Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I can imagine this set of lyrics being set to music. They seem to flow with a musical rhythm. Nicely done.

I wasn't sure about 'dieing' so I looked it up. This is where the good ship Google led me:
Dying is most used as the present participle of the verb to die, i.e. to cease to live. ... Dieing - a very uncommon word - is the present participle of the verb to die, but specifically in the sense of cutting metals with a tool called a die or die-cast machine.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021

Well thanks for your review and time tfawcus.
And, since I do like the write.
And, I like to write everything. I have of course written several hundred songs in past 18 years.
Ricky

Comment from Maria Amira

Exceptional

Very catchy "brown eyed girl..dont you know..wrapped around my finger..lalalala let it linger" ....as I'm singing what I remember instantly off top as to what caught my attention off the bat very commendable work of art ..a true artist is what I'd say to this pretty song(:

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021

Well one day?
I hope to turn my poetry.
(not into books as much)
But into music and maybe?
Yes, start a band!
Yes!
And, sing and dance myself into a Pulitzer?
And, see how far I can go without tripping on my face!
Thanks Maria do stop by again and be entertained?
Hopefully?
Doctor Ricky 1024