A Bar of Soap
Visiting Grandmother59 total reviews
Comment from Raven Tale
That twist ending was at once hilarious and terrifying (coming from someone who has also had a mouthful of soap). As such I was very glad to read in your footnote that there was not another soaping.
Excellent work.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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That twist ending was at once hilarious and terrifying (coming from someone who has also had a mouthful of soap). As such I was very glad to read in your footnote that there was not another soaping.
Excellent work.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Thank you, I think the first grandson could get away with about anything. Terry.
Comment from lancellot
A very nice story from your past. Learning about your parents from the grandparents is an incredible gift, not to be missed. There was no grandchild getting soap in their mouth, in this story. They get away with everything.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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A very nice story from your past. Learning about your parents from the grandparents is an incredible gift, not to be missed. There was no grandchild getting soap in their mouth, in this story. They get away with everything.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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LOL, Yes, they do! Thank you, Terry.
Comment from Mary Shifman
Such a cute story. I have to admit, I would have laughed, too. I enjoyed this bit of flash fiction. You did a good job with so few words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Such a cute story. I have to admit, I would have laughed, too. I enjoyed this bit of flash fiction. You did a good job with so few words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Thank you, she did laugh, I think more at the memory of what she did to her son, than what I said. Terry.
Comment from Michele Harber
This is very funny, and you couldn't have picked a more perfect closing line. I doubt there was anyone of a certain generation for whom that bar of soap wasn't the ultimate threat. Similarly, there's probably no kid who didn't try to get dirt on their parents, if for nothing more than to validate their own behavior. In short, this is a cute and very relatable story.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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This is very funny, and you couldn't have picked a more perfect closing line. I doubt there was anyone of a certain generation for whom that bar of soap wasn't the ultimate threat. Similarly, there's probably no kid who didn't try to get dirt on their parents, if for nothing more than to validate their own behavior. In short, this is a cute and very relatable story.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much! Terry.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from MissMerri
Very funny, Terry ... and I really like the way you told this story. It was pretty neat the way you set this up so that the punchline was a sudden surprise but this picture (as you described the scene) was so clear. Who wouldn't laugh? Very nice!!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Very funny, Terry ... and I really like the way you told this story. It was pretty neat the way you set this up so that the punchline was a sudden surprise but this picture (as you described the scene) was so clear. Who wouldn't laugh? Very nice!!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Thank you. Coming from a writer as good as you, that means a lot. Terry.
Comment from Sallyo
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Goodness, Terry - that was a bit of fun from the past! I love reading these short anecdotes from what seems so long ago. It's not, really. I remember the 60s well, and I can just imagine this scene. My dad, who was a good churchgoing man, a dairy farmer and also part Irish with the complexion and the temperament to match, used to tell the cows off when they misbehaved. He'd yell, "Jam and butter the muddy bucket of pitch!" And then an hour later he'd be singing hymns. He had a loud voice, so the church folk could hear him across the paddocks. The cows didn't care. He always said a little colourful language was MUCH kinder than slapping them.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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collar,dragged
collar, dragged
to dad
to Dad
Goodness, Terry - that was a bit of fun from the past! I love reading these short anecdotes from what seems so long ago. It's not, really. I remember the 60s well, and I can just imagine this scene. My dad, who was a good churchgoing man, a dairy farmer and also part Irish with the complexion and the temperament to match, used to tell the cows off when they misbehaved. He'd yell, "Jam and butter the muddy bucket of pitch!" And then an hour later he'd be singing hymns. He had a loud voice, so the church folk could hear him across the paddocks. The cows didn't care. He always said a little colourful language was MUCH kinder than slapping them.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Thanks for the input, changes will be made. You should write the story of your dad! Terry.
Comment from prettybluebirds
I remember the old bar of soap threat. I never experienced it but I watched my brothers get the soap a few times. I love this short true story. It is nicely done and gave me my laugh for the day. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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I remember the old bar of soap threat. I never experienced it but I watched my brothers get the soap a few times. I love this short true story. It is nicely done and gave me my laugh for the day. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much! Terry.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Like Father, like Son, right? You did a great job with your contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. I like the dialogue and the unexpected ending. I could 'see' Granny laughing at your comment.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Like Father, like Son, right? You did a great job with your contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. I like the dialogue and the unexpected ending. I could 'see' Granny laughing at your comment.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much. I do think she may have laughed at the memory of what she did to Dad. Terry.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Hahaha! This is truly a delightful and funny Grandmother story. Like father like son. A chip off the old block. You gave the reader backstory, followed by realistic dialogue, and finally the surprise twist at the end. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Hahaha! This is truly a delightful and funny Grandmother story. Like father like son. A chip off the old block. You gave the reader backstory, followed by realistic dialogue, and finally the surprise twist at the end. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much, I appreciate that! Terry.
Comment from Raul1
This is some kind of true story. I think that I believe every word it said. It is interesting and real funny. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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This is some kind of true story. I think that I believe every word it said. It is interesting and real funny. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Buddy, I appreciate it! Terry.
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You're welcome!
