Call the Ghostbusters!
Ghostbusters busts the evil spirits.6 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Ghostbusters are investigators of tax fraud; or someone who wants to banish ghosts. Ghost writing is someone who writes for a named author. I wonder how much a ghostbusters charge per hour when they write for a named author? Like your poem but I don't think your poem is talking about either of these definitions.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2021
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Ghostbusters are investigators of tax fraud; or someone who wants to banish ghosts. Ghost writing is someone who writes for a named author. I wonder how much a ghostbusters charge per hour when they write for a named author? Like your poem but I don't think your poem is talking about either of these definitions.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Write a Rictameter writing prompt contest.
Your rictameter has 9 lines with the right syllable count and the last lines word/s identical to the first. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2021
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Excellent entry for the Write a Rictameter writing prompt contest.
Your rictameter has 9 lines with the right syllable count and the last lines word/s identical to the first. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from royowen
I haven't seen a rictameter for a long time, and not only this one, but it's cousins the etheree or the nonet poems. This is a superbly written poem, with a very well known and popular theme, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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I haven't seen a rictameter for a long time, and not only this one, but it's cousins the etheree or the nonet poems. This is a superbly written poem, with a very well known and popular theme, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Modee
Isn't that the common answer to anyone asking 'who ya gonna call?' - ghostbusters. haha. Nice work with this contest entry. Cool, perfect picture, too. :)
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Isn't that the common answer to anyone asking 'who ya gonna call?' - ghostbusters. haha. Nice work with this contest entry. Cool, perfect picture, too. :)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, my! Not another round of attacks by those nasty ghosts! I think we all remember those trying times - and hey, aren't most of those original Ghostbusters gone now - or way past their prime? They may be needing a second or third generation to step up! hahaha
Notes:
1.) ghosts are (roaming) around the streets.
2.) New York City will be all saved,
--> a BIT of awkward wording - maybe:
--> New York City will all be saved
--> All lives in New York will be saved
3.) Most importantly - though your syllable counts are all just right, and you've done a great job in creating the presentation - looks sharp! You are missing a very important part of the contest challenge AND a major requirement. Notice the last part of the contest description:
--> A rictameter has 9 lines with a syllable count of 2, 4, 6, 8, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2, with the last lines word/s identical to the first.
--> your first line ('Call the') and your last line ('mess up') do NOT match! That's definitely cause for disqualification when the entries go to the voting booth. You need to hurry and edit!
Hope this makes sense? If you have any questions, you can holler back at me - OR - go look at any of the other entries to see how they have composed their pieces. Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, my! Not another round of attacks by those nasty ghosts! I think we all remember those trying times - and hey, aren't most of those original Ghostbusters gone now - or way past their prime? They may be needing a second or third generation to step up! hahaha
Notes:
1.) ghosts are (roaming) around the streets.
2.) New York City will be all saved,
--> a BIT of awkward wording - maybe:
--> New York City will all be saved
--> All lives in New York will be saved
3.) Most importantly - though your syllable counts are all just right, and you've done a great job in creating the presentation - looks sharp! You are missing a very important part of the contest challenge AND a major requirement. Notice the last part of the contest description:
--> A rictameter has 9 lines with a syllable count of 2, 4, 6, 8, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2, with the last lines word/s identical to the first.
--> your first line ('Call the') and your last line ('mess up') do NOT match! That's definitely cause for disqualification when the entries go to the voting booth. You need to hurry and edit!
Hope this makes sense? If you have any questions, you can holler back at me - OR - go look at any of the other entries to see how they have composed their pieces. Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you! I have fixed the mistakes. Is it now good enough for a five stars rating? Please check.
Comment from icetraigh
Sorry to be critical, but the third line has seven syllables in it, and there's a misspelling in the fourth line. Maybe instead of "help," you could go with " "a hand?" Other than that, it's a fun, easy topic. Did you go out and see Afterlife recently, too? ;)
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Sorry to be critical, but the third line has seven syllables in it, and there's a misspelling in the fourth line. Maybe instead of "help," you could go with " "a hand?" Other than that, it's a fun, easy topic. Did you go out and see Afterlife recently, too? ;)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you! I have fixed the mistakes. Is it now good enough for a five stars rating? Please check.
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Well shoot. That line still has 7 syllables in it. How about "If you require assistance?" :)
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Wait. My bad. That makes it 8 syllables. Oh man, I've gotten all tangle up in this one LOL. How about "If you require help?" That's 6. :P
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You got both wrong. One should have six syllables. The wrong verses you got 7 syllables and the next one five syllables. Do you know anything about poetry? I don't mean to offend you. If you don't then you aren't ready to reviews poems from elite poets. Do you need any help reviewing?
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And you got this reply wrong. The OP changed the entire first half of the poem, so what you're critiquing isn't even correct. Let me know if you'd like some assistance with this whole reviewing and replying system. I know it can be hard for simpler people. No offense, of course. :)
