God Overnight Develops
33 Word Fiction32 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Your expression is extremely clear. What an optimistic vision you have for the world. This reassures me that we may in fact have a future after all, even though we do have other urgent and major problems to cope with.
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Your expression is extremely clear. What an optimistic vision you have for the world. This reassures me that we may in fact have a future after all, even though we do have other urgent and major problems to cope with.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2022
Comment from Ramona Agin
I find it very hopeful and positive focusing on all the good things that God does for during our lives and each day. It's very well written. It flows nicely and makes me feel happy and positive.
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I find it very hopeful and positive focusing on all the good things that God does for during our lives and each day. It's very well written. It flows nicely and makes me feel happy and positive.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
Comment from Gee
Interesting analogy to the current situation with covid.
I never looked at it this way.
I enjoyed your 33 word story. I imagine that is hard to do.
Thanks for sharing
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Interesting analogy to the current situation with covid.
I never looked at it this way.
I enjoyed your 33 word story. I imagine that is hard to do.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
God plans a viral disease? Maybe he those plans are already in place as we fight the pandemic and try our best to survive. Perhaps this is a punishment for us all for not looking after our planet properly, an unusual write, love Dolly x
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God plans a viral disease? Maybe he those plans are already in place as we fight the pandemic and try our best to survive. Perhaps this is a punishment for us all for not looking after our planet properly, an unusual write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
Comment from amahra
Wow, sounds like this god of yours is confused. First he does good deeds to bless his creation because he wants them to live a healthy living; then he plans a viral disease free living for the world. Hm....
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Wow, sounds like this god of yours is confused. First he does good deeds to bless his creation because he wants them to live a healthy living; then he plans a viral disease free living for the world. Hm....
Comment Written 06-Jan-2022
Comment from moongirlwriter
Whoa. . . so very true. It seems interesting to me that the more freedom we have as a species, the more flawed we become. It does make me wonder if God is now having second thoughts about this thing called being human. Nicely written, good luck.
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Whoa. . . so very true. It seems interesting to me that the more freedom we have as a species, the more flawed we become. It does make me wonder if God is now having second thoughts about this thing called being human. Nicely written, good luck.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2022
Comment from BethShelby
These are positive thoughts in this thirty-three word story, which I wish wasn't listed as fiction. I do believe God creative powers aren't on a time frame and his love never ceases and He works constantly to bring healing to His children.
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These are positive thoughts in this thirty-three word story, which I wish wasn't listed as fiction. I do believe God creative powers aren't on a time frame and his love never ceases and He works constantly to bring healing to His children.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2022
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for the reassuring words! Yes, God's original Creation was perfect in every way, until the Fall and then everything went badly including the appearances of diseases but these were never in His plan. But He can heal us and provided the way to Him.
Best wishes in the contest!
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Thanks for the reassuring words! Yes, God's original Creation was perfect in every way, until the Fall and then everything went badly including the appearances of diseases but these were never in His plan. But He can heal us and provided the way to Him.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2022
Comment from Ulla
I'm not quite sure what it is you want to say in those 33 words. It comes across quite disjointed. I'm so sorry, but I think it needs a bit of re-writing and a lot of editing. Ulla.
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I'm not quite sure what it is you want to say in those 33 words. It comes across quite disjointed. I'm so sorry, but I think it needs a bit of re-writing and a lot of editing. Ulla.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2022
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
I like the way you have used the words available to write such. message. I like the last clause in particular.
A comma isn't needed after develops - this is a list and not a clause. Even the Oxford comma isn't needed as it's only 2 things. Commas wouldn't be misplaced around overnight, as this would work as an embedded clause.
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I like the way you have used the words available to write such. message. I like the last clause in particular.
A comma isn't needed after develops - this is a list and not a clause. Even the Oxford comma isn't needed as it's only 2 things. Commas wouldn't be misplaced around overnight, as this would work as an embedded clause.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2022
