The Return
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Comment from irishauthorme
Wow! The scene is mesmerizing. You conveyed the emotions, her responses to his stimulation in intimate detail, but with good taste.
Your imagery was great, the teasing was expertly portrayed.
I was surprised by her dream lover's sudden departure, but that also added some spice, she remained a virgin, with no immediate prospects.
"A little saucy," you said?
Hmm, how about a shot of Tobasco?
irish
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2022
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Wow! The scene is mesmerizing. You conveyed the emotions, her responses to his stimulation in intimate detail, but with good taste.
Your imagery was great, the teasing was expertly portrayed.
I was surprised by her dream lover's sudden departure, but that also added some spice, she remained a virgin, with no immediate prospects.
"A little saucy," you said?
Hmm, how about a shot of Tobasco?
irish
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2022
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LOL!!! A shot of Tabasco!! That was so funny! Thank you so much for reading the prologue and you great comments. I've learnt that most on here will be fine with sex scenes if they are not porn, (there is a difference) but I did lose two fans because of it. Reading your message on PM on this subject, I'd advice you to write your story the way YOU want it to read, and ignore those who might be upset about it. They can always click on skip. Thanks again for this fabulous review. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from dragonpoet
Sandra,
This is a very vivid dream that just may come to pass as your sentence next to the word Prologue states. But how will they meet.
Keep wriitng and stay heatlhy
Joan
reply by the author on 01-May-2022
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Sandra,
This is a very vivid dream that just may come to pass as your sentence next to the word Prologue states. But how will they meet.
Keep wriitng and stay heatlhy
Joan
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 01-May-2022
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They meet, but not yet. She has a lot of things to do before they finally see each other, and only then because she has to save her someone who looks like her identical twin. That's a clue for you. Lol. Thank you, Joan, for reading this part, that was kind of you. There are no more parts like this apart from one halfway through the book. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
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You're very welcome. So she is feeling what her twin is feeling?
Comment from J. P. Olesen
Hi, Sandra,
I'm not sure I'm old enough to read this. Wow. You ever write anything with "strong sexual content," please send me a PM so I don't miss it!
Seriously though, no flaws I could see, and exceptionally well done. You are a truly gifted author.
Best,
J. P.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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Hi, Sandra,
I'm not sure I'm old enough to read this. Wow. You ever write anything with "strong sexual content," please send me a PM so I don't miss it!
Seriously though, no flaws I could see, and exceptionally well done. You are a truly gifted author.
Best,
J. P.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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What a lovely review, thank you! I had to laugh at what you said, though. That scene is the glue that puts the rest of the story together later in the book. (in chapter 17) I'm posting chapter 16 tomorrow. So there is your warning.
Thank you so much for reading my prologue, and the lovely review and six stars. You've put a huge smile on my face. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Sandra,
I wish I had six stars to give you!
What a passionate way to begin a story!
I'm glad I decided to start at the beginning of your saga.
Exceptional work. My glasses are steaming. lol.
Have a safe and wonderful week, Sandra.
Cindy
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Sandra,
I wish I had six stars to give you!
What a passionate way to begin a story!
I'm glad I decided to start at the beginning of your saga.
Exceptional work. My glasses are steaming. lol.
Have a safe and wonderful week, Sandra.
Cindy
Comment Written 09-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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I always hold my breath when I see it's the proloque being reviewed, I could barely stop cringing when I first posted it. Lol. it's so different to what I've written before. I'm glad your glasses are steaming! Lol. Thanks so much, my friend, and another thank you for thinking it was worth a six. Love and hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from John Ciarmello
O, dear Lord! This read like one of those paperback sex novels. The ones you pick up off the book rack at Walmart and start reading somewhere in the middle, but are too embarrassed to buy it; so, you slink behind a display and soak up as much as you can of it. Not that I've done that, but I know what they're doing when I walk by. I mean I'm not stupid. I won't tell you that your writing brought me in the room, because that would just be creepy, but DAMN that linoleum was cold! Anyway, you are a fabulous writer, and I will always be a huge fan. Loved it!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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O, dear Lord! This read like one of those paperback sex novels. The ones you pick up off the book rack at Walmart and start reading somewhere in the middle, but are too embarrassed to buy it; so, you slink behind a display and soak up as much as you can of it. Not that I've done that, but I know what they're doing when I walk by. I mean I'm not stupid. I won't tell you that your writing brought me in the room, because that would just be creepy, but DAMN that linoleum was cold! Anyway, you are a fabulous writer, and I will always be a huge fan. Loved it!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Oh my word, LOL, John, that review is so funny. I can tell you, it was so hard to write, but as you now know, my book is not a sex book, LOL! I have lost two fans, though. They are very religious and didn't like that I could even think that way, let alone write it. It is all part of the plan which you will discover soon. I promise that was as spicy as it will get. Thank you, John, I really couldn't help but laugh, and I'm honestly so pleased I haven't lost you, too. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
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O my, on the loss of fans! I feel if the nonreligious aren't offended by their religious writing why should they be offended by anything other than their preference. The simplicity of it would be, don't read it. You gave appropriate warning. See, the religious ones are the people in Walmart behind the displays. Hahaha! Sorry couldn't resists. No loss!
