A Fruitful Life
A trip through life57 total reviews
Comment from Senyai
HimJay,
A wonderful poem speaking volumes to your successful life well lived and deeply thoughtful advice to give those of us who need a perceptive voice to look to.
Thank you for your good words. They are forever a guide post along the way to rein us back in lest we forget the truly important things in life.
Stay safe and healthy :))
Senyai
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HimJay,
A wonderful poem speaking volumes to your successful life well lived and deeply thoughtful advice to give those of us who need a perceptive voice to look to.
Thank you for your good words. They are forever a guide post along the way to rein us back in lest we forget the truly important things in life.
Stay safe and healthy :))
Senyai
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
I enjoy your writing. You make a compelling point in this piece without being over dramatic. I can hear the echos of your experience behind your words.
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I enjoy your writing. You make a compelling point in this piece without being over dramatic. I can hear the echos of your experience behind your words.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
Comment from godlucifer
a joy of living is a joy of fullest life can offer. what life offer we must give and take. what we must give and take we must give back. the fullest life is the fullest enjoyment.
truly
godlucifer
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a joy of living is a joy of fullest life can offer. what life offer we must give and take. what we must give and take we must give back. the fullest life is the fullest enjoyment.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
Comment from pookietoo
A lovely poem with a lot of food for thought. It seems like you did a lot of thinking before you wrote this poem. Keep up the great work and keep smiling.
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A lovely poem with a lot of food for thought. It seems like you did a lot of thinking before you wrote this poem. Keep up the great work and keep smiling.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Jaybird1,
Nice piece of poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting the REAL meaning of life.
3rd stanza is particularly noteworthy.
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Hello Jaybird1,
Nice piece of poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting the REAL meaning of life.
3rd stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Healthy human life is a fruitful life. We sense this at a deep level. The model for fruitfulness is God. He created the universe in a magnificent display of His extravagance. I enjoyed this thought-provoking poem. Thanks for sharing!
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Healthy human life is a fruitful life. We sense this at a deep level. The model for fruitfulness is God. He created the universe in a magnificent display of His extravagance. I enjoyed this thought-provoking poem. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
Comment from SimianSavant
A thoughtful entry. I am only rating here based on the technical issues here distracting from your message - shoot me a message if you fix them and I will be happy to edit this up a star.
life will fill you with it's wonder/you gave to life it's fullest due <= both these instances should be ITS, not IT'S.
You must live it to the fullest, <= **change to semicolon or period **
in return for this you'll be blessed. ** in its current form, this is a run-on sentence.
No more tears or laughs await you, <= same thing here as above
Last thing: most of your rhymes work, with the exception of the first stanza. *You must live it to the FULLEST,
in return for this you'll be BLESSED.* It is sort of a near rhyme but I think you can do better : )
Thanks for the read!
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A thoughtful entry. I am only rating here based on the technical issues here distracting from your message - shoot me a message if you fix them and I will be happy to edit this up a star.
life will fill you with it's wonder/you gave to life it's fullest due <= both these instances should be ITS, not IT'S.
You must live it to the fullest, <= **change to semicolon or period **
in return for this you'll be blessed. ** in its current form, this is a run-on sentence.
No more tears or laughs await you, <= same thing here as above
Last thing: most of your rhymes work, with the exception of the first stanza. *You must live it to the FULLEST,
in return for this you'll be BLESSED.* It is sort of a near rhyme but I think you can do better : )
Thanks for the read!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
Comment from June Sargent
You do get out of life what you put into it. And joy increases in time if we live life to the fullest. Give without expecting anything in return - and you will never have regrets. A bountiful life is one with sweet memories.
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You do get out of life what you put into it. And joy increases in time if we live life to the fullest. Give without expecting anything in return - and you will never have regrets. A bountiful life is one with sweet memories.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
Comment from MFerg4084
I am not a poet nor do I ever read much poetry. However, your poem "A Fruitful Life" struck several chords in me. I am 69 years old and I can say that the words you wrote are as true as there will be a tomorrow. I really liked what you had to say. Thanks for sharing.
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I am not a poet nor do I ever read much poetry. However, your poem "A Fruitful Life" struck several chords in me. I am 69 years old and I can say that the words you wrote are as true as there will be a tomorrow. I really liked what you had to say. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
Comment from rspoet
Hello Jake,
This an excellent poem with very good rhymes and meter,
and a great message to live life to the fullest
and share it with someone you love.
Great example of a full life.
Well said.
Best wishes to all.
Robert
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Hello Jake,
This an excellent poem with very good rhymes and meter,
and a great message to live life to the fullest
and share it with someone you love.
Great example of a full life.
Well said.
Best wishes to all.
Robert
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
