Dear Mt. Calvary
Loop poetry about a hill I love.21 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
What a lovely view you have from your office window. Thank you for a beautiful poem of faith. Your presentation is excellent and I love the colours you used. They are my favourites although that font is difficult to read when it is so small. Giddy
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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What a lovely view you have from your office window. Thank you for a beautiful poem of faith. Your presentation is excellent and I love the colours you used. They are my favourites although that font is difficult to read when it is so small. Giddy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you for this review. I will take a better look at the font!
Tina
Comment from SimianSavant
**Edit: I misunderstood the contest rules, and redact my earlier comments! Your piece does indeed appear to conform to the contest rules**
Sorry to say, this entry is going to end up getting disqualified because it does not come even close to observing the contest challenge conditions! Each line has to start with the previous word. At least phonetically anyway - I am toying with using homonyms in mine, and will see if it passes. But if you want to keep this in the contest you all probably want to make some changes before the deadline.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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**Edit: I misunderstood the contest rules, and redact my earlier comments! Your piece does indeed appear to conform to the contest rules**
Sorry to say, this entry is going to end up getting disqualified because it does not come even close to observing the contest challenge conditions! Each line has to start with the previous word. At least phonetically anyway - I am toying with using homonyms in mine, and will see if it passes. But if you want to keep this in the contest you all probably want to make some changes before the deadline.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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I believe each line does begin with the last word of the former line. Are you speaking of the way it is laid out on the page? Thank you for your suggestion. I will look at it now.
Tina
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I am referring to the way that the stanzas themselves do not follow those rules when going from one stanza to the next
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There are variations on loop poetry. I will contact the committee for clarification, so I thought that was acceptable. Thanks for the heads up:)
Tina
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It turns out I was mistaken. I did not read through the contest directions thoroughly, and instead had looked at some of the previous entries that misunderstood it. I have revised my review back up to a five, which you clearly deserve.
Comment from Hitcher
I have actually been to Israel (lived there for 15months), visited Jerusalem and The Church of the Holy Sepulchre which was built on the site - Calvary.
I did Easter mass inside its walls, an experience I will never forget : ))
An impressive Loop poem for the contest, good luck!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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I have actually been to Israel (lived there for 15months), visited Jerusalem and The Church of the Holy Sepulchre which was built on the site - Calvary.
I did Easter mass inside its walls, an experience I will never forget : ))
An impressive Loop poem for the contest, good luck!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Oh wow! I would love to go there and walk where the most important event in the history of mankind took place. Do you have any pictures you could share, maybe write about and post? Sorry if I am a bother and no pressure,ok? Just curious. I read that only about 5m of Calvary's hill is left, in the sepulchre.
Tina
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Oh wow! I would love to go there and walk where the most important event in the history of mankind took place. Do you have any pictures you could share, maybe write about and post? Sorry if I am a bother and no pressure,ok? Just curious. I read that only about 5m of Calvary's hill is left, in the sepulchre.
Tina
Comment from RGstar
The repeats were nice and smooth, did not obstruct the flow as the loop often can do if not written well.
Well presented.
Have a good weekend.
My best.
RGstar
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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The repeats were nice and smooth, did not obstruct the flow as the loop often can do if not written well.
Well presented.
Have a good weekend.
My best.
RGstar
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you, RG! The repeats came from a kyrielle influence, ad I started to write that form first. This was my first loop that I remember, so thank you again for your encouragement!
You have a good day, too!
Tina
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Thank you, RG! The repeats came from a kyrielle influence, ad I started to write that form first. This was my first loop that I remember, so thank you again for your encouragement!
You have a good day, too!
Tina
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You see this scene from your office window Tina? How very spiritual and soothing that must be. A fine loop poem skilfully written and surely a winner for the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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You see this scene from your office window Tina? How very spiritual and soothing that must be. A fine loop poem skilfully written and surely a winner for the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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I just changed the picture to my actual view. I have been a bit under the weather so I just put up an internet pic at first. Thank you for your encouraging words! I surely appreciate you!
Tina
Comment from nomi338
Congratulations, this is another fine example of loop poetry. Your subject was divinely inspired I think. I do not know what other reviewers think, but I feel that this was no walk in the park. Whenever one endeavors to write about religious matters, there is an obligation to get it right. To do this and still be poetic is a challenge not all can surmount.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Congratulations, this is another fine example of loop poetry. Your subject was divinely inspired I think. I do not know what other reviewers think, but I feel that this was no walk in the park. Whenever one endeavors to write about religious matters, there is an obligation to get it right. To do this and still be poetic is a challenge not all can surmount.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Your review is touching. Yes, it was tough! I used a whole eraser on it, lol! Thank you for your encouraging note! Surmount pun, lol
Tina
Comment from damommy
I think it's wonderful that you think of Mt. Calvary when you see your mountains. You've written a lovely loop poem about it, and I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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I think it's wonderful that you think of Mt. Calvary when you see your mountains. You've written a lovely loop poem about it, and I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much I appreciate your time and words:)
Tina
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
Dear Mt Calvary ' , is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. It was a privilege to both read and review this talented poet's work. To me this definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Dear Mt Calvary ' , is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. It was a privilege to both read and review this talented poet's work. To me this definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Why, thank you Duchess. You overwhelm me with this evening treat:)
I appreciate your thoughts, always!
Tina
Tina my possum you're very welcome.
Bless you and have a great day,
the Duchess
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Haha, that nickname! I am one blessed possum!
You have a great evening!
Tina
Tina, you're definitely a blessed possum.
Have a great week end and be good :)))
the Duchess
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I will be good...and a bit lazy! You be good too!
Possum
Comment from Wendy G
It is wonderful that you have a view which leads you to think of the One who did so much for us with His atoning sacrifice. A constant reminder. A lovely Loop poem poem, smoothly written and with fine rhyme. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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It is wonderful that you have a view which leads you to think of the One who did so much for us with His atoning sacrifice. A constant reminder. A lovely Loop poem poem, smoothly written and with fine rhyme. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Wendy. I so appreciate your input and good wishes for the contest!
Tina
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your loop poem is well done. Like you, I am thankful for Calvary where Jesus shed His blood to redeem us from sin. He paid the supreme sacrifice because of His love for us.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Your loop poem is well done. Like you, I am thankful for Calvary where Jesus shed His blood to redeem us from sin. He paid the supreme sacrifice because of His love for us.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Anne. Indeed He did! He could not possibly have done any more:) I appreciate you reading my poem.
Tina
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You are welcome, Tina
