A Daydreamer's Kind Of Day
Sometimes I need to just take life easy4 total reviews
Comment from CL Huth
A very sweet poetic offering. I have a lot of those days. Good job! And good luck in the contest.
Technical points:
I think the flow would move better, if you replaces the 'and' in the second line with a comma. I read it aloud with and without, and it felt better in my mouth without it.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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A very sweet poetic offering. I have a lot of those days. Good job! And good luck in the contest.
Technical points:
I think the flow would move better, if you replaces the 'and' in the second line with a comma. I read it aloud with and without, and it felt better in my mouth without it.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much. I think you are right about the "and" but I needed it for the sake of the 30 syllable rule.
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Yeah, that makes it hard!
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Such a clever little poem. A perfect 30 syllables. Perfect choice of artwork. Great rhyme. But, what I loved most was the attitude of the poem. The empowerment of choice to do whatever it is you want to do based on how you feel.
This is a great entry for the contest!
Gale
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Such a clever little poem. A perfect 30 syllables. Perfect choice of artwork. Great rhyme. But, what I loved most was the attitude of the poem. The empowerment of choice to do whatever it is you want to do based on how you feel.
This is a great entry for the contest!
Gale
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you!!
Comment from jaded831
What a life, it makes me want to join in on the fun. Retirement is such a great reward after working hard. Your poem reminds me to enjoy the simple things and it gave me a chuckle. Thank you for your relaxing poem, it took me on a mini vacation.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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What a life, it makes me want to join in on the fun. Retirement is such a great reward after working hard. Your poem reminds me to enjoy the simple things and it gave me a chuckle. Thank you for your relaxing poem, it took me on a mini vacation.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-You have used your 30
syllables well with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the contrast in moods
from laughing and singing
to just wanting to relax
and "dream the time away."
-I like your ending; good
luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-You have used your 30
syllables well with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the contrast in moods
from laughing and singing
to just wanting to relax
and "dream the time away."
-I like your ending; good
luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you
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You are welcome.
