Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "Football Chapter 36 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-I like the photo you chose for the story.
-It was a good chapter that covered a few different issues.
-Things went well with Judy's dad so that was good.
-A good scene when Gabe arrived at Katherine's.
-There is always something interesting when
there are 4 boys, and Katherine's story
is beginning to come out.
-What that marriage must have been like for her.
-She is a wonderful mother, and I think she
and Gabe are very good for one another, too.
-Each has had their share of things in life,
and deserve the love they share.
-Have a wonderful Christmas and New Year!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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-I like the photo you chose for the story.
-It was a good chapter that covered a few different issues.
-Things went well with Judy's dad so that was good.
-A good scene when Gabe arrived at Katherine's.
-There is always something interesting when
there are 4 boys, and Katherine's story
is beginning to come out.
-What that marriage must have been like for her.
-She is a wonderful mother, and I think she
and Gabe are very good for one another, too.
-Each has had their share of things in life,
and deserve the love they share.
-Have a wonderful Christmas and New Year!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Ric Myworld
This story reminds me of all the cases I've known in life where people spent a lifetime with someone because it was what they were taught was the right thing to do. I'm glad it's traveling on the happier side. LOL. Thanks for sharing. I hope the wrist is close to well, or as close as it can be. Merry Christmas! It's nice to know there still a few I can say that to without worrying I might offend them. :-)
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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This story reminds me of all the cases I've known in life where people spent a lifetime with someone because it was what they were taught was the right thing to do. I'm glad it's traveling on the happier side. LOL. Thanks for sharing. I hope the wrist is close to well, or as close as it can be. Merry Christmas! It's nice to know there still a few I can say that to without worrying I might offend them. :-)
Comment Written 20-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement. As for the wrist, it's healing. Now as fast as I would like, but it's healing. I go back to the doctor Jan 4. We'll see then.
Comment from Jay Squires
Your novel is so popular, Barbara, if I don't catch it a few minutes after it posts, I lose my 50 % chance of a member-cent pump. Just kidding, of course. There is a reason it is so popular, though ... Your characters are so full of life and your storyline has so many turns without your losing track of the main thrust. Great job!
"Yes, Sir. I can't do into details, but the situation has been handled." [I'm sure someone's already fielded this, but I think you want to change the "do" to "go".]
On the way to the kitchen, he asked, "Guys, what does putting a puzzle together mean?" [I wish someone would explain to me what it means. It never got explained ... unless that's coming later.]
He picked up a puzzle piece. "I understand the gallon of ice cream. What does this mean?" [Okay, some explanation about the puzzle, but I personally feel you should have mentioned his seeing a puzzle earlier. It really had my head spinning.]
Great chapter!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Your novel is so popular, Barbara, if I don't catch it a few minutes after it posts, I lose my 50 % chance of a member-cent pump. Just kidding, of course. There is a reason it is so popular, though ... Your characters are so full of life and your storyline has so many turns without your losing track of the main thrust. Great job!
"Yes, Sir. I can't do into details, but the situation has been handled." [I'm sure someone's already fielded this, but I think you want to change the "do" to "go".]
On the way to the kitchen, he asked, "Guys, what does putting a puzzle together mean?" [I wish someone would explain to me what it means. It never got explained ... unless that's coming later.]
He picked up a puzzle piece. "I understand the gallon of ice cream. What does this mean?" [Okay, some explanation about the puzzle, but I personally feel you should have mentioned his seeing a puzzle earlier. It really had my head spinning.]