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LOL! That is so funny! You could be right. Lol. Thank you, John, you really made my day. xx
Comment from Yuffie
I've been meaning to read this for so long, and I'm glad I finally did! What an excellent start. The beginning is captivating. Who is this man? Why does he only appear in her dreams? Those are some vivid dreams! I have a feeling he's going to be handsome with an attitude. Great job, love it.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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I've been meaning to read this for so long, and I'm glad I finally did! What an excellent start. The beginning is captivating. Who is this man? Why does he only appear in her dreams? Those are some vivid dreams! I have a feeling he's going to be handsome with an attitude. Great job, love it.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Thank you so very much for starting at the beginning, Yuffie, and what a lovely review. All is not what it seems, as our lady will soon be finding out. Thank you for that lovely sixth star, too, that was so kind of you. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from ShirleyT1
What a great and intriguing prologue, that definitely left this reader wanting more of your well written story. I'm looking forward to seeing who this mystery person is!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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What a great and intriguing prologue, that definitely left this reader wanting more of your well written story. I'm looking forward to seeing who this mystery person is!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for reading my prologue, Shirley! I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. Chapter One has now been posted if you'd like to read it. :)) Have a wonderful New Year, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This story is very captivating. The man that seeks her interest is a little scary; he must be someone that is haunting her from the past. Is he someone who was her best friend?
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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This story is very captivating. The man that seeks her interest is a little scary; he must be someone that is haunting her from the past. Is he someone who was her best friend?
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Yes, you have it half right, I can't tell you more than that at the moment, but you will learn more about him in a few chapters time. Thank you again, Rosemary, for another lovely review. Have a wonderful week. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from lyenochka
This was quite the dramatic beginning. I wonder why the book is entitled "The Return." It makes sense if the phantom lover is someone she knew in the past. Great start, Sandra!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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This was quite the dramatic beginning. I wonder why the book is entitled "The Return." It makes sense if the phantom lover is someone she knew in the past. Great start, Sandra!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Helen! The title will soon be self-explanatory, chapter one gives a hint, chapter two makes it clearer and chapter three... (I'm working on it! Lol. I do hope you will enjoy it. Thank you for reading my prologue, I was cringing as I posted it, waiting for it to be slated, but it really was necessary. Have a lovely week, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from JudyE
Great to see a new story from you. I hope your Christmas was a blast and that the New Year will bring many blessings.
Just a couple of comments but feel free to ignore them:
sending infinite ripples of exquisite, tingling sensations to her most intimate parts - I might have used 'regions' rather than 'parts' but it's of little consequence.
Her cheeks flushed, heightening her fair complexion, and with eyes closed she wallowed in the feather-light fingers that stroked and tormented. - comma needed after 'closed'
He just came to torment her in her sleep. - I might have replaced 'just' with 'only' or 'only ever'
With best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Great to see a new story from you. I hope your Christmas was a blast and that the New Year will bring many blessings.
Just a couple of comments but feel free to ignore them:
sending infinite ripples of exquisite, tingling sensations to her most intimate parts - I might have used 'regions' rather than 'parts' but it's of little consequence.
Her cheeks flushed, heightening her fair complexion, and with eyes closed she wallowed in the feather-light fingers that stroked and tormented. - comma needed after 'closed'
He just came to torment her in her sleep. - I might have replaced 'just' with 'only' or 'only ever'
With best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Thank you again for another helpful review, Judy. I was wracking my brain trying to find that word, 'regions' but my mind went blank. Thank you for finding it for me!! Lol. I've made the other corrections with the comma and the 'just'. Thanks so much!
Yes, we had a lovely Christmas, I hope you did as well. :)) Warm hugs, my friend, and a Happy New Year! Sandra xxx