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Exploring the meaning of grace

38 total reviews 
Comment from John Ciarmello
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This is a literal joy to read. A fabulous story of (old culture) clashing with (modern day) happenings. Marium, still, old school and subservient too not only her father, but her husband. The crippling accident at the finish took my breath away as I felt her not knowing what direction to turn. I felt Susan the heroine in this yarn. She gave me a sense of (It's going to be okay) as my boys give to me. A fine story of the month, Sir Theodore!

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2022


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
    Thanks for the great review of my story, John.
Comment from Sally Law
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Obviously, I have been busy with the holidays. My doctor called me with bad news regarding my heart health and I've had to completely change my eating so I will not drop dead from a heart attack. Holiday bummer....

Anyway, sorry to have missed this gem, and I see it won the prize! Congratulations!

My best to you and for the new year ahead.
Sal :)) XOs

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
    Thanks, Sal. I really hope everything is okay with your heart!
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A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
    Thank you for the seven stars. I'm not quite sure what that means, lol.
Comment from Annette R.
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This story is a bit unsettling as maybe it is meant to be. Leaves the reader to wonder what Mariam will do. Grace and cicadas were mentioned several times. I get this is an exploration of the meaning of grace. Not sure how the insects loud sound fits. Hoping she follows her daughter's advice as she can always visit both the father and husband daily without guilt.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2021

Comment from nomi338
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The abuse that some females suffer in childhood stays with them like a birthmark. Some of those scars are invisible to the eyes of others, but to the victim of abuse the scars could easily be in the center of their foreheads. Letting go of toxic influence can be one of the most difficult things to do, yet it is among the most important. It affects men also, but I think in a different way.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2021

Comment from RGstar
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Virtual Six

Great, great writing.
I wish I had more stars to give. From the stew to the contrast of sushi and eggplant, and the dialogues around the subject matter...excellent.
Thoroughly enjoyed.
I wish I could heap more praises...no need.
Excellent.

My best wishes.
Have a great Christmas.
RGstar

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2021

Comment from Anne Johnston
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Your story is so well written, showing the true meaning of grace and forgiveness. She had to make difficult choices at different points in her life, but she only wanted to do what was best for the other person.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
    Thanks for the review, Anne. Hopefully, we can follow each other's work in the future. thanks, Tim
reply by Anne Johnston on 03-Dec-2021
    You are welcome.
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
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This is a moving and very realistic story, well told and effective in getting the confusion and love/hatethat this lind of situation evokes in a person caught between their limits and their beliefs.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2021

Comment from BethShelby
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This is a beautiful but sad story you have created. You seem to have a good sense of how Mariam would feel and reacte to the changes in her life. My husband was never unfaithful, but I can imagine how I might feel if he had been. Women of my generation tend to be caregivers whether they are from the mid-east or not. I cared for my father when Mom died and I cared for my husband the last year of his life. I wouldn't be inclined to live with one of children and become a burden on them. I would imagine Mariam would feel she had no choice and would take on the responsibility of caring for both of them. The younger generation would see it differently. Mariam wants to assert her independence and I think it would take the form of deciding what to do without listening to her daughter, whos is trying to make the decision for her.

All you've ever know is subservience,,,,, ever known

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2021

Comment from RPSaxena
Exceptional
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Hello Theodore McDowell,
You have beautifully depicted the struggle of Mariam for her choices and ultimately, she seeks God's help in deciding to choose the right/ the best course in the remaining part of her life.
Lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology; captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, the end having a nice decision.
Flawless, and Laudable Presentation!

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
    Thanks so much for the great review and the six stars! I'm off to your portfolio to do some reading of your work.
reply by RPSaxena on 04-Dec-2021
    Theodore McDowell, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP