Sipped
a poem13 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
Doesn't look too sanitary to me. Your lines are all nicely connected and read smoothly. I don't think I'd hang around that place waiting for someone to share a cup with. Fine alliteration with the S words and neat rhyme with lips and sip. judi
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Doesn't look too sanitary to me. Your lines are all nicely connected and read smoothly. I don't think I'd hang around that place waiting for someone to share a cup with. Fine alliteration with the S words and neat rhyme with lips and sip. judi
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Judi
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Very unique Bill. I find it one that can be interrupted by what the reader sees in the words. Very clever. I see infidelity. The poor sap waits for a partner who has found someone else.
Regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Very unique Bill. I find it one that can be interrupted by what the reader sees in the words. Very clever. I see infidelity. The poor sap waits for a partner who has found someone else.
Regards,
Mary
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Mary, for giving this a look.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Bill Schott
Your poem
"Sipped"
Brought smiles when you said---
"waiting for lips
which have found
another straw"
Gert
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Bill Schott
Your poem
"Sipped"
Brought smiles when you said---
"waiting for lips
which have found
another straw"
Gert
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Gert
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You are so welcome Bill
Gert
Comment from Sherry Asbury
What a little poem with more than one meaning!! It is really good and I love the picture... though sometimes the homeless will pick these up and drink while I gag and hold my tongue against the warning of illness - et al
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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What a little poem with more than one meaning!! It is really good and I love the picture... though sometimes the homeless will pick these up and drink while I gag and hold my tongue against the warning of illness - et al
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Sherry
Comment from lyenochka
There's something ominous about this cup and it's not clear if the liquid is going to be sipped or the soul. And I wonder what kind of building this window sill is - a mausoleum?
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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There's something ominous about this cup and it's not clear if the liquid is going to be sipped or the soul. And I wonder what kind of building this window sill is - a mausoleum?
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Perhaps it was on the set of Game of Thrones. They had a scene that made it to TV with a styrofoam coffee cup on a table.
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I heard about that - even though I haven't watched a single GOT episode.
Comment from Tina Crute
Ah...I like this poem/story about a lonely cup that lost its soul to someone who has now moved on. You've done something new and clever with minimal thoughts but major drama.
Well done and enjoyed!
Tina
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Ah...I like this poem/story about a lonely cup that lost its soul to someone who has now moved on. You've done something new and clever with minimal thoughts but major drama.
Well done and enjoyed!
Tina
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Tina
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Welcome!
Tina
Comment from Earl Corp
My Takeway is you're using the cup as a metaphor for someone cheating on somebody with another cup. Nice job. Have a blessed holiday season. Stay safe and stay healthy.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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My Takeway is you're using the cup as a metaphor for someone cheating on somebody with another cup. Nice job. Have a blessed holiday season. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Earl
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An abandoned cup leading behind someone's DNA! Ha ha ha, the have moved on to buy another cup to litter somewhere else, a fun write . . love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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An abandoned cup leading behind someone's DNA! Ha ha ha, the have moved on to buy another cup to litter somewhere else, a fun write . . love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Dolly, for the great review. Bill
Comment from nomi338
Aw Bill. Did you lose another lover? Sucks dose it not? I have been there. I have worn those shoes, those tight, too tight shoes. Since the last time that has happened, I have adopted a strategy of, end of a chapter, time to pick up another book and investigate this band new story. Using what I learned from the last book, I will not make the same mistake with this one.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Aw Bill. Did you lose another lover? Sucks dose it not? I have been there. I have worn those shoes, those tight, too tight shoes. Since the last time that has happened, I have adopted a strategy of, end of a chapter, time to pick up another book and investigate this band new story. Using what I learned from the last book, I will not make the same mistake with this one.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Not based on current events. Wife is still in her throne.
Comment from Sugarray77
Very unique, Bill. I just goes to show that any picture, moment, or thought can be used to inspire poetry! I would have thought you might have used the word "sip" as the last word to capture that rhyme with lips. Just a thought. :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Very unique, Bill. I just goes to show that any picture, moment, or thought can be used to inspire poetry! I would have thought you might have used the word "sip" as the last word to capture that rhyme with lips. Just a thought. :)
Melissa
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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You are so right. I changed it immediately. Thank you, Melissa,
