The Season of Giving
That's what Christmas Is5 total reviews
Comment from samantha0930
I was confused by the nativity picture at first because you didn't reference anything religious until halfway through so I thought maybe it wasn't going to fit with the context of the poem, but I supposed it works with the poem since you did mention Jesus, although you did talk mostly about the other parts of Christmas. I do like that you mentioned all the different parts of Christmas though. I don't know how you meant to capitalize your lines because you have it kind of mixed up. You started out only capitalizing the beginning of sentences, and then you switch to capitalizing every line instead. I'd suggest changing it to be either one way or the other so that your whole poem has consistent grammar/formatting. The last line also reads a little weird to me. Maybe you could change it to something like, "There's sleigh rides, decorated trees, / Also movies, pageants, and plays." I think it would read more smoothly that way. Do people have Christmas themed beauty pageants? I've never heard of those ones before. Are they much different than the regular ones?
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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I was confused by the nativity picture at first because you didn't reference anything religious until halfway through so I thought maybe it wasn't going to fit with the context of the poem, but I supposed it works with the poem since you did mention Jesus, although you did talk mostly about the other parts of Christmas. I do like that you mentioned all the different parts of Christmas though. I don't know how you meant to capitalize your lines because you have it kind of mixed up. You started out only capitalizing the beginning of sentences, and then you switch to capitalizing every line instead. I'd suggest changing it to be either one way or the other so that your whole poem has consistent grammar/formatting. The last line also reads a little weird to me. Maybe you could change it to something like, "There's sleigh rides, decorated trees, / Also movies, pageants, and plays." I think it would read more smoothly that way. Do people have Christmas themed beauty pageants? I've never heard of those ones before. Are they much different than the regular ones?
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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It is a beautiful poem, better than good!
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I capitalized the beginning of every sentence.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely Kyrielle about Christmas, a time of giving, caring, sharing not only gifts but of ourselves. I do like your repeated line, it emphasis the point you are making. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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A lovely Kyrielle about Christmas, a time of giving, caring, sharing not only gifts but of ourselves. I do like your repeated line, it emphasis the point you are making. Nicely done.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thanks
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Comment from Frances Jean
A well written Kyrielle satisfying the requirements of the form and displaying vivid imagery. Christmas is a lovely time. My husband and I belong to a group of retires who make wooden toys to give away to underprivileged children at Christmas. It's very rewarding. Thanks for sharing Franky
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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A well written Kyrielle satisfying the requirements of the form and displaying vivid imagery. Christmas is a lovely time. My husband and I belong to a group of retires who make wooden toys to give away to underprivileged children at Christmas. It's very rewarding. Thanks for sharing Franky
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from E. Denison
This is really lovely, and such a wonderful opening to the Christmas season. I think the kyrielle format works well here, and I like that you have the first line repeating rather than the last. It serves better here as a primary theme, which you then expound upon in each quatrain. Wonderful paired image and coloration employed here as well. Thank you for sharing this work. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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This is really lovely, and such a wonderful opening to the Christmas season. I think the kyrielle format works well here, and I like that you have the first line repeating rather than the last. It serves better here as a primary theme, which you then expound upon in each quatrain. Wonderful paired image and coloration employed here as well. Thank you for sharing this work. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thanks very much!
Comment from oliver818
This poem capture the feeling of Christmas very well. There's a lot of detail and it evoked a lot of memories. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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This poem capture the feeling of Christmas very well. There's a lot of detail and it evoked a lot of memories. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thanks very much. The poems I write come from my heart. I appreciate your review and kind words.
