Transformed by His Life!
Discovering Jesus changed me.35 total reviews
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Beautiful testimony through this wonderful poem, sister! Powerfully worded and presented in a lovely, artistic manner. Your Mummu left you a strong legacy of faith, and I have no doubt that she was praying for you, for many years! Your author notes are very good in giving some background to your testimony. We absolutely do have a God-shaped void, in each of us. It is a great moment, when we come to acknowledge it.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2021
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Beautiful testimony through this wonderful poem, sister! Powerfully worded and presented in a lovely, artistic manner. Your Mummu left you a strong legacy of faith, and I have no doubt that she was praying for you, for many years! Your author notes are very good in giving some background to your testimony. We absolutely do have a God-shaped void, in each of us. It is a great moment, when we come to acknowledge it.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2021
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Thank you Mary Kay!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Now you know, feel Jesus is real, He is in your heart, after your grandma died, life changed, Jesus is the light of your world, you believe and find, at this age with husband and four children; now your spirit reborn; your life is transformed by Him; well said, well done; keep writing. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2021
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Now you know, feel Jesus is real, He is in your heart, after your grandma died, life changed, Jesus is the light of your world, you believe and find, at this age with husband and four children; now your spirit reborn; your life is transformed by Him; well said, well done; keep writing. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
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Comment Written 22-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2021
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Thank you for your review!
Comment from Mrs. J.B
This is one of the best poems I have ever read. The picture itself is so mind-blowing and captivating as it shows "Jesus being your light in your world" and very fascinating especially in the moment where you said "I spoke aloud to her God!" Saying "Jesus are you real?" "The room filled with a bright blinding light" and "you were never the same" after that. I can surely relate this to the poem because I had a moment in my life when Jesus transformed my mind, body, heart and soul just when I thought it was all over for me. And He do it again and again.
There's no need for revision here, but the only thing that I will change is the word "void" where it says "He came and filled that void" which sounds a little vague since you already mentioned that "there was a deep emptiness inside" at the beginning.
here's a quick and simple suggestion: instead of using the word void say exactly what that void was or if it's too personal use broad words like content, uncertainty, relieved, free 1. Like for an ex, He removed all that brokenness and filled me with contentment 2. For another ex, He filled my void of uncertainty with His power
Other that this is surely a 6 star Life Changing poem!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2021
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This is one of the best poems I have ever read. The picture itself is so mind-blowing and captivating as it shows "Jesus being your light in your world" and very fascinating especially in the moment where you said "I spoke aloud to her God!" Saying "Jesus are you real?" "The room filled with a bright blinding light" and "you were never the same" after that. I can surely relate this to the poem because I had a moment in my life when Jesus transformed my mind, body, heart and soul just when I thought it was all over for me. And He do it again and again.
There's no need for revision here, but the only thing that I will change is the word "void" where it says "He came and filled that void" which sounds a little vague since you already mentioned that "there was a deep emptiness inside" at the beginning.
here's a quick and simple suggestion: instead of using the word void say exactly what that void was or if it's too personal use broad words like content, uncertainty, relieved, free 1. Like for an ex, He removed all that brokenness and filled me with contentment 2. For another ex, He filled my void of uncertainty with His power
Other that this is surely a 6 star Life Changing poem!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the help and reviewing.
Comment from Crystal Clear Visions
I love this poem. In order to fill the void we have within our souls; we must reconnect with God. Then, we shall feel safe, secure, and peaceful. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2021
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I love this poem. In order to fill the void we have within our souls; we must reconnect with God. Then, we shall feel safe, secure, and peaceful. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2021
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is a touching and well-written spiritual poem. I love the artwork you have added to the writing. I don't believe in organized religion, but I do believe in God. I wish you all the best in the contest. Hugs.
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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2021
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This is a touching and well-written spiritual poem. I love the artwork you have added to the writing. I don't believe in organized religion, but I do believe in God. I wish you all the best in the contest. Hugs.
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Comment Written 21-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2021
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Thank you for your review, I think if you can find a church you like that is great but I believe in a relationship to God, not religion as well.
