First Snow
fell the first week of December.5 total reviews
Comment from Mark D. R.
Congrats on this win Tempeste!
Do like your thief in the night contrasted with morning delight. You paired picture with words perfectly.
While 'it' does it for me, I have suggestion to make that line more definitive, except for 'day'.
Mark
P.S. Not being an English major, it is difficult for me to ever decide between 'as' and 'like.' Aware of the difference when I see an example, but not off the top of my hard head. LOL
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2021
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Congrats on this win Tempeste!
Do like your thief in the night contrasted with morning delight. You paired picture with words perfectly.
While 'it' does it for me, I have suggestion to make that line more definitive, except for 'day'.
Mark
P.S. Not being an English major, it is difficult for me to ever decide between 'as' and 'like.' Aware of the difference when I see an example, but not off the top of my hard head. LOL
Comment Written 27-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2021
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Thanks for the congratulations.. my mountains bewitched those that voted for this wee poem.
It ..is in reference to : first snow.
I usually put ..like
I don t think I ever put as .. I m sure there is a grammar rule that explains which on to use accordingly but I m too tired now to Google it ( biggrin)
Or maybe they are simply interchangeable ..
A thief comes at night ,silently and unexpectedly .. I thought those three elements described well the arrival of the first snow.
Sorry , I don t understand the part where you mention the word
DAY ???
It s late here and my brain is about to turn off .
Notte e Ciao!
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re day
it was meant as a substitute for your word ?it?
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But ..it .. is referring to the title : first snow ..
I went for a last pee wee before turning off light ( biggrin)
Night!
Comment from Sugarray77
Congratulations, Franca! This verse is perfectly formatted and resonated with your readers... especially at this time of year. To be able to look out and see that scenery each day must be fabulous. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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Congratulations, Franca! This verse is perfectly formatted and resonated with your readers... especially at this time of year. To be able to look out and see that scenery each day must be fabulous. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 22-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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Ciao Sugarray !
Actually, when I voted the page opened and I saw someone had given me my first vote ..
A couple of times I checked but there was always only one vote so I put my heart at peace .. after all I just won a contest days ago? so no big deal ..
Then something crazy happened .. from one vote I had 5 votes .
. it was quite funny because about 10 hours later I opened the page and went straight to the bottom thinking to see my entry there .. instead I finished going up slowly to the top .
I was speechless and my eyes were popping out.( laugh)
I have to thank my mountains ..they enchanted members ( biggrin)
Sorry for the long reply but it was so funny how the whole thing unfolded.
Merry Christmas Sugarray!
Comment from rhonnie69
Ciao poet: I thank you for sharing your wee witty ditty here. I like it in that it reminds me of a popular song of back in the day. I Changed a few words. It goes: "Late at night while you're sleeping first snow comes creeping around. An over night white delight what a breath taking sight on the ground. When I was a kid it was always a joy to wake up in the morning and find that..."WOW! It snowed last night!!" You have taken me back down memory lane. You are appreciated...thanx. Keep mastering your trade. Keep safe! God bless you, my friend. Cordially" rhonnie69.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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Ciao poet: I thank you for sharing your wee witty ditty here. I like it in that it reminds me of a popular song of back in the day. I Changed a few words. It goes: "Late at night while you're sleeping first snow comes creeping around. An over night white delight what a breath taking sight on the ground. When I was a kid it was always a joy to wake up in the morning and find that..."WOW! It snowed last night!!" You have taken me back down memory lane. You are appreciated...thanx. Keep mastering your trade. Keep safe! God bless you, my friend. Cordially" rhonnie69.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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Ciao Rhonnie!
I?m so glad my mountains brought back a sweet memory of a song you enjoyed when you were younger.
Yes, that surprise seeing the first snow as you wake up in the morning is overwhelming.
Thank you for the extra star ( smile).
Take care and keep warm!
Comment from Susan Newell
You have done very well with tour limited word count, even managing a rhyme. We've had our first snow, but it wasn't much. Then we were supposed to get a foot and only received a second dusting. So we are not snow covered, we are snow embellished. Nice job.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2021
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You have done very well with tour limited word count, even managing a rhyme. We've had our first snow, but it wasn't much. Then we were supposed to get a foot and only received a second dusting. So we are not snow covered, we are snow embellished. Nice job.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2021
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Glad you are now imbedded in snow. after all, what would Christmas be without snow, right ?
Glad you enjoyed my wee poem!
Merry Christmas and keep safe!
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It looks like it will melt away tomorrow with warm sun. Which is fine with me. We get enough snow that if we don't have to have it plowed I'm happy.
Merry Christmas to you.
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Yes , there is a down side to snow. . I have to remove tons with a snow shovel in the garden.
We live in the historical centre hence we don?t have a garage ,so I used to have to free my father s car from the snow which was not easy.
Take care, keep that fireplace going ( I love it but that too takes work to keep it clean ect) and
Merry Christmas!
Comment from MissMerri
I loved this beautiful little poem. It describes so perfectly a scene I experienced many times as a young girl living in the High Sierras. There is nothing quite like that first snowfall and the breath-taking scene as you first view it upon awakening. You have described it perfectly! Best of luck in this contest. MM
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2021
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I loved this beautiful little poem. It describes so perfectly a scene I experienced many times as a young girl living in the High Sierras. There is nothing quite like that first snowfall and the breath-taking scene as you first view it upon awakening. You have described it perfectly! Best of luck in this contest. MM
Comment Written 21-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2021
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I glad my wee poem brought back sweet memories of your teen hood in the High Sierras.
11 syllables are not a lot but going by your review I used them well.
Keep safe and
Merry Christmas!
