Last Good Morning
30 words6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This thirty-word story, Last Good Morning, has the proper word count and isolates the moment when the parting of a couple between life and death becomes real. Poignant.
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This thirty-word story, Last Good Morning, has the proper word count and isolates the moment when the parting of a couple between life and death becomes real. Poignant.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
Comment from Annmuma
Makes the heart hurt! I've been there.
The imagery is outstanding. Great work and should win this contest. You have my vote and my Happy New Wishes as well. ann
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Makes the heart hurt! I've been there.
The imagery is outstanding. Great work and should win this contest. You have my vote and my Happy New Wishes as well. ann
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thanks for the great review and your vote.
Comment from Begin Again
I doubt anyone can prepare themselves for that final goodbye regardless of their age. You've written a story in the allotted words, but one I wouldn't want anyone to live. I sat at my mother's bedside and my husband's as they took their last breath. It wasn't easy.
Good luck in the contest.
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I doubt anyone can prepare themselves for that final goodbye regardless of their age. You've written a story in the allotted words, but one I wouldn't want anyone to live. I sat at my mother's bedside and my husband's as they took their last breath. It wasn't easy.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A great response to the 30 word fiction prompt. The story is minimalistic and stark with a lot of implied emotional undertones. Very well done!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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A great response to the 30 word fiction prompt. The story is minimalistic and stark with a lot of implied emotional undertones. Very well done!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
Comment from SimianSavant
There isn't much I can add to what you already wrote here. This is a very powerful piece of writing in just 30 words, and will get attention in this contest. I only have a small formatting suggestion: under the advanced options (not the advanced editor) change the image size from the default so that your text does not start wrapping to the right of the picture. It is a little distracting at the beginning of the piece. I would also consider cropping the bottom of your rose picture a bit, to even out the dimensions.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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There isn't much I can add to what you already wrote here. This is a very powerful piece of writing in just 30 words, and will get attention in this contest. I only have a small formatting suggestion: under the advanced options (not the advanced editor) change the image size from the default so that your text does not start wrapping to the right of the picture. It is a little distracting at the beginning of the piece. I would also consider cropping the bottom of your rose picture a bit, to even out the dimensions.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks for your review and the six stars. Just wondering how do I crop the picture? I have changed it a little, please have a look and let me know any suggestions.
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You can do it right on your phone (if you have an iPhone) or use Microsoft Paint or pixlr.com. Any basic image editing app should allow you to crop.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer,
In thirty words, you have managed to tell an entire story.
The final goodbye of a loved one.
Oh... incredibly real and poignant.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Hello Mystery Writer,
In thirty words, you have managed to tell an entire story.
The final goodbye of a loved one.
Oh... incredibly real and poignant.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks for your review. I was actually having trouble with the title and accompying picture. Hope they're ok.
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Exellent!
diane
