An angel fair
Her golden locks they shine so bright12 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is beautiful Joanne Gill. I love the flow of this piece. I hope you wrote this for a little girl in your life. She should cherish it as a keepsake in memory, and in life. Thank you and keep writing.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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This is beautiful Joanne Gill. I love the flow of this piece. I hope you wrote this for a little girl in your life. She should cherish it as a keepsake in memory, and in life. Thank you and keep writing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' An angel fair ' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a privilege to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2021
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' An angel fair ' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a privilege to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2021
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Thank you I got third place 🙂
Congratulations. You did well 💖
Comment from samantha0930
The poem is nice, but your periods are all over the place. I take it you wanted to put periods at the ends of sentences, but you missed 2 places that were full sentences, and you have periods in 3 places that aren't sentences. In the last line of your 3rd stanza you also put a space before the period, and in the 2nd line of your last stanza you forgot to capitalize the beginning of the line. These should be easy to fix so I hope that helps :)
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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The poem is nice, but your periods are all over the place. I take it you wanted to put periods at the ends of sentences, but you missed 2 places that were full sentences, and you have periods in 3 places that aren't sentences. In the last line of your 3rd stanza you also put a space before the period, and in the 2nd line of your last stanza you forgot to capitalize the beginning of the line. These should be easy to fix so I hope that helps :)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thanks
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Write a Kyrielle writing prompt contest. Lovely quatrains and the rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Excellent entry for the Write a Kyrielle writing prompt contest. Lovely quatrains and the rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you 🙂
Comment from Modee
As the grandfather of a wonderful little 9 year old girl, I can read this poem and appreciate it. I think it's a wonderful addition to this forum and the picture does it justice. I read it twice. It's wonderful. :)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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As the grandfather of a wonderful little 9 year old girl, I can read this poem and appreciate it. I think it's a wonderful addition to this forum and the picture does it justice. I read it twice. It's wonderful. :)
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much 🙂
Comment from Anne Johnston
A sweet picture and great words you have written to describe this little one. Rhyming is good and poem flows smoothly. Little girls are precious, angels given to us by the Lord to love and cherish.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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A sweet picture and great words you have written to describe this little one. Rhyming is good and poem flows smoothly. Little girls are precious, angels given to us by the Lord to love and cherish.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thank you
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You are welcome
Comment from Paul McFarland
A very nice job with an exotic form that I never heard of.
And since my God took you away
That sad and mournful winter day,
And set your precious spirit free,
An angel fair you are to me.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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A very nice job with an exotic form that I never heard of.
And since my God took you away
That sad and mournful winter day,
And set your precious spirit free,
An angel fair you are to me.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful poem and a lovely presentation, (although perhaps the font could be larger?), and your words flow very smoothly with the refrain of the repeated line. Very well written.
Wendy
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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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A beautiful poem and a lovely presentation, (although perhaps the font could be larger?), and your words flow very smoothly with the refrain of the repeated line. Very well written.
Wendy
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Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thanks
Comment from pookietoo
Lovely and lovely photo of an angel. There are many angels on earth and in heaven, angels that are unseen and seen. I wish you luck in thus contest.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Lovely and lovely photo of an angel. There are many angels on earth and in heaven, angels that are unseen and seen. I wish you luck in thus contest.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thankyou
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welcome
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23lcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You captured the innocence of a child here as they have no idea how they affect us and bring their joy as they learn of the world, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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You captured the innocence of a child here as they have no idea how they affect us and bring their joy as they learn of the world, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thank you
