Comment from SimianSavant

Needs Improvement

Perhaps this is unfair but I bet you spent about 30 seconds writing this. Even by my sardonic standard, this lacks effort. You can do better than self-referential poetry.

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 Comment Written 03-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021

Thanks for the review. I can always count on you for good criticism. I'm not a fan of the short stuff but thought I'd give this one a try. It took me more than thirty seconds to come up with this. I'll try for the thirty second time restriction next time. You're making it kind of hard for me to vote for Harambe.

reply by SimianSavant on 04-Dec-2021

Yeah I am sure my ridiculous entry will not win. 3-5-3 is very short and hard to work with, to be fair. 5-7-5 is a big difference. The suggestion someone gave me recently is to try writing 50 of them and then pick the best one. I have done, maybe, like six. Some of them did take about 30 seconds . . . and most of them sucked : )

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021

Don't be so hard on yourself.

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

These short-short writings are so hard to review because one doesn't really know what to say about them. It looks great to me and the artwork is perfect for the subject of the writing. I wish you all the luck in the world in the contest.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021

Thanks for the review. I have a more difficult time writing these short ones than I do the long ones.

Comment from Tsukuyomi969

Excellent

Hahaha nice! It's hard to write things with so much structure, and this was a nice nudge at that. The picture too was perfect. Good luck in the contest!

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 Comment Written 03-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021

Thanks for the nudge.