To Clark
Take Note contest entry8 total reviews
Comment from Thatguypk
I wish I had six stars to give this. What a great take on the theme of the contest, and a highly amusing and well-worded piece of poetry. I love good comedy, and this is right up there. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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I wish I had six stars to give this. What a great take on the theme of the contest, and a highly amusing and well-worded piece of poetry. I love good comedy, and this is right up there. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the great review and big six offer, Guy. Yeah, humor is mostly what I stick with on here. The serious stuff rarely goes over well in these contests. I'm glad you have a good sense of humor, friend. Laughter's always the best medicine. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Ron
Comment from L. Kalere
Treasonous iconoclast! Superman should be untouchable. And yet I find myself laughing at your blasphemy :)). Great job. Best of luck in the contest... you have my support.
Linda
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Treasonous iconoclast! Superman should be untouchable. And yet I find myself laughing at your blasphemy :)). Great job. Best of luck in the contest... you have my support.
Linda
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Lol. Thank you so much for the hilarious review and support, Linda. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silliness. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Ron
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
The writer does pen a humorous story. It does rhyme and flows very well. I found the ending perfect. It gave me a chuckle which is always needed. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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The writer does pen a humorous story. It does rhyme and flows very well. I found the ending perfect. It gave me a chuckle which is always needed. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Darlene.Yes, laughter is always the best medicine. I dearly appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silliness. Have a great day.
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Ron
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Have a great day as well.
Comment from GeraldShuler
Truly talented in stating the obvious. I have wondered the same thing for years. This poem is great with its rhythm and rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022
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Truly talented in stating the obvious. I have wondered the same thing for years. This poem is great with its rhythm and rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Gerald. I just wanted to come up with something outrageous for this contest. lol I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
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"Like" is too loose... I loved it.
Comment from LisaMay
Nooooooo!!!!! Superman isn't real?????? And he's a SANDWICH THIEF???? My Man of Steel has feet of clay, you say. Actually, I was beginning to have my doubts that he was a journalist, but I was sure about the hero stuff - I mean to say, we all saw him being a hero, but not being a journalist.
Another winning write! You keep draggin' them from your skull, my friend.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Nooooooo!!!!! Superman isn't real?????? And he's a SANDWICH THIEF???? My Man of Steel has feet of clay, you say. Actually, I was beginning to have my doubts that he was a journalist, but I was sure about the hero stuff - I mean to say, we all saw him being a hero, but not being a journalist.
Another winning write! You keep draggin' them from your skull, my friend.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Lol. Yeah, I have to drag them from deep regions of my skull just so they can be this dumb. Haha. I'm actually foreseeing failure written all over this one but I had fun at least. That's all I care about. Thank you for the great review, J.
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Comment from robyn corum
Dear Lois Lane,
I love it!!! This was smart, rollicking, unexpected, and just plain FUN! From the opening lines, I was HOOKED. The rhythm and scansion were delightful (almost) all the way through - and you've said some things I've wondered about ALL MY LIFE!
I mean - good grief - his disguise ... is... GLASSES? Really? Come on. Well, I know his demeanor and mannerisms also seem to make the newspaper guy quite a stretch from the Man O' Steel - but it sure does seem like SOMEBODY - out of a whole city full of people? -- might bring up the possibility. ha
Anyway, this was delightful - and there also seems to be a perfectly good reason for the letter or message. This may be an Achilles Heel for some of the others, I think.
A couple of things to consider:
1.) A book, 'The (M)an of (S)teel.'
2.) Replace my sandwich that you stole
from the office fridge.
--> the last line needs another syllable?
Also - to be perfectly frank (and a little harsh, but honest) the last stanza is a BIT of a letdown. After so much brilliance -- we end on a stolen sandwich?
You might consider something more impactful? A bribe? She could ask for so many different things! Money, jewelry, a trip to ANYWHERE (like on his back!)
It just seems a little (--yawn!--) to go sandwich.
Anyway - still worth a six in my book - and you are welcome to ignore anything you want. Good luck!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Dear Lois Lane,
I love it!!! This was smart, rollicking, unexpected, and just plain FUN! From the opening lines, I was HOOKED. The rhythm and scansion were delightful (almost) all the way through - and you've said some things I've wondered about ALL MY LIFE!
I mean - good grief - his disguise ... is... GLASSES? Really? Come on. Well, I know his demeanor and mannerisms also seem to make the newspaper guy quite a stretch from the Man O' Steel - but it sure does seem like SOMEBODY - out of a whole city full of people? -- might bring up the possibility. ha
Anyway, this was delightful - and there also seems to be a perfectly good reason for the letter or message. This may be an Achilles Heel for some of the others, I think.
A couple of things to consider:
1.) A book, 'The (M)an of (S)teel.'
2.) Replace my sandwich that you stole
from the office fridge.
--> the last line needs another syllable?
Also - to be perfectly frank (and a little harsh, but honest) the last stanza is a BIT of a letdown. After so much brilliance -- we end on a stolen sandwich?
You might consider something more impactful? A bribe? She could ask for so many different things! Money, jewelry, a trip to ANYWHERE (like on his back!)
It just seems a little (--yawn!--) to go sandwich.
Anyway - still worth a six in my book - and you are welcome to ignore anything you want. Good luck!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Hey, Robyn, hello. Thank you so much for the great review and giant sixer. I changed the book title to caps. I knew I was short a syllable in the last line. I changed it back to the extra syllable but the meter seems off to me like this and I can't manage to come up with another way of putting it. Lol. So, I'll give that some more thought. Before I even started actually writing this, I had the dumb sandwich idea in my head and just wanted to get it in there to be humorous but couldn't figure out a place to put it while building it. So, it's at the end. Lol. I really appreciate the gracious six, Robyn. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Thank you again.
Comment from the13thpoet
Well nameless random poet, as a lover of poetry and a lover of superman since childhood, I have to say I'm so so jealous of this one, I wish i wrote it myself. you asked the questions I always wanted to know: how the hell does no one realize that Clark is Superman? anyway. you did a great and wonderful job, I wish you all the luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Well nameless random poet, as a lover of poetry and a lover of superman since childhood, I have to say I'm so so jealous of this one, I wish i wrote it myself. you asked the questions I always wanted to know: how the hell does no one realize that Clark is Superman? anyway. you did a great and wonderful job, I wish you all the luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the fantastic review, 13. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes, friend. I'm glad you liked my silly take on the contest.
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, what a hoot! A great entry for the contest, it should do really well, good luck. Everyone who watched a Superman movie or TV show all thought it was a silly disguise. But who knew, except you, that he stole sandwiches from the fridge? Excellent.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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LOL, what a hoot! A great entry for the contest, it should do really well, good luck. Everyone who watched a Superman movie or TV show all thought it was a silly disguise. But who knew, except you, that he stole sandwiches from the fridge? Excellent.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the great review, Terry. I really appreciate the stars and good luck wishes. Yeah, I just had to have one thing in there that flawed him. Lol. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this ridiculous piece. Thanks again.
