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Gee
Nicely done Lune
A great message.
You did well.
I know this are hard, you have so few words to work with.
Great and Good Luck in the competition.
Thanks for sharing
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Nicely done Lune
A great message.
You did well.
I know this are hard, you have so few words to work with.
Great and Good Luck in the competition.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from oliver818
This is a nice poem, with a deep truth to it. Love is so important in life and you summed that up very well here. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
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This is a nice poem, with a deep truth to it. Love is so important in life and you summed that up very well here. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Thatguypk
A well-constructed Lune, with a strong rhyme. Very effective, and for those of either a humanist or religious nature, a perfect message that fits any situation. The love of God, or the love of someone caring. Well written.
PK
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A well-constructed Lune, with a strong rhyme. Very effective, and for those of either a humanist or religious nature, a perfect message that fits any situation. The love of God, or the love of someone caring. Well written.
PK
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
