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Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, you have 8 votes now!
Good thing I don't go out often cause I can't go pass without leaving money .
My cousin tries to pull me away and says I m nuts .they ll just use it for drugs or booze.
Maybe she's right but maybe not .. many are ex soldiers that fought for their country but when they returned all messed up the government looked the other way.
This format seems easy but to make the narrative flow is actually quite a challenge.
Thumbs up for both flow and content!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2022
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Ciao mystery poet, you have 8 votes now!
Good thing I don't go out often cause I can't go pass without leaving money .
My cousin tries to pull me away and says I m nuts .they ll just use it for drugs or booze.
Maybe she's right but maybe not .. many are ex soldiers that fought for their country but when they returned all messed up the government looked the other way.
This format seems easy but to make the narrative flow is actually quite a challenge.
Thumbs up for both flow and content!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2022
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Thank you. Yes I'm glad you got the point and understand the problem.
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You are welcome !
Congratulations for shared red ribbon win.
I wish you had just got another vote , damn it ( sigh)
Keep safe!
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, excellent comment, excellent loop format.
Of special note:
Minds coming home were rattled and lost
Lost and forgotten for they'd paid the cost
Cost now ignored they stumble alone
Alone in the streets they call their home
(The sad essence of this poem)
A poem of truth. Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Hello author, excellent comment, excellent loop format.
Of special note:
Minds coming home were rattled and lost
Lost and forgotten for they'd paid the cost
Cost now ignored they stumble alone
Alone in the streets they call their home
(The sad essence of this poem)
A poem of truth. Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thank you. I've met a few of these people that eventually found their way off the streets that they never should have ended up on in the first place.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Every word of this poem rings true! Never should a veteran be homeless. Homeless when he/she fought to keep us free so we can work and afford a home to live comfortably in. But, he lives on a sidewalk in a cardboard box. Illegal aliens being brought into our country with the possibility of giving us a fatal illness are being housed in hotels and fed with our tax dollars, while our veterans receive far less if anything at all. What's wrong with this picture??? Good luck with the contest. You have my vote!
Patty
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Every word of this poem rings true! Never should a veteran be homeless. Homeless when he/she fought to keep us free so we can work and afford a home to live comfortably in. But, he lives on a sidewalk in a cardboard box. Illegal aliens being brought into our country with the possibility of giving us a fatal illness are being housed in hotels and fed with our tax dollars, while our veterans receive far less if anything at all. What's wrong with this picture??? Good luck with the contest. You have my vote!
Patty
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the stars I'm glad you read my poem and took the time to share your thoughts with me. The ones I've met eventually found their way off the streets but their minds were still so shell shocked they will never be able to live a normal life.
Comment from TJ70
Excellent. This poem brings attention to something we should all be more aware of and concerned with. It is simply amazing to me we have idolized an entire group of people who pretend to be heroes on a screen, while we have so many actually heroes' stories we could be telling.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2021
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Excellent. This poem brings attention to something we should all be more aware of and concerned with. It is simply amazing to me we have idolized an entire group of people who pretend to be heroes on a screen, while we have so many actually heroes' stories we could be telling.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2021
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But the real hero stories don't have a happy ending. We don't have parades or wave flags for the ones that lost their minds for their country.
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I agree, and it is time you all come out of your anonymity. We understand what happened and love you all for it. "Blind contest entry."
Comment from Anne Johnston
This loop poem is well written, easy to read. But such a sad story. It is unbelievable that people who gave their lives to defend our freedom would find themselves homeless. Something is definitely wrong.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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This loop poem is well written, easy to read. But such a sad story. It is unbelievable that people who gave their lives to defend our freedom would find themselves homeless. Something is definitely wrong.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2021
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Thank you. The ones that I have met came back from the trenches with severe mental trauma that should have been dealt with before their discharge.
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You are welcome
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent poem for the Loop Poetry Contest and good luck on the win! You adhered to the rules of the contest and your words flowed nicely;-)
Thank you so much for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Excellent poem for the Loop Poetry Contest and good luck on the win! You adhered to the rules of the contest and your words flowed nicely;-)
Thank you so much for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)
Comment Written 15-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very good loop poem. This tells a story that unfolds before our very eyes. One thing that really gets me is the homeless who are not vets who are riding on the coattails of those who are vets.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Very good loop poem. This tells a story that unfolds before our very eyes. One thing that really gets me is the homeless who are not vets who are riding on the coattails of those who are vets.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Thank you. I have met a few of these people that came back from one war or another that should have been helped back into society before their release from the military. The ones I've met only spent a couple years on the street before returning to some semblance of normal.
