God Overnight Develops
33 Word Fiction32 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
I love the subversive aspect of this painting that many folk miss. The fact that God is sitting inside a human brain, suggesting perhaps that man created God not the other way around...
Anyway, I'm not totally convince of the benevolent nature of the Supreme Being. Although seeing as this is fiction i can buy into it!
All words present & correct.
All the best
GMG
I love the subversive aspect of this painting that many folk miss. The fact that God is sitting inside a human brain, suggesting perhaps that man created God not the other way around...
Anyway, I'm not totally convince of the benevolent nature of the Supreme Being. Although seeing as this is fiction i can buy into it!
All words present & correct.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
Comment from Jay Squires
So... God creates the virus so that Man ... whatever is left of Man ... will appreciate the virus-free life he will soon give them. Is that what you're saying? "disease-free" really needs its hyphenation. I realize that will make you one word short, but I'm sure you can find one to replace it. Good luck!
So... God creates the virus so that Man ... whatever is left of Man ... will appreciate the virus-free life he will soon give them. Is that what you're saying? "disease-free" really needs its hyphenation. I realize that will make you one word short, but I'm sure you can find one to replace it. Good luck!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
Comment from Wendy G
I presume you are talking about when Jesus returns? There won't be a sin free world or disease free world before then, according to the Bible. Interesting "fiction" story - thought-provoking for sure.
Wendy
I presume you are talking about when Jesus returns? There won't be a sin free world or disease free world before then, according to the Bible. Interesting "fiction" story - thought-provoking for sure.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
God does make life pure; I wish He would wash away the coronavirus and make the earth disease free. We must pray to Him. If we believe, He will listen.
God does make life pure; I wish He would wash away the coronavirus and make the earth disease free. We must pray to Him. If we believe, He will listen.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
Comment from lancellot
This is a it confusing. It is written as fiction. But it is lacking in story elements. Also, it seems to be one continuous sentence. That is a bit hard to tell too because of the numerous words beginning in capitals.
I recommend rewriting and reediting this.
This is a it confusing. It is written as fiction. But it is lacking in story elements. Also, it seems to be one continuous sentence. That is a bit hard to tell too because of the numerous words beginning in capitals.
I recommend rewriting and reediting this.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
Comment from GE Parson
MMMMM, Not sure I understand the message of your poem. I believe God has finished creating all He is going to create. It is true His creation s a gift to all of man kind to live a happy, healthy life.
Not sure what to what you were referring about the viral disease
MMMMM, Not sure I understand the message of your poem. I believe God has finished creating all He is going to create. It is true His creation s a gift to all of man kind to live a happy, healthy life.
Not sure what to what you were referring about the viral disease
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
Comment from LisaMay
I am confused. This is a fiction story so why should I believe that you have personal insight to God's overnight plans? The sentences are a bit awkward too, with unusual use of capital letters. If God wants to bless us with healthy disease free living then that should be a true story.
I am confused. This is a fiction story so why should I believe that you have personal insight to God's overnight plans? The sentences are a bit awkward too, with unusual use of capital letters. If God wants to bless us with healthy disease free living then that should be a true story.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
Comment from tfawcus
God may well grant us a pandemic-free world. In granting man the ingenuity to create vaccines, He has given us the means, if we choose to use them. God helps those who help themselves.
God may well grant us a pandemic-free world. In granting man the ingenuity to create vaccines, He has given us the means, if we choose to use them. God helps those who help themselves.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I hope that it's not fiction and that God will one day help us with the virus, I'm sure He doesn't want this, but it is man-made and we have to suffer the consequences. Well done, and good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx
I hope that it's not fiction and that God will one day help us with the virus, I'm sure He doesn't want this, but it is man-made and we have to suffer the consequences. Well done, and good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
I think I agree with you - but this was a little hard to understand. (To be honest - sorry!) Sometimes people think it's awesome to sound smart and to use bigger words in their posts, but it's really easier to communicate with more normal, conversational language.
Thanks!
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Dear Mystery Writer,
I think I agree with you - but this was a little hard to understand. (To be honest - sorry!) Sometimes people think it's awesome to sound smart and to use bigger words in their posts, but it's really easier to communicate with more normal, conversational language.
Thanks!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022