~ My God Above ~
A poem to God....4 total reviews
Comment from victoria hubbell
My favorite parts of this poem are
1. the title
2. the line, "A Christian, a sinner, I am it all."
I am a not a knowledgable reviewer of poetry, but as I have always enjoyed the use of metered poetry, and I believe you wrote in iambic tetrameter.
I'm wondering if it might read a bit more seamless if you wrote, "With you I have an eternal bond." It seemed to me as though the word "for" was not necessary.
Thank you for sharing this. I found it inspirational and heartfelt.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
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My favorite parts of this poem are
1. the title
2. the line, "A Christian, a sinner, I am it all."
I am a not a knowledgable reviewer of poetry, but as I have always enjoyed the use of metered poetry, and I believe you wrote in iambic tetrameter.
I'm wondering if it might read a bit more seamless if you wrote, "With you I have an eternal bond." It seemed to me as though the word "for" was not necessary.
Thank you for sharing this. I found it inspirational and heartfelt.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
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Thank you so very much for the beautiful and encouraging words. I also fully respect and appreciate your honesty for change. Happy Holidays
Comment from Melodie Michelle
A wonderful heartfelt poem about God and perfect for the
writing prompt contest! Best wishes on the win;-)
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-(
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
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A wonderful heartfelt poem about God and perfect for the
writing prompt contest! Best wishes on the win;-)
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-(
Comment Written 17-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
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Thank you so very much!! I really do appreciate your kind words and best wishes. Happy Holidays to you & your loved ones as well
Comment from tfawcus
I found this to be a well-framed prayer. The sincere outpouring illustrates your faith well. I notice that, with the exception of the first stanza, this has been composed entirely in rhymed couplets. I wondered if there had been a particular reason for the first stanza being unrhymed.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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I found this to be a well-framed prayer. The sincere outpouring illustrates your faith well. I notice that, with the exception of the first stanza, this has been composed entirely in rhymed couplets. I wondered if there had been a particular reason for the first stanza being unrhymed.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Well that was completely my own error yet I published it anyway. I hope it sounds good still. Thank you for your beautiful, kind words. You gave a very special gift tonight, a much needed smile
Comment from Paul McFarland
I would like to see better rhyme in the first stanza. The meter needs some work to make the reading more smooth. The storyline is very good and with a little work, you will have a good one.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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I would like to see better rhyme in the first stanza. The meter needs some work to make the reading more smooth. The storyline is very good and with a little work, you will have a good one.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Thank you so very much for your honesty. I truly appreciate and respect that
