Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another good chapter, Barbara. I like that Alexandra is starting to loosen up a bit and she and Cordero are getting to know each other. Looking forward to following it.
A couple of things: "As Alexandra and Rosa finished dinner, Jorge and Cordero walked to the kitchen..." - when I first read this I was confused. It sounds like Alexandra and Rosa have eaten dinner. Maybe put in finished "making" dinner?
A couple of typos: "A grinned(grin) crossed Cordero's lips."
"He nodded (in) his mom's direction as he moved closer to Alexandra"
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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This is another good chapter, Barbara. I like that Alexandra is starting to loosen up a bit and she and Cordero are getting to know each other. Looking forward to following it.
A couple of things: "As Alexandra and Rosa finished dinner, Jorge and Cordero walked to the kitchen..." - when I first read this I was confused. It sounds like Alexandra and Rosa have eaten dinner. Maybe put in finished "making" dinner?
A couple of typos: "A grinned(grin) crossed Cordero's lips."
"He nodded (in) his mom's direction as he moved closer to Alexandra"
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the help. I'm amazed at how often I edited that and still missed them.
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You?re welcome, Barbara. I know how you feel. It just takes a different pair of eyes sometimes.
Comment from damommy
I especially love Cord, and I enjoyed "meeting" the horses. It was a good plan for her not to ride until she knew Dolly. I think I'd like to take a chance with Chip. lol.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I especially love Cord, and I enjoyed "meeting" the horses. It was a good plan for her not to ride until she knew Dolly. I think I'd like to take a chance with Chip. lol.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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LOL Chip is really a good boy as we will discover. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Barbara, I have no sixes left to give to you. This is just up my street. After sailing, horse riding has been my thing up to a few years back. I've owned several horses and competed in dressage. I use to ride an appaloosa in Alaska when I be was on stop over there. He was a great teacher of dressage. Quite unusual for the breed.
A grinned crossed Cordero's lips =A grin crossed ... Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Oh, Barbara, I have no sixes left to give to you. This is just up my street. After sailing, horse riding has been my thing up to a few years back. I've owned several horses and competed in dressage. I use to ride an appaloosa in Alaska when I be was on stop over there. He was a great teacher of dressage. Quite unusual for the breed.
A grinned crossed Cordero's lips =A grin crossed ... Ulla:)))
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the catch. I never understand why or how those errors get made. I know better and I edit a lot. I appreciate the help.
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Happens to me all the time. Sometimes I'm as puzzled as you are. LOL, Ulla:)))
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Excellent beginning of the novel. You kept me intrigued throughout the chapter, and you began to fill in the characteristics of the characters. I look forward to following this novel from the beginning, and I will read as much of Football as remains (and maybe more). Well done.
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Excellent beginning of the novel. You kept me intrigued throughout the chapter, and you began to fill in the characteristics of the characters. I look forward to following this novel from the beginning, and I will read as much of Football as remains (and maybe more). Well done.
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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You're sweet thank you. I like to build characters as I write.
Comment from royowen
I like the story, of a determined but friendly hero Cordero, who is obviously attracted to Alexandra, his parents, Rosa and Jorge. And the Foreman, Jim, who takes care of things. Alexandra is boarding at the house, and is loved by the dog, Samson, of course, an now the adventure begins. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I like the story, of a determined but friendly hero Cordero, who is obviously attracted to Alexandra, his parents, Rosa and Jorge. And the Foreman, Jim, who takes care of things. Alexandra is boarding at the house, and is loved by the dog, Samson, of course, an now the adventure begins. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Most welcome Barbara
