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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Woosh"Adventures around & upon a hill
9 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Thanks for writing and posting. I wondered if it was just me, unfamiliar with your style but ...
"Morning wafted a clue up to my room, of fresh made coffee." - This is awkward to me.
"While we nonparticipants..." the sentence that begins with these words is actually three sentences combined with commas.
Sorry for the heavy-handed review.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thanks for writing and posting. I wondered if it was just me, unfamiliar with your style but ...
"Morning wafted a clue up to my room, of fresh made coffee." - This is awkward to me.
"While we nonparticipants..." the sentence that begins with these words is actually three sentences combined with commas.
Sorry for the heavy-handed review.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you fro your review. You are right, you are unfamiliar with my style and you are coming in cold on my voice and this book. You are welcome to read the previous chapters in my portfolio. There is no need for a review, just enjoy.
Comment from prettybluebirds
This sounds very interesting. I will have to check you out on Facebook. I have always felt that my son, who was killed in1985, is very sad he had to leave me and is still around. Thank you for this informative writing.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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This sounds very interesting. I will have to check you out on Facebook. I have always felt that my son, who was killed in1985, is very sad he had to leave me and is still around. Thank you for this informative writing.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. You are welcome to read the previous chapters in my portfolio. No need for any reviews. Just enjoy. I'm sorry for your deep tragic loss. If there is anything can do, please let know.
Liz
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You've made a huge step here with releasing the souls, but it seems as if it should be more dramatic. Still you are continuing to move the story at the same pace so I assume something more exciting will happen.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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You've made a huge step here with releasing the souls, but it seems as if it should be more dramatic. Still you are continuing to move the story at the same pace so I assume something more exciting will happen.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. A friend suggested I include that this book is based on my experience. I'm glad I did, it helps readers to know this all really happened.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like how you describe the finding of peace for some left to hang between space souls; the pendulum is the medium of communication but also the tool that is able to move them over, towards the light and space.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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I like how you describe the finding of peace for some left to hang between space souls; the pendulum is the medium of communication but also the tool that is able to move them over, towards the light and space.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you are enjoying it and getting it.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent piece my friend! The storyline is interesting and held my attention throughout the piece!
Typo - ("We use it with respect for others�?�¢?? privacy and to bring")
Those are gremlins and just highlight the entire line and type over it the correct words and it should be fine! I would go over the entire piece more to make sure there are no more gremlins!
Thanks so much for sharing and may God bless you and your family this New Year;-)
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Excellent piece my friend! The storyline is interesting and held my attention throughout the piece!
Typo - ("We use it with respect for others�?�¢?? privacy and to bring")
Those are gremlins and just highlight the entire line and type over it the correct words and it should be fine! I would go over the entire piece more to make sure there are no more gremlins!
Thanks so much for sharing and may God bless you and your family this New Year;-)
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I was told using the alternate (something) editor would eliminate those. I guess that doesn't even help. Thanks for the heads up.
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;-)
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another interesting chapter, Liz. For those of us who are unfamiliar with what you do, it seems like paranormal fiction. I would love to see this in real life. I've never heard of it before. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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This is another interesting chapter, Liz. For those of us who are unfamiliar with what you do, it seems like paranormal fiction. I would love to see this in real life. I've never heard of it before. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. A friend suggested I include that this book is based on my experience. I'm glad I did, it helps readers to know this all really happened.
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You?re most welcome, Liz
Comment from aryr
This was an excellent continuation chapter, Liz. I am so glad that you ask permission to send the boys to the light. I am grateful that Madeline understood this necessity. Poor Cordelia with her inner dowsing was truly left in limbo. This was indeed a definite job for both women and they really needed to know if others felt the shift. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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This was an excellent continuation chapter, Liz. I am so glad that you ask permission to send the boys to the light. I am grateful that Madeline understood this necessity. Poor Cordelia with her inner dowsing was truly left in limbo. This was indeed a definite job for both women and they really needed to know if others felt the shift. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. A friend suggested I include that this book is based on my experience. I'm glad I did, it helps readers to know this all really happened.
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So very true, Liz. You are most welcome, I'm enjoying each chapter.
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Yay...it is great to have you on board
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(smile)
Comment from juliaSjames
I enjoyed this chapter as a stand alone read..It was easy to follow the narrative and the characters were well depicted..
The use of the pendulum to communicate with the spirits was fascinating..
I think you are an expert in such matters because of the ease with which you describe the details.
Thanks for sharing
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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I enjoyed this chapter as a stand alone read..It was easy to follow the narrative and the characters were well depicted..
The use of the pendulum to communicate with the spirits was fascinating..
I think you are an expert in such matters because of the ease with which you describe the details.
Thanks for sharing
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. A friend suggested I include that this book is based on my experience. I'm glad I did, it helps readers to know this all really happened.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You used dialogue effectively here to move the plot on well.
Potential SPAGs for your consideration:
who in your class > who is in your class
I am often wearing it > I often wear it
if they want to be set > if they wanted to be set
spent a moment to get into > spent a moment getting into
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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You used dialogue effectively here to move the plot on well.
Potential SPAGs for your consideration:
who in your class > who is in your class
I am often wearing it > I often wear it
if they want to be set > if they wanted to be set
spent a moment to get into > spent a moment getting into
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your supportive review. A friend suggested I include that this book is based on my experience. I'm glad I did, it helps readers to know this all really happened.
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It certainly does.