The quirky thing ...
It runs in the family ....28 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
Another well-deserved win for you, Wendy. You've crafted a fine story that is almost unbelievable but is saved from an overdose of coincidence with its gentle emotion and details of family life, ending with the potential for a happily-ever-after family unit. Your story gave me warm fuzzies.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Another well-deserved win for you, Wendy. You've crafted a fine story that is almost unbelievable but is saved from an overdose of coincidence with its gentle emotion and details of family life, ending with the potential for a happily-ever-after family unit. Your story gave me warm fuzzies.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much. It was fun to write this from bits and pieces of my extended family situations. An interstate niece has a child with an IVF American donor. She visits her grandmother. My husband, son, and his three daughters (even the baby) all sneeze when they go into bright sunlight. So I just wondered "What if ....' and put it all together. Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the congratulations.
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Great story - your 'borrowings' and stitchings are the mark of a storyteller.
I sneeze in bright sunshine too. I am adopted... I wonder if we are related, haha.
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Wouldn't that be amazing!! Lol.
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Could be the basis for another story.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Like your story's version...family time was sought in the garden. But I don't know about the sneezing, must be what we would call allergies. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Like your story's version...family time was sought in the garden. But I don't know about the sneezing, must be what we would call allergies. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review. I appreciate it. Yes, sneezing can be triggered by sunlight. My husband, son, and son's three daughters (even the baby) all sneeze as soon as they go into the bright sun. (That's what prompted my story, although the story is fictional). I is sometimes hilarious watching them all sneeze, one after the other.
Comment from CL Huth
What a cute little story! You have my vote for this contest. I love how you built up the characters in such a short word count. And I didn't even see the ending coming. Wonderful!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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What a cute little story! You have my vote for this contest. I love how you built up the characters in such a short word count. And I didn't even see the ending coming. Wonderful!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Wonderful! Many thanks on all counts. A lovely review, and I am so glad you enjoyed my story. Did you give four stars for any particular reason, o I can improve it further? Suggestions welcome.
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I think within the constraints of the contest, it works, but there are a lot of places where dialogue would be more powerful to move the story forward. If you'd like a more in-depth critique, let me know. I really liked the story, but I think with your dialogue skills, it could be better outside of the word count constraints.
Comment from Begin Again
Truth, especially unexpected findings, can often be stranger than the fiction. You've done a fine job of weaving the generations together and offering a possibility that there is more than what meets the eyes. I enjoyed the story and wish you well.
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Truth, especially unexpected findings, can often be stranger than the fiction. You've done a fine job of weaving the generations together and offering a possibility that there is more than what meets the eyes. I enjoyed the story and wish you well.
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you Carol! A super review, and I am glad you understood the implication behind the sneezing! (My husband, son, and son's three daughters all sneeze when they go out into bright sun - can be quite humorous! That thought triggered my ending.)
Wendy
Comment from Bill Schott
Wow! That was a terrific conclusion to a well-constructed tale. All the players seem likeable and the final cinching of the improbable connection to young Jack. Neat.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Wow! That was a terrific conclusion to a well-constructed tale. All the players seem likeable and the final cinching of the improbable connection to young Jack. Neat.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much Bill! A great review, and I am glad you enjoyed the ending!
Wendy
Comment from prettybluebirds
I love it. what a unique and creative ending. It takes talent to do that and you have nailed it. I meant to review this story earlier today but never got to it. This is a great entry for the contest. I wish you tons of luck.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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I love it. what a unique and creative ending. It takes talent to do that and you have nailed it. I meant to review this story earlier today but never got to it. This is a great entry for the contest. I wish you tons of luck.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much for your lovely review, and good wishes. All appreciated. Wendy
Comment from Earl Corp
Good twist at the end, so Jack is Robert's biological son. Good addition to the Family story contest. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Good twist at the end, so Jack is Robert's biological son. Good addition to the Family story contest. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much for your great review and good wishes!
Wendy
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your story is very well written, and I like the title "the quirky thing." Could it be that Robert was the donor that had provided Linda with the sperm? Strange that Jack had the same quirk as Robert.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Your story is very well written, and I like the title "the quirky thing." Could it be that Robert was the donor that had provided Linda with the sperm? Strange that Jack had the same quirk as Robert.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Hi Anne, yes, it just could be ....Truth is sometimes stranger than fiction ....! (although most of this is fiction).
Many thanks for reviewing. I appreciate your reviews always.
Wendy
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You are welcome, Wendy
Comment from Susan Newell
Wendy,
This is a warm family story that demonstrates the value of multi-generational continuity, the value of simple kindness to strangers, and the mysteries of life as God somehow orders it. We know "they lived happily ever after."
Sue
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Wendy,
This is a warm family story that demonstrates the value of multi-generational continuity, the value of simple kindness to strangers, and the mysteries of life as God somehow orders it. We know "they lived happily ever after."
Sue
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you Susan. A great review, much appreciated. And .... was Robert the real father of Jack?
Wendy
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You are welcome. For the sake of tidy endings, we will assume that Roberts genes live on in Jack. :-)
Comment from Hitcher
Ha ha, nice little ending : )) you just never know when the stars will align and turn ones world upside down for all the right reasons.
A very cool, feel good story for the contest Wendy, good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Ha ha, nice little ending : )) you just never know when the stars will align and turn ones world upside down for all the right reasons.
A very cool, feel good story for the contest Wendy, good luck!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thanks so much - you obviously understood the implication of the ending! loved your review.
Wendy