Great chapter!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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LOL I will work on the puzzle. I fixed the 'do' before. I am fixing it again. Maybe I forgot to save. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from MissMerri
This is a wonderful chapter for delineating the characters and also furthering the storyline. It shows clearly how the two adults feel about each other and hints at the boy's feelings about Gabriel as well. You manage to make all the characters seem very real and distinctly individual. I enjoyed this chapter very much. My only suggestion might be to have a bit fewer kisses. There were at least ten kisses exchanged in the last few paragraphs. Fewer might make each one more valuable. Just a thought. The story is totally captivating. MM
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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This is a wonderful chapter for delineating the characters and also furthering the storyline. It shows clearly how the two adults feel about each other and hints at the boy's feelings about Gabriel as well. You manage to make all the characters seem very real and distinctly individual. I enjoyed this chapter very much. My only suggestion might be to have a bit fewer kisses. There were at least ten kisses exchanged in the last few paragraphs. Fewer might make each one more valuable. Just a thought. The story is totally captivating. MM
Comment Written 19-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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I will consider fewer kisses. You brought up an interesting thought. Thank you.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Your chapter in the book Football - A Novel
Football Chapter 36 part 1
Barb, There are two things that I read; one is how Gabriel asks questions about George (why)
The second one is what is the thing about
Katherine is saying to Gabriel "Continue with the puzzle"?
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Your chapter in the book Football - A Novel
Football Chapter 36 part 1
Barb, There are two things that I read; one is how Gabriel asks questions about George (why)
The second one is what is the thing about
Katherine is saying to Gabriel "Continue with the puzzle"?
Gert
Comment Written 19-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Gabriel asked about George because he just found out that Katherine was abused, at least one. As for the second one, Gabriel told Katherine to continue with the puzzle and he have the boys clean their rooms.
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Thank you Barb, for your answers
Gert
Comment from Begin Again
You are doing an awesome job of introducing us to their past and how different things have affected how they react or respond to current events. In the meantime, we are watching each of them unfold and blossom into something new. A gentle but steady change and all for the good. I truly have enjoyed moving forward with Katherine and Gabriel.
Awesome, Barbara!
Hope your holiday season is a good one. Hugs, Carol
I can't do into details,
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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You are doing an awesome job of introducing us to their past and how different things have affected how they react or respond to current events. In the meantime, we are watching each of them unfold and blossom into something new. A gentle but steady change and all for the good. I truly have enjoyed moving forward with Katherine and Gabriel.
Awesome, Barbara!
Hope your holiday season is a good one. Hugs, Carol
I can't do into details,
Comment Written 19-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from Ben Colder
Right back to you on the Christmas wishes. This coach has made much progress into a romantic future in such a short time. The boys love him, and that's a good thing.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Right back to you on the Christmas wishes. This coach has made much progress into a romantic future in such a short time. The boys love him, and that's a good thing.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from lancellot
A well written chapter. Things seem to be going normally and the coach handled things with the parents and with his relationship with Kate well. Both remember what is at stake despite the normal emotions involved in a loving relationship.
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A well written chapter. Things seem to be going normally and the coach handled things with the parents and with his relationship with Kate well. Both remember what is at stake despite the normal emotions involved in a loving relationship.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from judiverse
It's a good think Gabriel is a good guy; Katherine already is letting him control her life, but at least he's not an evil person like her late husband. He's taken over with her sons, not that he isn't a good influence but he's really not in a position to do that at this time. Her concerns about Joel add another complication. I hope he doesn't have a serious problem, but what was going on in Katherine's marriage may have gotten to him. The older boys certainly picked up on it. Katherine was so young to handle such a marriage. Great work. judi
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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It's a good think Gabriel is a good guy; Katherine already is letting him control her life, but at least he's not an evil person like her late husband. He's taken over with her sons, not that he isn't a good influence but he's really not in a position to do that at this time. Her concerns about Joel add another complication. I hope he doesn't have a serious problem, but what was going on in Katherine's marriage may have gotten to him. The older boys certainly picked up on it. Katherine was so young to handle such a marriage. Great work. judi
Comment Written 19-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Wendy G
Another excellent chapter, which I enjoyed. The writing is calm and thoughtful. The characters are real, and many will identify with them. Thanks you for this post, Na if I don't read any more chapters before Christmas, I hope yours is blessed and meaningful, and happy.
Wendy
Typo: "council" should be "counsel" (as in "advise").
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Another excellent chapter, which I enjoyed. The writing is calm and thoughtful. The characters are real, and many will identify with them. Thanks you for this post, Na if I don't read any more chapters before Christmas, I hope yours is blessed and meaningful, and happy.
Wendy
Typo: "council" should be "counsel" (as in "advise").
Comment Written 19-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement. I have made the correction.
