Is There Hope?
Is it true? Is the world hopelessly lost?5 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
God is the Answer for the World is what might normally have been the title of this poem, but I like how you titled your acrostic with a question instead. Very clever and the poem is also well done and cleverly put together. I hope this does well in the contest. It is beautifully rhymed and musical and very thought-provoking as well. I enjoyed this. MM
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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God is the Answer for the World is what might normally have been the title of this poem, but I like how you titled your acrostic with a question instead. Very clever and the poem is also well done and cleverly put together. I hope this does well in the contest. It is beautifully rhymed and musical and very thought-provoking as well. I enjoyed this. MM
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and generous rating. I am new at writing blank verse so I wasn't sure it would be done right or received well. Your review gives me some peace of mind about it. Thank you.
Comment from T.E. Loper
I like the way the meter in this poem emphasizes the strength of the message. You've written a series of well-rhymed couplets in iambic tetrameter. Many of the lines, particularly those that convey power, are headless. For example, "Do we yield or do we stand?" and "Weakness? No...the strong at heart." Dropping the first unaccented syllable of the iamb begins those lines with strength, matching the message.
It doesn't matter if you intended this meter or not (it's a type of catalexis). If you intended to drop those first syllables, it shows poetic skill; if the meter was unintended, it shows a highly tuned natural ear for poetic meter. Either way, the poem, and the poet deserve praise.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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I like the way the meter in this poem emphasizes the strength of the message. You've written a series of well-rhymed couplets in iambic tetrameter. Many of the lines, particularly those that convey power, are headless. For example, "Do we yield or do we stand?" and "Weakness? No...the strong at heart." Dropping the first unaccented syllable of the iamb begins those lines with strength, matching the message.
It doesn't matter if you intended this meter or not (it's a type of catalexis). If you intended to drop those first syllables, it shows poetic skill; if the meter was unintended, it shows a highly tuned natural ear for poetic meter. Either way, the poem, and the poet deserve praise.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and generous rating. Those lines were unintentional and I thought it was bad writing... I am not well versed in poetry. Your knowledgeable input encourages me to try to learn more about what I am trying to do. Who knows? There may be a poet in me after all. Thank you.
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Oh, golly?the poet's there. Learning about the academics of poetry is less important than writing and reading poetry. You'll discover poetic tools over time naturally, like the way you write.
Comment from Sally Law
God Is The Answer For World! Well said and penned in acrostic form. How we need this word now more than ever! Thank you for sharing.
Sending you my best today as always and blessings abundant,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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God Is The Answer For World! Well said and penned in acrostic form. How we need this word now more than ever! Thank you for sharing.
Sending you my best today as always and blessings abundant,
Sal :))
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and generous rating. I always appreciate your knowledgeable input and honest views.
Comment from rspoet
This is an interesting poem for the contest
with very good rhymes throughout
and a strong message.
The only possible problem I see is that its
not an complete acrostic where the first letters
spell out a word or sentence (last four lines, WOLD)
perhaps add a line with R (WORLD)
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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This is an interesting poem for the contest
with very good rhymes throughout
and a strong message.
The only possible problem I see is that its
not an complete acrostic where the first letters
spell out a word or sentence (last four lines, WOLD)
perhaps add a line with R (WORLD)
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and generous rating. I have added the line that somehow got omitted. Thank you for pointing it out.
Comment from LisaMay
I can see that you intend this acrostic poem to read: "God is the answer to the world", but you have left out the line beginning with the 'R' in 'WORLD'
Your rhyming is excellent in this poem, and I agree with the thoughts you express. I feel the key lines in this poem are: "Each person living as they please
Results in chaos... never peace."
"I did it My Way" is okay for a song, but not for cooperative living.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I can see that you intend this acrostic poem to read: "God is the answer to the world", but you have left out the line beginning with the 'R' in 'WORLD'
Your rhyming is excellent in this poem, and I agree with the thoughts you express. I feel the key lines in this poem are: "Each person living as they please
Results in chaos... never peace."
"I did it My Way" is okay for a song, but not for cooperative living.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and generous rating. I have added the line that somehow got omitted. Thank you for pointing it out to me.
