Lost
Lost - Contest Entry12 total reviews
Comment from Artasylum
boy, did this grab me. My Mom was a paranoid schizophrenic and was lost somewhere. She surfaced occasionally. For one fleeting to moment she would be present and then she would quickly disappear... I really wish I had six ... thanks so much di
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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boy, did this grab me. My Mom was a paranoid schizophrenic and was lost somewhere. She surfaced occasionally. For one fleeting to moment she would be present and then she would quickly disappear... I really wish I had six ... thanks so much di
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Oh, Di, I'm sorry for your mom. It's tough when they zoom in and out.
I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
A very touching story and you show us the fear of this woman and her erratic behavior. She really was "lost" in her mind and yet the narrator is lovingly watching over her. Well narrated. Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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A very touching story and you show us the fear of this woman and her erratic behavior. She really was "lost" in her mind and yet the narrator is lovingly watching over her. Well narrated. Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Sally Law
Dear Chris,
This as stunning and stabbing and sanctifying all in one swat! My goodness, this is the best short this year. Welcome back, by the way, I've missed you terribly, and your fine writing. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for Christmas,
Sally XOs...
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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Dear Chris,
This as stunning and stabbing and sanctifying all in one swat! My goodness, this is the best short this year. Welcome back, by the way, I've missed you terribly, and your fine writing. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for Christmas,
Sally XOs...
Comment Written 23-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Sally! Merry Christmas to you and your family. I've missed you, too. I hope to do better this year :-)
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:)) XOs...
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This is so heart - wrenching. There is nothing as sad as seeing someone you care about in that condition. Best of luck in the contest and in all of your future endeavors.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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This is so heart - wrenching. There is nothing as sad as seeing someone you care about in that condition. Best of luck in the contest and in all of your future endeavors.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review!
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a poignant story and it reminds me of my own mother in her last days. You have told in a compassionate and understanding fashion that I also found touching. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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This is a poignant story and it reminds me of my own mother in her last days. You have told in a compassionate and understanding fashion that I also found touching. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Mary, for the kind review!
Comment from writer723
I really enjoyed the way your story unfolded. It was very engaging and entertaining. It drew me in and held my interest all the way through. You certainly have a gift as a writer. Your descriptive talent is excellent. Have a wonderful day!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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I really enjoyed the way your story unfolded. It was very engaging and entertaining. It drew me in and held my interest all the way through. You certainly have a gift as a writer. Your descriptive talent is excellent. Have a wonderful day!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much! What a kind review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Six stars mainly for the great originality of perspective in this tale of someone clearly in the grip of dementia and the patient and dutiful daughter acting as guardian.
Also noteworthy is the careful breaking up of the story into segments detailing the mother's action in the third person, punctuated by very brief first person sentences. This adds to the initial mystery and the poignancy of the final denouement.
Great job.
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Six stars mainly for the great originality of perspective in this tale of someone clearly in the grip of dementia and the patient and dutiful daughter acting as guardian.
Also noteworthy is the careful breaking up of the story into segments detailing the mother's action in the third person, punctuated by very brief first person sentences. This adds to the initial mystery and the poignancy of the final denouement.
Great job.
Steve
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Steve! What a kind review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We hate to see the deterioration of our parents and here you keep an eye on your Mother as she is frightened and confused, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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We hate to see the deterioration of our parents and here you keep an eye on your Mother as she is frightened and confused, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Dolly!
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of the poem reminisces an aged woman seemingly gliding through an array of items laid out for sale.
The work highlights her as CRAVING for something and not in anyway lost.
The simple addition of a boy running after her merely added to the preponderance of craving in the story as opposed to any one of them being lost.
Like the Greeks of old, you only succeeded in using a deus ex makina to simulate a lost scenario.
Nevertheless, your work makes for an exciting reading.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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The objective correlative of the poem reminisces an aged woman seemingly gliding through an array of items laid out for sale.
The work highlights her as CRAVING for something and not in anyway lost.
The simple addition of a boy running after her merely added to the preponderance of craving in the story as opposed to any one of them being lost.
Like the Greeks of old, you only succeeded in using a deus ex makina to simulate a lost scenario.
Nevertheless, your work makes for an exciting reading.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Thank you for reviewing.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Terry Broxson
An exceptional story for this contest, good luck. You have combined the season of the year, with the writing prompt, and life circumstances for a lot of people. As I read it, I wondered where the heck is this going? Great ending!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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An exceptional story for this contest, good luck. You have combined the season of the year, with the writing prompt, and life circumstances for a lot of people. As I read it, I wondered where the heck is this going? Great ending!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much!
