Truth or Dare
The Games We Play-20 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
Hahaha! As I read, I couldn't figure out where this story might be going. I was as confused as the quarterback as to what Eleanor was doing. I loved the twist at the end when I read she was planning revenge for her brother's arrest. But DOUBLE TWIST! The sheriff had her recorded. Great story telling.
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Hahaha! As I read, I couldn't figure out where this story might be going. I was as confused as the quarterback as to what Eleanor was doing. I loved the twist at the end when I read she was planning revenge for her brother's arrest. But DOUBLE TWIST! The sheriff had her recorded. Great story telling.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is an excellent story, Carol, filled with fun, lust, tension and fear. Great imagine! You painted this picture well. I'm sorry I'm out of sixes.
I keep expecting another chapter to your novel, though.
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This is an excellent story, Carol, filled with fun, lust, tension and fear. Great imagine! You painted this picture well. I'm sorry I'm out of sixes.
I keep expecting another chapter to your novel, though.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
Comment from royowen
So, this girl was used to accusing boys of raping her, one wouldn't have thought that girls could be that dastardly, but they can. I often thought that girls could do that easily if they wanted to, but not all men can control, fortunately I always could, but I must have met nice girls, well done Carol, great story, blessings Roy
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So, this girl was used to accusing boys of raping her, one wouldn't have thought that girls could be that dastardly, but they can. I often thought that girls could do that easily if they wanted to, but not all men can control, fortunately I always could, but I must have met nice girls, well done Carol, great story, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
Comment from Thatguypk
Oh, you devious woman. What a great short story. You reeled me in like a fish on a hook, thinking this was a piece of romantic soft porn, and then, just like Eleanor, you strike like a viper. Excellent and completely unexpected ending. Quite brilliant. Only minor criticisms, "Her beautiful blonde hair appeared to have threads of gold woven within the strands as the full moon brushed across her. I was drowning when I stared into her eyes--two shimmering sapphire pools of intrigue." is a tad Mills and Boon-ish. "followed by a series of lusty guy thoughts." is an expression I don't think a man would ever write. But truthfully, a wonderful piece of writing. So enjoyable. Thank you.
PK
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Oh, you devious woman. What a great short story. You reeled me in like a fish on a hook, thinking this was a piece of romantic soft porn, and then, just like Eleanor, you strike like a viper. Excellent and completely unexpected ending. Quite brilliant. Only minor criticisms, "Her beautiful blonde hair appeared to have threads of gold woven within the strands as the full moon brushed across her. I was drowning when I stared into her eyes--two shimmering sapphire pools of intrigue." is a tad Mills and Boon-ish. "followed by a series of lusty guy thoughts." is an expression I don't think a man would ever write. But truthfully, a wonderful piece of writing. So enjoyable. Thank you.
PK
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
Comment from BethShelby
That one certainly had a surprise ending. Good job, Carol. One never knows what you are likely to come up with but for sure it isn't going to boring.
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That one certainly had a surprise ending. Good job, Carol. One never knows what you are likely to come up with but for sure it isn't going to boring.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Wow! Good one, Carol, I hate women who do that, and I'm glad your story backfired on her! Brilliant story, I wish I could give you a six, just know it deserves one. Your writing is still top-notch, my friend. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
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Wow! Good one, Carol, I hate women who do that, and I'm glad your story backfired on her! Brilliant story, I wish I could give you a six, just know it deserves one. Your writing is still top-notch, my friend. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
Comment from nancy_e_davis
"She went fishing in the wrong pond this time. Pays to be careful." Love that! It seems his father was way ahead of the evening's events. He knew what the girl was up too. Well done my friend. Nancy:)
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"She went fishing in the wrong pond this time. Pays to be careful." Love that! It seems his father was way ahead of the evening's events. He knew what the girl was up too. Well done my friend. Nancy:)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
Comment from eliz100
This is a wonderful story. It has your usual twists and turns. That keeps the reader reading. I was sucked in and could not stop reading. There is no room for improvement.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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This is a wonderful story. It has your usual twists and turns. That keeps the reader reading. I was sucked in and could not stop reading. There is no room for improvement.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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thank you so much for your encouragement and the stars. I am a needy person at the moment and though I scold myself for being so, I do appreciate the uplifting comments. I am blessed.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I really enjoyed reading this story. Yes, these young girls play games and they can cause a lot of damage.
She backed away and grinned, "Show me those pecs." (period after grinned, it's not a speech tag)
There was no way I'd read those singles wrong, but our date had ended. (signals???)
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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I really enjoyed reading this story. Yes, these young girls play games and they can cause a lot of damage.
She backed away and grinned, "Show me those pecs." (period after grinned, it's not a speech tag)
There was no way I'd read those singles wrong, but our date had ended. (signals???)
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Fixed!!
Thanks for the heads up on my usual failings and thank you for enjoying the story. My heads no on straight (but then I am not sure it ever was) but I am focusing on writing the short stories. I appreciate your help and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Wonderfully drafted story. It deserves a six. Very steamy, with great twists and turns that kept me off-balance. Superbly written. Great stuff. You are a master.
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Wonderfully drafted story. It deserves a six. Very steamy, with great twists and turns that kept me off-balance. Superbly written. Great stuff. You are a master.
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much. You are exactly what the doctor of writing ordered for this old lady. My confidence deflates and you come by and give me a shot in the arm. I thank you so very much for the flattery and for enjoying the story.
Smiles, Carol
